Insane
A human condition31 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Lordinajamjar, this is an excellent loop poem. You have mastered the art of not making it sound like a loop. Each repeat is not too linked in meaning with the previous line. The reader finds it makes sense, is not contrived and does not read like a loop at all. This is not an easy achievement. Very well done. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Hello Lordinajamjar, this is an excellent loop poem. You have mastered the art of not making it sound like a loop. Each repeat is not too linked in meaning with the previous line. The reader finds it makes sense, is not contrived and does not read like a loop at all. This is not an easy achievement. Very well done. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This piece has a bit of humor and whimsy to it. The Loop Poetry Contest requirements are well met here. I sense you are having a bit of fun with our current masked condition.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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This piece has a bit of humor and whimsy to it. The Loop Poetry Contest requirements are well met here. I sense you are having a bit of fun with our current masked condition.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Reese Turner
Easy to read and certainly thought provoking, but did remind me of a saying from college, "I hate it when somebody has drugs and they don't share." Maybe just too deep for me, but maybe I just like me and life the way it is. Anyway, enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Easy to read and certainly thought provoking, but did remind me of a saying from college, "I hate it when somebody has drugs and they don't share." Maybe just too deep for me, but maybe I just like me and life the way it is. Anyway, enjoyed it.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from amada
This is a great example of a loop poem. It is new to me, I was enthralled by its verses and the continuity of the thoughts. Hovwver, it seemed a little prfeachy to me. That does not take out the merit of this great work.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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This is a great example of a loop poem. It is new to me, I was enthralled by its verses and the continuity of the thoughts. Hovwver, it seemed a little prfeachy to me. That does not take out the merit of this great work.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from roof35
1) I thought numpty was a Scottish word meaning empty head? 2) I don't understand "Ha now you ask. I am giving you five stars as I don't want to mark you down for what might be my ignorance. It is otherwise well done.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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1) I thought numpty was a Scottish word meaning empty head? 2) I don't understand "Ha now you ask. I am giving you five stars as I don't want to mark you down for what might be my ignorance. It is otherwise well done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Very clever poem that follows the required structure very well and also rhymes! I love the essential humorous elements and the play on words. Plus, the artwork you chose is perfect and is what drew me to it in the first place!
Excellent poem! Good luck in the contest.
Susan
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Very clever poem that follows the required structure very well and also rhymes! I love the essential humorous elements and the play on words. Plus, the artwork you chose is perfect and is what drew me to it in the first place!
Excellent poem! Good luck in the contest.
Susan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
This is a marvellous entry in this Loop poetry contest, with a wonderfully quirky theme, you've done a marvellous job with this one, articulate, smooth pentameter with abab rhyming, and immaculate looping, well done good luck, blessings
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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This is a marvellous entry in this Loop poetry contest, with a wonderfully quirky theme, you've done a marvellous job with this one, articulate, smooth pentameter with abab rhyming, and immaculate looping, well done good luck, blessings
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
OMG...This is deep, simply wonderful and yes, I'll not get mad and smash my mirrors.....I must say this is a very nice comment on the 'Human Race' in general.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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OMG...This is deep, simply wonderful and yes, I'll not get mad and smash my mirrors.....I must say this is a very nice comment on the 'Human Race' in general.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Tina Crute
We ARE fixated on ourselves and our to-do list and goals...and what we can't do. You chose a perfect picture and content for loop poetry; the three work together well to create one strong message of possible madness. The black background is a warning of danger to the reader of a dark topic. This is like a tough puzzle that is beautiful at the same time, in its construction.
Tina
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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We ARE fixated on ourselves and our to-do list and goals...and what we can't do. You chose a perfect picture and content for loop poetry; the three work together well to create one strong message of possible madness. The black background is a warning of danger to the reader of a dark topic. This is like a tough puzzle that is beautiful at the same time, in its construction.
Tina
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a solid well-constructed example of a loop poem. However, I found it to be a very disturbing poem, and came away thinking yes indeed, we must be insane.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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This is a solid well-constructed example of a loop poem. However, I found it to be a very disturbing poem, and came away thinking yes indeed, we must be insane.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
