Attack of the Fifty States
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Comment from phill doran
Hello Bill
You are an engaging writer and I enjoy your restrained humour you use in most (if not all) of your writing. This is a wonderfully descriptive piece, well worth it just for "...the backseat of a clown car, on fire, driving off a cliff, with the volume on the radio turned to brain scan..." This is great, caustic, imagery.
I am assuming that you had insufficient space for the title hence 'ofthe' and 'NewMexico' lacking spaces? I think 'spin-off' and '55-gallon' need to be hyphenated, but I apologize in advance if I am incorrect in that assumption.
You have a keen eye and ear, and an (apparently) interesting-enough background to write something longer. These pieces are like appetizers.
I wish you well with you continued writing, but i suggest you think of a bigger canvas. Just a thought.
Cheers
phill
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Hello Bill
You are an engaging writer and I enjoy your restrained humour you use in most (if not all) of your writing. This is a wonderfully descriptive piece, well worth it just for "...the backseat of a clown car, on fire, driving off a cliff, with the volume on the radio turned to brain scan..." This is great, caustic, imagery.
I am assuming that you had insufficient space for the title hence 'ofthe' and 'NewMexico' lacking spaces? I think 'spin-off' and '55-gallon' need to be hyphenated, but I apologize in advance if I am incorrect in that assumption.
You have a keen eye and ear, and an (apparently) interesting-enough background to write something longer. These pieces are like appetizers.
I wish you well with you continued writing, but i suggest you think of a bigger canvas. Just a thought.
Cheers
phill
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you, phil. I have a couple chapter books on the site from a couple of years ago.
Comment from Ben B.
Ok it's official: Arizona is OFF my travel list. I don't do well in desserts and if New Mexico is as bad as you say it is I won't even bother going there.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Ok it's official: Arizona is OFF my travel list. I don't do well in desserts and if New Mexico is as bad as you say it is I won't even bother going there.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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The special situations are the lack of hydration, cramped quarters, and the Doom Patrol as family.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Bill - as usual, educational as well as entertaining. It is obvious that you have been nursing this dislike of New Mexico for a long time. I hope none of your reviewers are from NM, it could have a very bad effect on your average. LOL- Jerry
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Bill - as usual, educational as well as entertaining. It is obvious that you have been nursing this dislike of New Mexico for a long time. I hope none of your reviewers are from NM, it could have a very bad effect on your average. LOL- Jerry
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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My perspective is from a youth trapped in a car with lunatics.
Comment from BethShelby
I remember the fact that my family was on a camping trip through the west and we got into New Mexico nearing night. We needed a place to came and there wasn't one. We attempted to spend the night sleeping in a truck at one of those rest stops with a trash can. It was a nightmare I'll never forget. I cracked up at the description of your brother's driving and the Buick torture chamber with no water. Sound like a nightmare for you as well. I enjoyed reading your take on this state.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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I remember the fact that my family was on a camping trip through the west and we got into New Mexico nearing night. We needed a place to came and there wasn't one. We attempted to spend the night sleeping in a truck at one of those rest stops with a trash can. It was a nightmare I'll never forget. I cracked up at the description of your brother's driving and the Buick torture chamber with no water. Sound like a nightmare for you as well. I enjoyed reading your take on this state.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Beth. I mean, why drive through New Mexico when you can run through a bonfire with a full bladder.
Comment from juliaSjames
Bill, you have a real knack for comic writing. This chapter is hilarious. I laughed out loud at the account of your brother's driving. Hopeful New Mexico has improved since those days..
Looking forward eagerly to reading about the next state on your list.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Bill, you have a real knack for comic writing. This chapter is hilarious. I laughed out loud at the account of your brother's driving. Hopeful New Mexico has improved since those days..
Looking forward eagerly to reading about the next state on your list.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Julia. So happy you got a kick out of New Mexico.
Comment from Mistydawn
It sounds like your brothers driving was the only exciting thing that happened on your grand tour through the state. I can't even imagine what that must've been like. I imagine your parents weren't to excited about letting you drive when you was old enough after that.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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It sounds like your brothers driving was the only exciting thing that happened on your grand tour through the state. I can't even imagine what that must've been like. I imagine your parents weren't to excited about letting you drive when you was old enough after that.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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I was the youngest of six so they were well prepared.
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lol.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ours was a Volkswagon Station Wagon Torture chamber!! LOL! My husband spends time out at WSMR for tests periodically... it's HOT (but much cooler at night!)... ;) A great one here, sir -- bring on the next!! ;) Thanx for sharing all those grins this morning (especially the family drama memories!):) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Ours was a Volkswagon Station Wagon Torture chamber!! LOL! My husband spends time out at WSMR for tests periodically... it's HOT (but much cooler at night!)... ;) A great one here, sir -- bring on the next!! ;) Thanx for sharing all those grins this morning (especially the family drama memories!):) :) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Yvette. Now New Yock.
Comment from Earl Corp
This was hilarious! You forgot to mention Area 51. I've never been to New Mexico, but I'll take your word and stay out. Brothers should be brother's. Keep'em coming.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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This was hilarious! You forgot to mention Area 51. I've never been to New Mexico, but I'll take your word and stay out. Brothers should be brother's. Keep'em coming.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very interesting post you have penned about the state of New Mexico. My brother in law lives there and has for quite some time. I don't think I want to go there anytime soon. Thanks for sharing. Blessings,Teri
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Bill, This is a very interesting post you have penned about the state of New Mexico. My brother in law lives there and has for quite some time. I don't think I want to go there anytime soon. Thanks for sharing. Blessings,Teri
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Tina Crute
What I like about this: I read :"I shoulda..." and already
thought this was going to be a fun read because of the tone of that sentence; I started reading and found I was right! ; I actually laughed at descriptions of a minted teenager, torture chamber, local zero; with these your story has flavor and relatability to most families whose trips later become fodder for fun retellings. I enjoyed this. It made me remember our own awful trips that we talk about lovingly now. I did learn a thing or two, too!
Last sentence...out (of) the cage
Tina
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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What I like about this: I read :"I shoulda..." and already
thought this was going to be a fun read because of the tone of that sentence; I started reading and found I was right! ; I actually laughed at descriptions of a minted teenager, torture chamber, local zero; with these your story has flavor and relatability to most families whose trips later become fodder for fun retellings. I enjoyed this. It made me remember our own awful trips that we talk about lovingly now. I did learn a thing or two, too!
Last sentence...out (of) the cage
Tina
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Tina, for pointing out what you liked here and for noting that missing preposition.
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Welcome as always friend,
Tina
