Second Chance
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Chapter 3 - Second Chance"The tribulations of a Nashville street urchin
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Comment from RShipp
I think the litany of clues you have given us- the immense like-ability of Chance- he is far more than 'the streets' have allowed him to be so far. ... Chance Macallister
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I think the litany of clues you have given us- the immense like-ability of Chance- he is far more than 'the streets' have allowed him to be so far. ... Chance Macallister
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Chance seems like a very wise, or maybe to wise for its own good. I like his philosophical approach towards life. "Negotiating a clearing in the sea of humanity, Chance spotted his cohorts seated around a table like shoats in hot pursuit of a rattler. A weight far beyond anything he ever felt before descended upon him. He found himself in one of the worst quandaries of his twenty-four year existence and fought a mental tug-of-war. Complications were sure to abound." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Chance seems like a very wise, or maybe to wise for its own good. I like his philosophical approach towards life. "Negotiating a clearing in the sea of humanity, Chance spotted his cohorts seated around a table like shoats in hot pursuit of a rattler. A weight far beyond anything he ever felt before descended upon him. He found himself in one of the worst quandaries of his twenty-four year existence and fought a mental tug-of-war. Complications were sure to abound." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed poo he'd th I s story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from BethShelby
Chance seems like an interesting character but since he a mastermind in a bank robbery this makes him someone it is hard to see him as a desirable
l character. However he seem to realize he is dealing with lowlifes Since hs is a main character I assume he will somehow avoid be murdered any time soon. I look forward to learning more.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Chance seems like an interesting character but since he a mastermind in a bank robbery this makes him someone it is hard to see him as a desirable
l character. However he seem to realize he is dealing with lowlifes Since hs is a main character I assume he will somehow avoid be murdered any time soon. I look forward to learning more.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I tend to keep my comments to myself, since all minds see most things in different perspectives. Never heard of a "Bushwhacker," (unless watching and old western) so, it appears you know your way around the bar-mixology tags. Quagmire, cohorts, quandaries, and "Complications were sure to abound," don't sound like words that relate much to the characters in your story. LOL. But I'm enjoying every line. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Well, I tend to keep my comments to myself, since all minds see most things in different perspectives. Never heard of a "Bushwhacker," (unless watching and old western) so, it appears you know your way around the bar-mixology tags. Quagmire, cohorts, quandaries, and "Complications were sure to abound," don't sound like words that relate much to the characters in your story. LOL. But I'm enjoying every line. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting and well written story about a bank heist being planned. I grew up in Nashville, and it sounds like you may have a visited Tootsie's. Good luck with your story. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Interesting and well written story about a bank heist being planned. I grew up in Nashville, and it sounds like you may have a visited Tootsie's. Good luck with your story. Bill
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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I grew up in Hermitage area. Now live in Brentwood. Very familiar with Nashville, and its attractions. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
One can understand an attitude when someone is raised in a very clinical, cruel system and an uncaring environment, when that very system palms off its dependants to equally uncaring people that reflect it's own attitudes, gorbto feel sorry for them. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : He spent his youth (in) a foster system...
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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One can understand an attitude when someone is raised in a very clinical, cruel system and an uncaring environment, when that very system palms off its dependants to equally uncaring people that reflect it's own attitudes, gorbto feel sorry for them. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : He spent his youth (in) a foster system...
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Appreciate the catch and the review.
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Well done
Comment from Ben B.
"Slow down for snakes?" Is that some sort of slang? Also, who calls their girlfriend "girlfriend?" Not exactly the most romantic pet name. Other than that this is a fine story.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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"Slow down for snakes?" Is that some sort of slang? Also, who calls their girlfriend "girlfriend?" Not exactly the most romantic pet name. Other than that this is a fine story.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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They are not boyfriend-girlfriend. In this case it is more a term of endearment. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Sankey
This was a good chapter. Great descriptions of the surroundings. Me wonders if Chance m ight be more aware of his "cohorts" intentions than they realize? Nearing my exit from here might do the $10 Monthly occasionally. One spag. His overworked ra(s)p[s]y voice
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This was a good chapter. Great descriptions of the surroundings. Me wonders if Chance m ight be more aware of his "cohorts" intentions than they realize? Nearing my exit from here might do the $10 Monthly occasionally. One spag. His overworked ra(s)p[s]y voice
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Appreciate the nit catch. This site just grows on a person in some ways. In others, can be so frustrating. Let me know what you do. Have you ever hooked up with me on Facebook?
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Check your messages.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Hi Brett, I just got caught up with your storyline. It is full of action and your characters are appropriate. I like the small details such as the walrus moustache and his hair color. You did a very good job. I really didn't understand your last line. Did you leave something out about that snake? I've not heard that before. Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Hi Brett, I just got caught up with your storyline. It is full of action and your characters are appropriate. I like the small details such as the walrus moustache and his hair color. You did a very good job. I really didn't understand your last line. Did you leave something out about that snake? I've not heard that before. Shirley
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review. What Chance was saying is if you are going to cater to snakes you may as well be one.
