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Where Are All The Children

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A vigilante takes down trafficing rings.

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Comment from royowen
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The detectives ate on the trail of people trafficking, children's porn, and child abuse. Not a job I would, it really is one of the worst crimes one can commit. Kevin Burke is interviewing children to see if a piano teacher is abusing them. He comes up pretty well negative, well done, great scribing, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm afraid I couldn't keep my personal feelings out of something like this. I honestly don't know how the cops do it.
    Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship, and encouragement. It always means the world to me, take care.
reply by royowen on 04-Oct-2020
    I agree with you.
Comment from Ulla
Exceptional
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Oh dear, Misty , that was a heck of a cliff hanger you left us with. It's a great story albeit about a tragic topic. I'm so glad you're writing this. So many sick men out there. Now I just have to wait and see. I didn't find any errors. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter and such a fabulous review. It's heartbreaking to think these sick perverts to what they do to innocent children. Robbing them of their dignity, their happiness, their childhood. Many never recover, often take their own lives. The situation is appropriate it fits the crime, lol.
    Thank you again for your marvelous review. All your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Exceptional
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I always get excited when I see you've got another chapter. The setting is great and this Toni is fun. You've developed a strong three-dimensional character. Many reader will feel closer to her now. She's like them. This line is a foreshadowing that something's amiss: "Ms. Barnes was living in a low-income housing complex
a few short years ago." This is excellent. It's like a movie. We can see it all: "He pushes his glasses up on his pale, baby face. Unlike the others, he appears to be rather frail, sickly." The plot thickens. You are becoming an excellent writer. I have to give you A+

I was so happy to be able to vote for this. Congratulated for being in the running.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for such an encouraging review and your marvelous six stars. A gal needs a little eye candy now and then to get her heart beating, lol. For me, it's the fed ex guy. I see him once a month when he brings our dog's stuff. Five minutes of heaven, lol. Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship and all your wonderful encouragement. It always means the world to me, take care.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 04-Oct-2020
    I used to be that wayat work at the shelter. The mail lady was hot. Several of us used to drool when had to deliver a package.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Lol. The world would be dull without a little tinsel now and again.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 04-Oct-2020
    LOL
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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I am so happy you are writing on this subject. It needs to be brought up front and out into the public arena, so folks will open their eyes. Very well done!

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter. For all your support, and friendship. It always means so much to me. I can only hope that this will raise awareness, save a life.
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 04-Oct-2020
    You're very welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
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Misty, allow me to apologize for not following your writing. I was reading your work religiously because you are such an exceptional writer, but I don't frequent FanStory often. All of your work is REALLY good, and I genuinely mean that. In fact, I am willing to purchase one of your books. Are you a published author? If so, where can I purchase your book(s).

Onwards to this chapter, this is a difficult subject to write about, but unfortunately, sexual predatory is a reality in our society. Hopefully, the "bad" guy will get what he/she deserves in the end. However, I know there will be twists and turns. I wonder what sticky situation the former judge is facing. I guess I have to stay tuned.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter and such warm comments. I understand about life getting in the way. I do have a few books on amazon, but they all are in dire need of editing. Hopefully, I can do that soon.
    It's a heartbreaking subject, the thinking that innocent children are being sold like commodities, tortured so. The bad guys will get it, my vigilante will see to that, lol. The sticky situation, is appropriate. My vigilante believes the punishment should fit the crime, lol.
    Thank you again for reading my chapter and such a kind review. It's always greatly appreciated, take care.
reply by Poetic Friend on 04-Oct-2020
    So, you prefer that I wait to purchase your book(s) on Amazon until after editing? If so, I understand.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    I'm afraid you'd be very disappointed if you buy them now. The plot is good, but they're not very descriptive, and there are a lot of grammar errors.
reply by Poetic Friend on 04-Oct-2020
    Okay, I understand. Please let me know when the editing has been completed. Have a wonderful week. :)
Comment from equestrik
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Good writing about such a horrible and tough subject. I think the key may be to do a better job teaching empathy and integrity. The perpetrators need to be stopped.

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for your compliment. You're right, they do need to be stopped, but it seems they're like rabbits, constantly multiplying.
    Thank you again for your support, it's always greatly appreciated, take care.