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Comment from lancellot
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This seems like a short scene, but actually feels like an important part of a larger crime story. You did a good job of making every word count.

Good entry and good luck.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you.
Comment from donette1914
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very thought out they sure found the evidence and what a sad ending. very cleaver in just a few words and I thought your a very good writer and I hope for the best in the contest

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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Very short story indeed. It reminds me of a few other unspeakable cases. I think I might change "Barns" to "Barnes" for a more common spelling of the last name. Also I think I would add a comma after Entering the basement in the second to last full sentence. Good luck in that contest.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the suggestion. That may work better.