She's The One
My one and only.70 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
A lovely yet heartbreaking love poem, especially when the author notes are read. I'm reading your poem and realizing she will always be with you. That kind of love is not common, so precious and irreplaceable. Your poem is written very well. Best of luck in the contest.
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A lovely yet heartbreaking love poem, especially when the author notes are read. I'm reading your poem and realizing she will always be with you. That kind of love is not common, so precious and irreplaceable. Your poem is written very well. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from Rubylou
It's an amazing life when lived with a love so pure and true.
Beautiful fluidity and rhyme to your words of love.
I enjoyed your post both because it is a well done work; but also because it touches the heart
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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It's an amazing life when lived with a love so pure and true.
Beautiful fluidity and rhyme to your words of love.
I enjoyed your post both because it is a well done work; but also because it touches the heart
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and shiny six stars.
Comment from nomi338
It is always heart warming to see an expression of true and long lasting devotion to a loved one who has departed life, but is still loved just as much as ever, perhaps even more. Good job.
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It is always heart warming to see an expression of true and long lasting devotion to a loved one who has departed life, but is still loved just as much as ever, perhaps even more. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. A loving tribute to your wife. Well written Technically sound, nice rhyme scheme, strong ending, art work supports the work. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Love never dies
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Very good. A loving tribute to your wife. Well written Technically sound, nice rhyme scheme, strong ending, art work supports the work. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Love never dies
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from TPAC
Do that thing. Bang! Bang! Bang! I found this old style poetic verse pleasing to me in its given structuring, appealing as back then to my interests. A very creative and touching read in my given opinion.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Do that thing. Bang! Bang! Bang! I found this old style poetic verse pleasing to me in its given structuring, appealing as back then to my interests. A very creative and touching read in my given opinion.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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hanks very much
Comment from nikkisha
I really enjoyed this poem, it is written from the heart and very relatable to anyone who has experienced true love. It is simple, raw and direct. Sometimes people can fall into the trap of trying too hard to use fancy romantic words, but it's not always necessary, just wearing your heart on your sleeve can be just as effective, and feels more real. Your words were genuine and touching, well done.
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I really enjoyed this poem, it is written from the heart and very relatable to anyone who has experienced true love. It is simple, raw and direct. Sometimes people can fall into the trap of trying too hard to use fancy romantic words, but it's not always necessary, just wearing your heart on your sleeve can be just as effective, and feels more real. Your words were genuine and touching, well done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from Patricia Cammish
Great to read a structured poem with a sincere message.
Your colour scheme is delicate and the soft focus photo complements this.
Except for the first stanza the poem is written in alternating iambic tetrameter and trimeter lines with abab rhyming. Is there a reason for this difference? Would you consider inserting 'really' in the first line and 'always' in the third so the first stanza conforms to the metre of the others?
The poem delivers its sincere message well. I am sure the lady in question would be very happy to hear this.
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Great to read a structured poem with a sincere message.
Your colour scheme is delicate and the soft focus photo complements this.
Except for the first stanza the poem is written in alternating iambic tetrameter and trimeter lines with abab rhyming. Is there a reason for this difference? Would you consider inserting 'really' in the first line and 'always' in the third so the first stanza conforms to the metre of the others?
The poem delivers its sincere message well. I am sure the lady in question would be very happy to hear this.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from kmoss
How sweet and beautiful. She is lucky to have you. I don't think this required a certain syllable count. I think the line "when awake or when I sleep" should read "when awake or when asleep". Also there are two periods after the very last line.
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How sweet and beautiful. She is lucky to have you. I don't think this required a certain syllable count. I think the line "when awake or when I sleep" should read "when awake or when asleep". Also there are two periods after the very last line.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from rspoet
Hello Willie,
You've written an excellent rhymed poem for the love contest
You always know when the 'right' one comes along,
somehow you just know, no words needed.
Great picture to match your words.
Well done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
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Hello Willie,
You've written an excellent rhymed poem for the love contest
You always know when the 'right' one comes along,
somehow you just know, no words needed.
Great picture to match your words.
Well done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Willie,
How very fortunate you and your wife were to have met one another and shared your lives together.
Your love shines throughout each stanza of your well-crafted poem.
My condolences on your wife's passing ...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Good Morning, Willie,
How very fortunate you and your wife were to have met one another and shared your lives together.
Your love shines throughout each stanza of your well-crafted poem.
My condolences on your wife's passing ...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
