• Time

    Time

    six word poem
    from 16 reviews.
    General  Poetry

  • Drama in the garden

    Drama in the garden

    5-7-5 contest entry
    from 17 reviews.
    General  Poetry

  • Making light of night.

    Making light of night.

    5-7-5 contest entry
    from 20 reviews.
    General  Poetry


FanStory wrote to trimple: Time finished third in the contest "Six Word Poetry Contest"
    Mrs. KT: Congratulations!
    Diane -
    judiverse: Congratulations on your third place finish! judi -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Congratulations! Making light of night. won the contest "5-7-5 Poetry Writing"
    Beri Bee : CONGRATULATIONS! Well-deserved! This poem is amazing! -
    judiverse: Congratulations in you on your win and on the beautiful poem. judiverse -
    Mrs. KT: Dear Tracey,
    A beautiful rendering!
    Congratulations!

    Diane -
    l.raven: CONGRATULATIONS Twilight...never a doubt sweet girl...love you...Twosocks...xxoo -
    Sugarray77: Congratulations on a lovely win!

    Melissa -
    trimple: Thank you so much to each and every one of you.

    I'm so happy! :) -


trimple: But sleep? On a night like this? What an idea! Just think of how many thoughts a blanket smothers while one lies alone in bed, and how many unhappy dreams it keeps warm.?

― Franz Kafka


FanStory wrote to trimple: Out in the open... finished second in the contest "100 Word Flash Fiction"
    rspoet: Congratulations, Tracey! Well done. -

    CD Richards: Yes, I think pretty much anyone could have done a better job.

    If I had been God, I think I'd have resigned and sought a better position elsewhere.

    Good song, but David Gilmour is more my cup of tea than Roger. -
    trimple: Glad you enjoyed this, Craig. I enjoy them both, but for me, Roger Waters has an edge that few can touch :) -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Checkmate. finished first in the contest "Story poem"
    trimple: Thank you to those who voted. -
    Pam (respa): Congratulations on your last two wins, Tracey. Well deserved! -
    BeasPeas: Congratulations on this marvelous poem and your win for it. Marilyn -


FanStory wrote to trimple: London finished first in the contest "'Hemispherick' Limerick"
    BeasPeas: Congratulations. Great job. Marilyn -


FanStory wrote to trimple: haiku sun slips finished third in the contest "Sunset Haiku"


FanStory wrote to trimple: Just in time... finished second in the contest "Abecedarian"


FanStory wrote to trimple: The joys of motherhood... finished third in the contest "Humorous Dialog "


FanStory wrote to trimple: Waiting for the sun... finished first in the contest "50 Word Story"
    Van: Congrats! Nice touch that the protagonist could have been in a position for his sentence to have been served and he's free to the world or free from life by execution. Well deserved. -
    trimple: Thank you, Van

    Indeed I wrote this and left a trio of open questions... He cannot see the horizon... is this reference to his view of the future? His breakfast and favorite book... the bible perhaps, before execution, or maybe his own suicide, or as you suggest, his freedom after serving his time. Maybe he's reading Voltaire, Darwin... Who knows :)

    Thank you my friend

    trimple


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    michaelcahill: Wonderfully nuanced. I took it as his imagination setting him free, but many interpretations could be made ... thus, THE WIN! :)) Congrats! -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Eternal love... finished first in the contest "5-7-5 Romance"
    Van: Congrats!! -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Broken finished first in the contest "Write a sad story poem"
    Van: Congrats!!! Well deserved. -


trimple:

Enjoy


FanStory wrote to trimple: A change in season... finished third in the contest "Shifting Seasons"


trimple: Man is the most insane species.
He worships an invisible God and slaughters visible nature....
without realizing that this nature he slaughters is the invisible God he worships...

    CD Richards: I so want to turn that into a plaque. Or maybe a huge nature print inscribed with those words. -


FanStory wrote to trimple: by a tree finished first in the contest "5-7-5 grass"
    BeasPeas: Congratulations on your win. Marilyn -

    nancyjam: Beautiful! Thanks for sharing. I'm not familiar with her work but will look for more. -
    DR DIP: I love a song that tells a story -
    Jannypan (Jan) : Did she sing Love Lifted Us Up Where We Belong with Jo Cocker. It went with a movie, maybe Top Gun??? -
    trimple: Hi there, Jannypan.

    This particular song was written by the late, Leonard Cohen.

