Debbie Makes An Impression
75-word story16 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Yes indeed. Debbie is a woman after my own heart and motorcycle!
Well done dear Story teller. Well done! This is a crafty and colorful image of the power of vintage and I do not give a f---K!
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Yes indeed. Debbie is a woman after my own heart and motorcycle!
Well done dear Story teller. Well done! This is a crafty and colorful image of the power of vintage and I do not give a f---K!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very well done in 75 words. I like your story of an outcast of her school who suddenly is cool when she shows up with a vintage motorcycle.
It is an enjoyable story and it also shows how we often judge people.
Good luck in the contest.
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Very well done in 75 words. I like your story of an outcast of her school who suddenly is cool when she shows up with a vintage motorcycle.
It is an enjoyable story and it also shows how we often judge people.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from lancellot
So, in the end nothing changed. The girls still did not come after she arrived on the bike. As for the boys did they come for Debbie or the vintage wheels?
Interesting short.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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So, in the end nothing changed. The girls still did not come after she arrived on the bike. As for the boys did they come for Debbie or the vintage wheels?
Interesting short.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Teenage girls are awful creatures. She's better off having something in common with the boys rather than just being a sex attraction. Maybe both the girls and the boys will respect her for what she did and try to get to know her better.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This 75 word story speaks neglected Debbie impressed all the boys as she arrived at school on her restored vintage motorcycle; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This 75 word story speaks neglected Debbie impressed all the boys as she arrived at school on her restored vintage motorcycle; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Very clever--amusing punchline and great buildup--excellent and darkly humorous description of poor debbie, esp. re bowl on head. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
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Very clever--amusing punchline and great buildup--excellent and darkly humorous description of poor debbie, esp. re bowl on head. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this is an interesting ending to a story that at first seemed to be about poor Debbie. I guess the dirty fingernails came from her auto shop activities, or that is to say, her motorcycle restoration activities. Nice job with younger characters in this little short-short.
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I think this is an interesting ending to a story that at first seemed to be about poor Debbie. I guess the dirty fingernails came from her auto shop activities, or that is to say, her motorcycle restoration activities. Nice job with younger characters in this little short-short.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
