Where Are All The Children
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Finding the Truth"A vigilante takes down trafficing rings.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I don't know why I keep missing a chapter, Misty, I must keep a good eye out. This was a good chapter. You really know these people and how they live, suffer, are bullied, and why the bully is a bully. Now we are left wondering about this piano teacher, but they have to go somewhere else, and that means the little girl can't show them where the other child lives. Well done, this was a great chapter. I'm now off to the other one. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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I don't know why I keep missing a chapter, Misty, I must keep a good eye out. This was a good chapter. You really know these people and how they live, suffer, are bullied, and why the bully is a bully. Now we are left wondering about this piano teacher, but they have to go somewhere else, and that means the little girl can't show them where the other child lives. Well done, this was a great chapter. I'm now off to the other one. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such an encouraging review. I post on Sunday so maybe that's why you miss it. Kevin does a quick interview with the girl. He figures the others can fill him in that it's better to ask for forgiveness than permission.
Thank you again for reading my chapter all your support, encouragement, and friendship. It always means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Ric Myworld
The judge being in a sticky situation could mean a lot of things, some good, some bad. But either way, just someone knowing he's in a sticky situation is bad enough. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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The judge being in a sticky situation could mean a lot of things, some good, some bad. But either way, just someone knowing he's in a sticky situation is bad enough. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such a marvelous review. It's good for the police, not so good for him, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship, and encouragement. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Mistydawn, a terrific Tuesday to you, I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your story, I liked the child characters the most, I think they were written well. If I can find the time I will have to read it from the beginning. Will they go ask penny some questions or go help Mr. Washington? Guess I will have to keep reading to see. Good job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Hello Mistydawn, a terrific Tuesday to you, I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your story, I liked the child characters the most, I think they were written well. If I can find the time I will have to read it from the beginning. Will they go ask penny some questions or go help Mr. Washington? Guess I will have to keep reading to see. Good job and have a great day!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Happy Tuesday to you, as well. Thank you so much for reading my chapter, I'm so glad you liked it. The children were fun to write for, create. Mr. Washington isn't going anywhere, lol. Well, I guess he will be taking a stroll down humiliation street.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from forestport12
What a gripping story with dialogue that is realistic and doesn't just do an information dump. A story holds us more when we read the dialogue without tags, I think it helps get the reader more involved as if in real time. You seem to have a solid grasp of writing keys to hold my feeble attention span.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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What a gripping story with dialogue that is realistic and doesn't just do an information dump. A story holds us more when we read the dialogue without tags, I think it helps get the reader more involved as if in real time. You seem to have a solid grasp of writing keys to hold my feeble attention span.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for such a marvelous review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that I was able to keep you engaged.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very interesting story and I am enjoying it. I am looking forward to the next chapter. I find it interesting that this story is set in Atlanta since it is city that I've been in a lot.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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This is a very interesting story and I am enjoying it. I am looking forward to the next chapter. I find it interesting that this story is set in Atlanta since it is city that I've been in a lot.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind, encouraging review. I'm so glad you're continuing to enjoy the chapter. What did you think about Atlanta? I'd like to visit the Centenial Olympic Park, in person. I've visited through satellite, google and it looks amazing. There's a museum I want to see too, lol. The houses are gorgeous, but very costly. The retirement center I wrote about, I wouldn't mind living there at all, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
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Atlanta is an interesting city but I wouldn't want to live there and I had driving through it. I have friends and relatives who live in the small towns on the outskirts. If I go anywhere by plane it is the nearest place but the airport is the busiest in the world I think.There are some gorgeous old houses there.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Very well done. I have always enjoyed your writing, but you have really improved your style. This is a little harder to read as I really hate child predators. I have always thought they should get the death penalty. What kind of reprobate do you have to be to do this? Anyway, well done dear.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Very well done. I have always enjoyed your writing, but you have really improved your style. This is a little harder to read as I really hate child predators. I have always thought they should get the death penalty. What kind of reprobate do you have to be to do this? Anyway, well done dear.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and your nice compliment. This is a hard subject for many, this writer included, but it'll be worth it if I can raise awareness, save a child's life. You're right, they should get the death penalty.
Thank you again for reading my chapter and for all your help, support, and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Cindy Warren
These guys think their money and power will protect them. Sometimes it does, but sometimes things blow up on them. Maybe one of the kids will have the courage to talk. The only problem is the punishment they get isn't nearly enough, and they're back at it in a couple of years.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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These guys think their money and power will protect them. Sometimes it does, but sometimes things blow up on them. Maybe one of the kids will have the courage to talk. The only problem is the punishment they get isn't nearly enough, and they're back at it in a couple of years.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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thank you so much for reading my chapter. Hopefully, someone will speak up. You're right the punishment isn't harsh enough and for everyone put away two more takes their place.
thank you again for all your help, support, and friendship, It means a lot to me take care.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mistydawn.
It's difficult to know which is true sometimes when different children are talking about the same subject. All of them have a different impression of things that happened. Some of them want to maintain a relationship with older person because of security.
I think it would be difficult as a police officer to really be able to dig down into the truth. The dialogue and investigation procedure narrative is well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Hello Mistydawn.
It's difficult to know which is true sometimes when different children are talking about the same subject. All of them have a different impression of things that happened. Some of them want to maintain a relationship with older person because of security.
I think it would be difficult as a police officer to really be able to dig down into the truth. The dialogue and investigation procedure narrative is well done.
Robert
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. You're right, it is difficult. Some are to scared to tell. Afraid of what might happen if they do, afraid of what others might think, being branded.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Poor kids are bullied in so many ways. I am interested in the investigation. I hope they find what they are looking for. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Poor kids are bullied in so many ways. I am interested in the investigation. I hope they find what they are looking for. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. It's a shame he had to give up something he liked because of bullying. Toni believes something is fishy and she is like a bull dog doesn't let things go easily.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Mistydawn another great chapter in your book
Where Are All The Children. It must be nerve racking when Kevin the detective cannot tell if (Mr. Hensley is telling the truth or not
Gert
A chapter in the book Where Are All The Children
Finding the Truth
by Mistydawn
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Mistydawn another great chapter in your book
Where Are All The Children. It must be nerve racking when Kevin the detective cannot tell if (Mr. Hensley is telling the truth or not
Gert
A chapter in the book Where Are All The Children
Finding the Truth
by Mistydawn
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and your kind review. I imagine it is very frustrating not getting anywhere on your investigation. Especially when your gut is saying he's guilty, but you can't prove it.
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship and encouragement. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You are welcome Mistydawn.
Gert