    Splendid poetry eh :)

    But yes... she also sang 'Love lifts us up where we belong' with Joe Cocker. -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Music to the ear... finished first in the contest "Tyburn poetry"
    trimple: https://youtu.be/p9_bI789Gog -


FanStory wrote to trimple: Teddy bares all... finished third in the contest "Teddy bear"
    l.raven: CONGRATULATIONS Twilight...xxoo Linda -


FanStory wrote to trimple: garden path displays finished first in the contest "5-7-5 butterflies"
    Val Crisson: Great contest! It was a "barn burner" as we say in the US. I was honored to share first with you. -
    trimple: Winning 'joint first' with one of FS best haiku writers!

    The honor was all mine, Val.

    What a nail biter! lol -
    trimple: Thank you, Irish Rain :) -


FanStory wrote to trimple: The Gate finished second in the contest "poem about a gate"


FanStory wrote to trimple: (haiku) rain drops finished first in the contest "Nature haiku"
    trimple:

    Winning 1st place was a wonderful boost to my flagging ability to write anything at all this last year or so.

    Thank you so much, guys.

    -


FanStory wrote to trimple: A 'Shaggy Dog' story finished third in the contest "Shaggy Dog Poetry Contest"


FanStory wrote to trimple: divided we all fall... finished third in the contest "Quasi-Triolet"


FanStory wrote to trimple: Thoughts on marriage finished second in the contest "Monostich"


FanStory wrote to trimple: Clock... finished third in the contest "Time"


trimple: Food for thought...




trimple: Just returned back to the U.K. after spending 10 days in Silicone valley and decided to venture out to San Francisco in search of the 'Holy Grail' of hamburgers...

So there I am, soaking up the sun outside this recommended burger joint, my mouth straining to curl its way around this 'cow in a bun' that had more trimmings than a scissor-happy hairdresser's floor, when a guy in his late 70's casually walked passed me, stark bollock naked! He had a small white poodle in one hand and a baguette in the other! All he had on was a hat!

Nobody said a word as he strolled along the street as cool as a cucumber!

Don't get me wrong, I'm all for freedom of expression, but Is this normal for you guys? LOL
    michaelcahill: Heck no! We don't wear hats in California. I'm shocked. I apologize on behalf of my state. I don't even want to ask ... was the poodle spayed? -
    trimple: LMAO!

    Not sure if the dog was spayed, but it had a shiny pink collar on that clashed with his green hat... -
    Linda Engel: Mikey would never be caught wearing a hat. That is too funny but then, again, it was San Francesco. What was the hamburger joint? -
    mrsmajor: Of course not...here in some places in new York, these men at least have their butts covered...although so much of their underwear isn't...lol -
    trimple: I think the burger joint was called 'Sooper Dooper' but it was awful. Just a greasy mess...

    Mind you, I spoke to a few people in the U.S. who claimed that the 'Holy grail' of burgers didn't exist. -
    evilynne: Perhaps he was trying to convey the naked truth. Evi -
    Rubylou: My prayers and thoughts are with your wife and you. -
    Rubylou: OOps, saved comment the wrong box. Sorry.
    I did read about your adventure in CA. Very interesting! LOL -
    kittykatnoel: Wow, San Francisco sure has some weird ones. I thought Oregon was out there. You would think someone would like scream and tell people to, "Look Away, Look Away!" -


trimple: This contest requires that you review every work in the contest prior to voting.

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Good luck in the voting.


Confused.com...

Am I missing something here? lol
    I am Cat: Well, if you are... we all are.

    ***You can not vote for this contest if you have an entry. ***

    ***It's important that all contest participants participate in the vote.

    Which is it? -
    michaelcahill: You can't vote for yourself because your haven't already voted for yourself.
    That's the logic.
    Bottom line, you can't vote in the contest. -
    michaelcahill: You can't review yourself. I left that out. Duh. :)) -
    michaelcahill: It sounds like I wrote the rules doesn't it... -
    TAB_that's me: So did any of you who had entries in the "First they came for.." contest try to vote? I didn't even try as I've tried in these before. I really don't want to spend the time reviewing all of them for 2 cents. I've reviewed half of them but for 2 cents. Padumachitta though said she got to vote - ?? How?? Because she started the contest maybe? I hate when we can't vote in a contest we are in or see how the vote is going. -
    ravenblack: I reviewed every one...and can't vote. Que sera sera. At least I know there are many great entries. -
    michaelcahill: Actually there was a contest where you could vote on classic but not on the new format or vice versa ... a glitch. A couple of us managed to vote. Maybe it isn't fixed. -
    TAB_that's me: Ah, I just went to the new version, reviewed the ones I hadn't reviewed and was able to vote. -
    trimple: Yup, ya right, Tab. Now having reviewed all, I can vote but only on the new version.

    Very misleading I must say.

