The Pumpkin and Pumpkin Pride
Even pumpkins should be themselves10 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Oh this wiley little pumpkin rhyme has a wonderful message at the end. Be yourself - for in that challenge is the victory. You are at your best.....when you simply be.....you.
Liked your work dear poet.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Oh this wiley little pumpkin rhyme has a wonderful message at the end. Be yourself - for in that challenge is the victory. You are at your best.....when you simply be.....you.
Liked your work dear poet.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Love this one awesome rhyming scheme and flow. Well done. Great photo to go with your words. Nice choice in background colour and font also. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Love this one awesome rhyming scheme and flow. Well done. Great photo to go with your words. Nice choice in background colour and font also. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a delightful story entry for the The Pumpkin writing prompt. It is well written with an encouraging ending. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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This is a delightful story entry for the The Pumpkin writing prompt. It is well written with an encouraging ending. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Who's the best pumpkin in the world? I think your entry will be a winner in the share of a story contest. And here too. It's funny and easy to read very suitably for small kids.
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Who's the best pumpkin in the world? I think your entry will be a winner in the share of a story contest. And here too. It's funny and easy to read very suitably for small kids.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "And so he was. And so can you
be great at being just plain you.", because I love stories with morals and also because your rhyme scheme made this poem have a light and positive feel to it which I thought was great!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
John 6:37
New International Version
37 All those the Father gives me will come to me, and whoever comes to me I will never drive away.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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My favorite part was, "And so he was. And so can you
be great at being just plain you.", because I love stories with morals and also because your rhyme scheme made this poem have a light and positive feel to it which I thought was great!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
John 6:37
New International Version
37 All those the Father gives me will come to me, and whoever comes to me I will never drive away.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for a very thoughtful and positive review. The verse you chose to quote made me think of "Let the children come to me."
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'The Pumpkin' writing prompt.
This verse tells a good story with a moral.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 'The Pumpkin' writing prompt.
This verse tells a good story with a moral.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a delightful offering for this contest with a perfect message for the young people of today... Thanx for sharing and best of luck to you at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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What a delightful offering for this contest with a perfect message for the young people of today... Thanx for sharing and best of luck to you at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a fun poem that would be a joy to read to a child. I love the use of rhyme to help the flow. I'd avoid using the same word twice in a row (you and you in the last stanza) but outside of this the poem flowed easily. Was fun to read. Great job.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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This is a fun poem that would be a joy to read to a child. I love the use of rhyme to help the flow. I'd avoid using the same word twice in a row (you and you in the last stanza) but outside of this the poem flowed easily. Was fun to read. Great job.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.
Comment from trimple
Good morning to you, Mary
This is a very sweet and light poem about a dreamy pumpkin, who initially wonders if being transformed into a fairytale carriage for a princess might be a glorious experience, but he finally settles for being what he's best at. Just a good ol fashioned pumpkin to liven-up Halloween.
A couple of suggestions that you may or indeed, may not wish to consider--
She'll[ do the --make new?] changes just to please me."
Give me a jack-o'lantern[s?] grin.
I wish you luck in the contest
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Good morning to you, Mary
This is a very sweet and light poem about a dreamy pumpkin, who initially wonders if being transformed into a fairytale carriage for a princess might be a glorious experience, but he finally settles for being what he's best at. Just a good ol fashioned pumpkin to liven-up Halloween.
A couple of suggestions that you may or indeed, may not wish to consider--
She'll[ do the --make new?] changes just to please me."
Give me a jack-o'lantern[s?] grin.
I wish you luck in the contest
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind review. Thanks as well for your cogent suggestions.
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Your poem was fun to read. Most enjoyable.
Comment from lancellot
Okay, this works really good as a children's poem. It had fun rhymes, hints at a popular fairytale they should have read and know. It ends with the celebration of Halloween and provides a solid positive message.
I think this is just what the contest wanted. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Okay, this works really good as a children's poem. It had fun rhymes, hints at a popular fairytale they should have read and know. It ends with the celebration of Halloween and provides a solid positive message.
I think this is just what the contest wanted. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your very kind words and for the lovely six stars as well.
