A talk on falling into the Arts
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Comment from Terry Broxson
What a wild and crafty mind you must possess, in a good way, of course. This a wonderful piece of satire writing. I love the way you poked fun a the public artists and their constituents.
I realize in this contest, you don't have to use quotation marks, and it is always the writer's choice in my opinion. I do think it might have dressed it up a bit if you would have used them, simply because you had several different speakers. Not a big deal, just food for thought. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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What a wild and crafty mind you must possess, in a good way, of course. This a wonderful piece of satire writing. I love the way you poked fun a the public artists and their constituents.
I realize in this contest, you don't have to use quotation marks, and it is always the writer's choice in my opinion. I do think it might have dressed it up a bit if you would have used them, simply because you had several different speakers. Not a big deal, just food for thought. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Hi Terry. Thanks for your read. Yes, I had one other reader mention they like quotation marks also.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Personally, I prefer to see the quotation marks. Without them, the reader has to assume each paragraph is a different speaker. Not hard with your piece, but generally speaking...
Okay then, thank you for calling Crissy. - Needs a comma before Crissy. Otherwise it sounds like Lothar called Crissy.
A nitpicker would point out that San Francisco is a rock and a 200' hole as you describe would be nearly impossible.
Nice job with the language, using an expanded vocabulary.
Good concept for dialogue-only. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Personally, I prefer to see the quotation marks. Without them, the reader has to assume each paragraph is a different speaker. Not hard with your piece, but generally speaking...
Okay then, thank you for calling Crissy. - Needs a comma before Crissy. Otherwise it sounds like Lothar called Crissy.
A nitpicker would point out that San Francisco is a rock and a 200' hole as you describe would be nearly impossible.
Nice job with the language, using an expanded vocabulary.
Good concept for dialogue-only. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Yes, I thought of that, but I think no quotes are best, it's like a script, it's taken for granted. Thanks, much appreciated.
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So a speaker could never change subjects following himself?
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You sounded professional, and bingo! There you were.
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Changing subjects still could work, it's all in the phrasing.
Dag nab Wayne, I didn't know San Fran was all rock based. You're no fun at all. :>)
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That area is.
Where the stadium was that had earthquake destruction is all fill. It would be all water 30-40' down.
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We'll have to dig deeper.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Truth reveals, truth at the end comes out, orderly, appropriate and realistic dialogues; I enjoyed the read; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Truth reveals, truth at the end comes out, orderly, appropriate and realistic dialogues; I enjoyed the read; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thanks, much appreciated.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I have seen some terrible ideas of what constitutes art in my time, but I think a hole thirty feet across, and 200 hundred feet must be one of the worst unless something is going to come crawling out of it. However, you gave an admirable, well-written description of the phenomenon, including interesting characters. Much enjoyed. Kate xx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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I have seen some terrible ideas of what constitutes art in my time, but I think a hole thirty feet across, and 200 hundred feet must be one of the worst unless something is going to come crawling out of it. However, you gave an admirable, well-written description of the phenomenon, including interesting characters. Much enjoyed. Kate xx
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks, much appreciated
Comment from Ricky1024
This was interesting as well as well written rich in theme and imagery.
Also, it read well and it flowed well with no grammar issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Thanksgiving.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This was interesting as well as well written rich in theme and imagery.
Also, it read well and it flowed well with no grammar issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Thanksgiving.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Brad
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Anus of Armageddon, lol! This was a terrific piece of satire that had me laughing all the way through:-)
Your character names are ridiculous in a good way, like devotee Spankwell.
Do you mean to say, "meeting ritual" or did you mean mating? Other than that, flawless.
Great read.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Anus of Armageddon, lol! This was a terrific piece of satire that had me laughing all the way through:-)
Your character names are ridiculous in a good way, like devotee Spankwell.
Do you mean to say, "meeting ritual" or did you mean mating? Other than that, flawless.
Great read.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Pam, so glad you liked it. I guess meeting and mating both work in a way, but yes, mating rituals.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Oh, my, satire that would attract the attention of anyone. I only noticed a tiny correction to make: biblical reference
I would say: Biblical reference.
This reminded me of unflattering art projects from the 1970s onward, that the Reader's Digest in the USA used to report government corruption on. I think your characters' names are witty, too.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Oh, my, satire that would attract the attention of anyone. I only noticed a tiny correction to make: biblical reference
I would say: Biblical reference.
This reminded me of unflattering art projects from the 1970s onward, that the Reader's Digest in the USA used to report government corruption on. I think your characters' names are witty, too.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for those stars Crystie. I'll get after that typo.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It's amazing what some people call art these days. I am not a fan, so I guess I'm not cultured. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It's amazing what some people call art these days. I am not a fan, so I guess I'm not cultured. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading Barbara. Sillyness, like my satire, is to me a presentation of laziness masquerading as art.
Comment from Bill Schott
This satire, A Talk on Falling into Art, really touches on what society sacrifices to indulge the whims of individuals with odd ideas protected by vague laws.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This satire, A Talk on Falling into Art, really touches on what society sacrifices to indulge the whims of individuals with odd ideas protected by vague laws.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Well noted Bill, many thanks.
Comment from Zue65
The message of this satire sinks through down the hole. LOL. I enjoyed the pun intended by the author in this post. Creative artists or so they claim must read this to wake them up for good. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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The message of this satire sinks through down the hole. LOL. I enjoyed the pun intended by the author in this post. Creative artists or so they claim must read this to wake them up for good. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks, much appreciated
