Miracola
In war miracles do happen.15 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding entry, my friend. You covered a lot of story in a restricted amount of those allowed. The baby's name of Miracola is original and adds to the realistic structure of the story. Good luck, Rod. I hope you win. :) Bob
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Outstanding entry, my friend. You covered a lot of story in a restricted amount of those allowed. The baby's name of Miracola is original and adds to the realistic structure of the story. Good luck, Rod. I hope you win. :) Bob
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Bob, for your kind praise and encouragement. Rod
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Good job, Rod Bob
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting Flash Fiction contest.
This short story is well told and touching.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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I think this is an interesting Flash Fiction contest.
This short story is well told and touching.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Sharon, for sharing my tale and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from zanya
It's a beautiful tale of human love and endurance shining out in even the darkest of days and situations - a lovely wistful hint of charm and mystique
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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It's a beautiful tale of human love and endurance shining out in even the darkest of days and situations - a lovely wistful hint of charm and mystique
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much, zanya, for sharing my short story and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
I think I'd be like the Sarge. How could a blind man feed a baby or change her diaper? It would be difficult enough in the best of times, but in a war where almost everything is torn up... how could he do it?
I'm sure there are pitiful stories that could be told about those 8 years of Nazi terror, 1937-1945.
I'm trying to figure out how the baby could be the old man's miracle. I suppose the baby's crying would give him something to focus on. But I still don't see how he could feed or change her.
Terrific imagery though, as I think about it. Surely the Red Cross would come along to care for the child soon.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hi Rod,
I think I'd be like the Sarge. How could a blind man feed a baby or change her diaper? It would be difficult enough in the best of times, but in a war where almost everything is torn up... how could he do it?
I'm sure there are pitiful stories that could be told about those 8 years of Nazi terror, 1937-1945.
I'm trying to figure out how the baby could be the old man's miracle. I suppose the baby's crying would give him something to focus on. But I still don't see how he could feed or change her.
Terrific imagery though, as I think about it. Surely the Red Cross would come along to care for the child soon.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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You are right, Kimbob. Most of what is happening in the story does not seem plausible; hence, the miracle that a blind man could?and did?care for the abandoned baby. Many thanks, my friend, for sharing my story and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the Flash Fiction writing prompt. It had my attention from beginning to end. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry for the Flash Fiction writing prompt. It had my attention from beginning to end. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I am delighted I kept your attention throughout, Rebecca. Many thanks for your high praise of my shortie. Rod
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Rod, I was cut off and don't know if you received the review. I repeat - this is a lovely story - fiction that reads like fact. I enjoyed the read very much and wish you Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello Rod, I was cut off and don't know if you received the review. I repeat - this is a lovely story - fiction that reads like fact. I enjoyed the read very much and wish you Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hi, Dorothy. Thank you so much for sharing my shortie and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad piece of history here and I dare say there were a few miracles against the backdrop of war and devastation and you brought one of those to our eyes today, much enjoyed Rod, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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A sad piece of history here and I dare say there were a few miracles against the backdrop of war and devastation and you brought one of those to our eyes today, much enjoyed Rod, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hi, Dolly. Yes, the story is "a sad piece of history," but I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Rod
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your uplifting contest entry. You are right. Miracles happen everyday and many are not aware. Your picture is perfect to pair with your thoughtful words. The old man needed the baby as much as the baby needed him. I like the dialogue and the characters.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I enjoyed your uplifting contest entry. You are right. Miracles happen everyday and many are not aware. Your picture is perfect to pair with your thoughtful words. The old man needed the baby as much as the baby needed him. I like the dialogue and the characters.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I am so pleased you found my shortie "uplifting," Jan. Many thanks for sharing it and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Ric Myworld
You have a special talent, not only as a writer, but for readers like me to share your character's feelings. Poof, your words laced with pixie dust. Thanks for sharing another fine post!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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You have a special talent, not only as a writer, but for readers like me to share your character's feelings. Poof, your words laced with pixie dust. Thanks for sharing another fine post!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hi, Ric. I am so pleased--and encouraged--by your continued support and praise. Many thanks for sharing my shortie. Rod
Comment from robyn corum
Rod,
Oh, how sweet! But you'd almost think that with the Americans arriving, there'd be some danger somebody'd want to take that baby away from the old man with the squeeze box. --frowny face--
Americans often try to make things better - and mistake the situations. (I can say that 'cause i am one.)
Nice entry. Good luck!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Rod,
Oh, how sweet! But you'd almost think that with the Americans arriving, there'd be some danger somebody'd want to take that baby away from the old man with the squeeze box. --frowny face--
Americans often try to make things better - and mistake the situations. (I can say that 'cause i am one.)
Nice entry. Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hi, robyn. I, too, wonder what will happen to that child once the Red Cross or some other organization enters the scene. Many thanks--as always--for your kind support and praise. Rod