    -
    trimple: From what I see across the board, most people use the old format, so perhaps, Tom should either twin both editions or at the very least make the members aware of the differences.

    We also need the voting rules to be made clearer as the above contradictory ruling demonstrates. -
    I am Cat: I always read them all... Not necessarily get to reviewing them all before the contest ends. It hasn't stopped me from voting yet. New version... Hmmm -


trimple:

None of us are blameless...
    Kingsland: War is so wrong. Killing and destruction is wrong. The only war to end war, is to never fight in another war. There is a phrase that goes like this. Just imagine that that started a war and nobody came. The only way to end war, is not to fight in them... -
    Kingsland: What is so hard to understand

    A dearth of low level sounds
    At the mountain top
    No clouds are found
    There is a point that has dulled

    Mankind creates its own hell
    It's all in the directions we have chosen
    When it's cold enough, water gets frozen
    The bed is made, then we lay in it

    Out of the frying pan
    So on and so forth
    All is in front for eyes to see
    But do we have the capacity?

    For we surely have the need
    So blind that we be
    We cannot see the forest for the trees
    An ignorance of immorality

    When we permit atrocities
    It's a sad sad state of all that is
    When will we learn to live and let live?
    It's time to take a step back

    Do unto others
    We are all brothers
    Love your fellow man
    Reach out a helping hand
    What is so hard to understand?

    John Allen Kingsland -
    trimple: Thanks, John

    How very true...


    And yet we have the audacity to refer to the animals as dumb...

    Wonder what the future may bring?

    Look at the past :( -
    trimple: 'A war started and nobody came...

    If only, my friend...


    -
    mrsmajor: I have never held a gun to the head of another living soul..I am blameless... -
    trimple: As Einstein said...

    The world is a dangerous place to live; not because of the people who are evil, but because of the people who don't do anything about it.

    -
    trimple: https://youtu.be/8r-e2NDSTuE -


trimple: Feeling uninspired?

Watch these :)




    Tatarka2: Very powerful. Thanks for sharing. -
    trimple: Wonderful! isn't it :) -
    l.raven: thank you for the beautiful music Tracey...I love it...Love xxoo Linda -
    trimple: Hey! Twoxocks

    Glad you enjoyed it :) -


    Lovinia: Hi Traceeeeyy

    This is amazing! xox -
    trimple: Hey, Lovi!

    Great isn't it :) -


trimple: Everybody is a genius. But if you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will live its whole life believing that it is stupid. -Albert Einstein
    William Walz: I find it difficult to believe that fish are stupid. Don't the majority of fish spend their lives swimming in schools? -


trimple:

A most beautiful song...


trimple: 'hijklmno' -- What can you see?

What am I?

answer has five letters
    trimple: nope :)

    has five letters... -
    trimple: what can you actually see?

    'hijklmno? -
    judiverse: Hi, trimple. Congratulation on your win with "paper chasing." judiverse -
    trimple: Hey Judi

    Thank you so much. I think that was my first successful haiku :)

    hugs xx -
    l.raven: HI Tracey, a really great win...CONGRATULATIONS...I knew it would...Poems and their Poets...yeah!!!luff ya -


trimple:

My husband at work....
    DIS-illusioned: And the moral of the video is: if you're not George Clooney, you're worthless. :-/ -
    robina1978: Many congratulations on this price, Ine -
    trimple: Thank you Ine. My husband is doing extremely well with his art right now :) -
    hifein: Well deserved. Wonderful poem!!!!! -
    Domino 2: Loved the harpist solo, Trace, and I also checked out the wonderful Sinead O'Connor's version of this great Celtic song. -
    trimple: Hi there, Ray

    Yeah, Is saw that one too. Love Sinead O'Connor. Especially three babies:) -


trimple: Worry is like a rocking chair, it will give you something to do, but it won't get you anywhere.


trimple: Oh my! I have just been told that I am to visit America in November.
Can't wait!

:)
    michaelcahill: You should visit the desert here! We have lots of sand... and uh... sand! -
    Nosha17: I am just about to review your fun children's poem, but I thought I'd take a look at your profile. I live in Hampshire and another coincidence I am going to the US in November, too. My daughter lives near Pasadena. She just offered to pay for my airfare, so I said yes! Where in the US are you going? Faye -
    trimple: I will be going to Texas, staying on a ranch apparently :) -
    trimple: Thank you Nosha.
    Love your name by the way:)
    Smashing review, cheers you :) xx -


trimple:

In case anyone missed this... :)
    Domino 2: Fantastic video of the huge London puppets, Tracey, and the great atmosphere they created on the streets. 'Magic and joy' as the guy said at the end. WOW!

