My Paradox
Love Poem Contest13 total reviews
Comment from k watson
I love the paradox, we have all been there! Great visual, too. You create the mood with your choice of words such as 'spurn' and 'goddess'. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I love the paradox, we have all been there! Great visual, too. You create the mood with your choice of words such as 'spurn' and 'goddess'. Well done!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Hiya, and thanks for digging around in my portfolio a bit. You may want to be careful in there - you never know what may leap out and grab you!
Cheers.
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
Steve,
This shows that a woman has a lot of facets to her character and it is the man's choice to decide that he want to take a chance on all of them. This is what love is. The woman has to to the same thing.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Steve,
This shows that a woman has a lot of facets to her character and it is the man's choice to decide that he want to take a chance on all of them. This is what love is. The woman has to to the same thing.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Joan. Take a chance, you reckon, even if it's 50/50 odds - maybe that's what divorce statistics show us!
Steve
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No problem, Steve. Love is always worth a try. I did and I've been married for 34 years.
Joan
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46 years for me - or should I say US?!
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Congrats. And in should be US.
Joan
Comment from sammielwf
Kiwisteveh,
You have fashioned for your readers a temptress supreme. Is she sweet and virginal or coquettish and sly? This is one of those delightful writings that make a reader check their memory banks for a friend or acquaintance that may fit that image. Hmmm.... we say. I know what the writer is talking about in this piece and it is wickedly delightful.
Well done!
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Kiwisteveh,
You have fashioned for your readers a temptress supreme. Is she sweet and virginal or coquettish and sly? This is one of those delightful writings that make a reader check their memory banks for a friend or acquaintance that may fit that image. Hmmm.... we say. I know what the writer is talking about in this piece and it is wickedly delightful.
Well done!
Sammielwf
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Sammie.
I really appreciate your suggestion that this poem made you think about your own life and the people you know - that is the best comploment.
Steve
Comment from Carlos' girl
clever rhymes about a witchy woman goddess whore and her paramour. its cute, but i don't see anything in the content about love..maybe she is peddling her body, her charms her vodoo or her maiden/ whore persona. where's the love? The contest was Love poetry, or was it infatuation?
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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clever rhymes about a witchy woman goddess whore and her paramour. its cute, but i don't see anything in the content about love..maybe she is peddling her body, her charms her vodoo or her maiden/ whore persona. where's the love? The contest was Love poetry, or was it infatuation?
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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perhaps when you are as old as me, you will have learnt that love comes in many forms. In fact the poem does state clearly that the voice of the poem is offering his/her love, although s/he is a little confised about the reception s/he is getting from the object of desire.
Not a typical love poem, perhaps, and you may quibble about whether the profession of love is genuine or not - much as scholars argue about Romeo's 'love; for Rosalind before he encounters Juliet.
But surely any poem where the voice so strongly states his love for another must be considered a love poem!
Have a great day and thanks for stopping by.
Steve
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You're welcome, age is just a number, and in matters of the heart, no one can quibble, only differ
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Who knows, I may be your elder
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You're right, I stand corrected
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Comment from LisaMay
I enjoyed how you portrayed the captivation of feminine paradox. We have to keep you men on your toes, not knowing which aspect of our persona will reveal itself next. You've described it very well - we're so enthralling, making you slaves to either our good or our bad sides, depending on your own proclivities.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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I enjoyed how you portrayed the captivation of feminine paradox. We have to keep you men on your toes, not knowing which aspect of our persona will reveal itself next. You've described it very well - we're so enthralling, making you slaves to either our good or our bad sides, depending on your own proclivities.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Ah, but how do you determine my particular proclivities on any particular occasion.
Thanks for that!
Steve
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Oh, that's not up to me.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sexy write filled with passion and fire as this lady seems to have it all and attraction is addictive and obsessive here, much enjoyed Steve, love, Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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This is a sexy write filled with passion and fire as this lady seems to have it all and attraction is addictive and obsessive here, much enjoyed Steve, love, Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Now, of course, I have never known anyone like this!
Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from juliaSjames
Hahaha
A sizzling write, Steve.
I daresay lustful attraction is love while it lasts. Sometimes it's so hot it burns itself out in a flash. Usually it results in chaos for all concerned since this kind of love is no rrspecter of boundaries.
Great style in this poem where you pose dramatic alternatives.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Hahaha
A sizzling write, Steve.
I daresay lustful attraction is love while it lasts. Sometimes it's so hot it burns itself out in a flash. Usually it results in chaos for all concerned since this kind of love is no rrspecter of boundaries.
Great style in this poem where you pose dramatic alternatives.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Julia. Not quite your typical love poem! And yes, it's a little hard to distinguish between passion and lust. I'm a little old for much of either!
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I have a feeling many people have who have met a special person who has wondered the exact same thing. LOL Good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I have a feeling many people have who have met a special person who has wondered the exact same thing. LOL Good luck with the contest
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Barbara. How are you supposed to tell the difference, I wonder.
Are you back to teaching, or are schools still limiting re-opening where you are?
Steve
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I had half face-to-face and half virtual. The virtual parents across the district complained their wasn't a full time teacher for them, so they moved us around and I am totally virtual right now. My face-to-face students were moved to other teachers and I got their virtual students. It's a mess.
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Oh, wow! Hard to even start to comprehend how difficult that is. Worse, I guess, is that there is no certainty about when this will end. Good luck!
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One of our Democrat Governor's stated kids could go back to school after the election.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is on good form. I like the image you paired with your well-thought out words. You did a good job formatting your lines. Your few lines/phrases have much to say about choices when it comes to love.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Your contest entry is on good form. I like the image you paired with your well-thought out words. You did a good job formatting your lines. Your few lines/phrases have much to say about choices when it comes to love.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Jan - I appreciate the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever punchline! Love the paradoxical play in fine rhyme--a fine entry for the contest. Conflict rings true to common experience--lust wins in the end! Cheers. LIZ
Congrats on your prize!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Clever punchline! Love the paradoxical play in fine rhyme--a fine entry for the contest. Conflict rings true to common experience--lust wins in the end! Cheers. LIZ
Congrats on your prize!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Liz.
Perhaps now I'm really old, I would be wise enough to distinguish love from lust. No chance of that when the testosterone was raging!
Steve