    When did this take place? I missed it and must have been wasting my time on fanstory. :-) xx Ted -


trimple:


Ahh David Byrne--Timeless Artist!
    Domino 2: Crazy-weird and BRILLIANT VIDEO AND SONG, Tracey. The vocalist sounds like Paul McCartney to me. -

    ravenblack: So you are a Cave fan too? Great stuff. -
    dancerwriter: Dancerwriter, I do appreciate your kind remarks, and feel so good because of them,i guess age make a difference and often I feel down.There are nice people in this world and you are one. Regards,andthank you, Lesley. -
    trimple: Hey Lesley

    How lovely to have you back!
    A big fat hug to you.

    tracey :) xxx
    -


trimple: If you're talking behind
my back...
You're in a real good position
to kiss my ass.
    Marillion: If the rogue is back there, he's not kissing it, and all the talking is dirty. ;-) -


trimple: Now, as far as poems go, there are no rights or wrongs , but there is form, structure, feel, and delivery. In amongst that lot, somewhere, there is what I call; the 'soul' of the writing.

You challenge your mind, and deliver your thoughts. That is what you do.

Your thoughts are not the soul. Your thoughts are vessels of communication that need molding in order to create the emotion that appeals to the conscious, and unconscious mind....in this case, the reader.

Sometimes, thoughts alone cannot deliver the emotion needed when writing a poem. You need to develop its 'soul'

Nouns are, in a sense, static and stationary, robust and full-proof. They do not bend or move unless you bend them.... with mostly, GOOD adjectives.

Yet, be careful. Many new poets, and many old, (who should know better) sometimes tend to over compensate their poetry with TOO MANY adjectives.

An adjective can be the light of a poem or the glaze of disaster. Chose your adjective well, and use it when it serves purpose, or there is a reason to believe you are just creating superficial decoration.

With prose, you have time to develop and lull into a sense of feel, and direction.
With poetry you have no time. You must formulate with only a few words, therefore the adjective becomes your most potent weapon, or you most poetic death.

Use wisely friends.

'There is a difference between writing poetically and writing poetry.'

When we truly grasp the difference, we will undoubtedly write better poems.

Copy pasted from a most talented writer here on FS
    Marillion: That's very well said, Tracey, so kudos to you for posting it, and also to the author of the quote. It's excellent advice. -
    Adri7enne: Good stuff. I'd like to know who the 'most talented writer here on FS' is, so I might read the entire post. Thanks for sharing. -
    Adri7enne: Thank you, pipersfancy. I'm going to check out RGstar's profile page. -


trimple: I just saw an advert on FS that read..

"Christians make better Lovers"

How the hell did they work that one out? LOL
    nor84: Those things come from Google, most likely. Beats me. -
    adewpearl: I've seen bumper stickers for everything under the sun - Golfers make better lovers, grandmothers make better lovers, Democrats make better lovers... -
    Margaret Snowdon: Ha ha - how about angels? I've been told I'm one - just wondered!! -


trimple: If the whole world smoked a joint at the same time, there would be world peace for at least two hours, followed by a global food shortage.
    trimple: The drug war is a total scam, prescription drugs kill 300K a year, while marijuana kills no one, but they spend billions/year 'fighting' it, because pot heads make for good little slaves to put into private prisons, owned by the banks who launder the drug money!
    -


trimple: does anyone know of a good British writing site that does not require hours of reviewing or having to spend a fortune in order to have your work looked at?
    DIS-illusioned: Yes...but it's in the dark recesses of my deluded mind (and don't you dare tell me my mind isn't a good British writing site!). -
    Sally Carter: Forward Poetry has a members' section, which I have joined. However, from what I see so far, any comments are of the "Oh, isn't that lovely" variety. But to be fair, I haven't fully explored it, so don't write it off on my say-so. They do also run competitions which are free to enter. Might be worth a look. If nothing else it might lead you on to other places. -
    trimple: Dis you is not British! :)
    Sally thanks I shall take a look see :)
    Shelly, I was hoping to get a recommendation, but thanks you :) -
    Sylvia Page: http://www.treasurepen.com/dashboard/SylviaPage
    You not only can post your articles, you earn from them as much as 70% of the advertising revenue. You may mention my name as the person introducing you. -
    trimple: Hi Sylvia
    I shall look into it, thank you :) -


trimple: Jean-Paul Sartre is sitting at a French café, revising his draft of Being and Nothingness. He says to the waitress: I'd like a cup of coffee, please, with no cream. The waitress replies: I'm sorry, Monsieur, but we're out of cream. How about with no milk?


trimple: One day the zoo-keeper noticed that the orangutan was reading two books - the Bible and Darwin's Origin of Species. Surprised, he asked the ape, "Why are you reading both those books?" "Well," said the orangutan, "I just wanted to know if I was my brother's keeper or my keeper's brother."
    DIS-illusioned: Well now, that anecdote is just false, as we all know that zoo-keepers can't tell the difference between ape-types, or between monkeys and apes.
    (It was really a 'gorilla' perusing those books.) -
    mrskristinball: You are hilarious! Fantastic jokes, and I'm thinking you wrote these yourself...can you claim any of them as your own? If so, more please:-)
    -
    trimple: mrskristinball

    sadly no, I didn't invent them :) -


trimple: GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!
Just spent three hours working on a poem. Hit save, and was taken to a page stating that I already had a piece with the said title.
Work was automatically deleted!
    Sally Carter: No! Are you sure? That happened to me once, ie inadvertently used a title I'd used before, but it gave me the chance to re-name it. That's awful. -
    trimple: Yup I'm afraid so Sally.
    I'm so gutted, I had been working on a series of poems about William Hogarth's
    "A Harlot's Progress"
    Spits and screams! -
    flippant: Oh no!! I write in Word or e-mail myself for this reason. Worst feeling in the world. -
    Sally Carter: Yeah, don't want to rub salt in, Tracey, but I never write direct onto FS unless it's something very, very short. It's amazing that even if you have written something yourself, spending hours going overt it line by line, once it's been lost the brain (well my brain anyway) just can't re-create it. We all feel for you. It sounds a brilliant theme for a series of poem. I must explore more... -
    adewpearl: That has happened to me several times when I've used a title from a while back. I never compose my poems on the page though, so the worst that has happened to me is I had to copy it all over from the manuscript. -


trimple: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a36_CwzA0bk

Make of this what you will.
A very interesting documentary.
    Selina Stambi: trimple, dear, loved the parody on The Owl And The Pussycat!! You had me in stiches ... :) -
    trimple: Hey Reach
    Why thank you very much

    trimple -


trimple: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WfGMYdalClU


trimple: Favorite talks on utube
"Temple Grandin my experience with autism"

Tune in for this unusual presentation on autism by someone with autism. Animal Science professor Temple Grandin, who designs livestock handling facilities, discusses the value of early intervention in autism, and about medications. Other topics include her sensory sensitivities and how she manages them, how she and other autistic people think, and social relationships and careers. Series: "M.I.N.D. Institute Lecture Series on Neurodevelopmental Disorders"



    atticus63: Did you see the terrific HBO film about her? I do believe it is just called Temple Grandin. It was with Claire Danes and it was truly fantastic. See it, if you can. -
    trimple: No I havn't seen the film of Temple, been trying to get it on 1channel but no go:(
    isn't she just terrific! -
    hifein: i saw her speak here in New York. She is a wonderful inspiration for others with asbergers. -
    trimple: Hey Hifein, wow how lucky were you to see this incredible woman!
    I have since managed to see her film.
    What a story. As you rightly say a true inspiration to everyone
    Trimple x -
    vawilcox: I wish I could 'like' things right now. (facebook)
    My brother and mother both have asperger's and I can agree - knowing only a little about her - she is quite inspirational. That must have been amazing to hear her speak!! -


trimple: films not to be missed :

untouchables (french film) amazing!
truly madly deeply
shallow grave
one flew over the cuckoos nest
mary and max

Do you have a top five top watch?

    atticus63: Just saw Beasts of the Southern Wild. I agree Truly, madly, deeply -I loved that film, I think especially because all the dead people were huge film buffs (I could relate). Glad I came here, because just today I was trying to remember what film you told me to see...and here it was! One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest -brilliant. I choose Harold and Maude, Whale Rider, To Kill a Mockingbird, King of the Hill (Steven Soderbergh -director and Departures (Japan). Miss you, T. -
    trimple: Hey Atticus!
    truly madly deeply awesome film:)
    To kill amocking bird I saw many years ago, a truly tremendous film!
    I shall look up the films you enjoy :) -
    trimple: Estelle, I have written to DS as I had to refresh pc and lost auto log in details, still waiting for response:( -
    atticus63: Well, I hope you make it back some day. I miss your scintillating conversation and witty banter. Signed your multi-groupal stalker. ~atticus (love ya, Babe) -
    trimple: You can stalk me anytime! :) -
    velvetElvis: congratulations on winning the: Your Cheatin' Heart challenge. Watered Down was a wonderful poem and very deserving of the win. -
    trimple: Hey VE

    Thank you very much for setting the challenge. I thoroughly enjoyed writing it.

    much love
    trimple:) -