Waiting To Die
Sad story of a wasted life, possibly aided by PTSD26 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
A sad story much like my dad's life. I think God wants us to change and accept the blessing we have in our relationships instead of throwing them away. My dad finally changed in the last moments of his life after losing everything. I often wondered why he waited so long. A painful to read story for me, but a valuable message inside for those who need to read it.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xos.....
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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A sad story much like my dad's life. I think God wants us to change and accept the blessing we have in our relationships instead of throwing them away. My dad finally changed in the last moments of his life after losing everything. I often wondered why he waited so long. A painful to read story for me, but a valuable message inside for those who need to read it.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xos.....
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I am sorry for triggering painful memories. I thank you for your generous comments. My goal with anything that I write is to try to touch my readers with something, a frown , a smile or even a tear.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Waiting To Die
by nomi338
Hello, Nomi,
Great story/poem and I am sure it fits in with many veterans. It's so sad...
You created a believable life. I can't believe trump said veterans are losers and suckers. You did a good job honoring them.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Waiting To Die
by nomi338
Hello, Nomi,
Great story/poem and I am sure it fits in with many veterans. It's so sad...
You created a believable life. I can't believe trump said veterans are losers and suckers. You did a good job honoring them.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much. Unfortunately, some still do not believe or accept that PTSD is real and it affects far too many of our young who are thrust into combat way before they are ready, if indeed one can ever be ready to the horrors of modern day combat.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Nomi, a very well written poem with a story. This is fiction that reeks of truths. There will be, and have been, many who can identify with the words in this poem. Good rhyme and rhythm maintained in these ten stanzas. The stanza mentioning the back of the bus makes a strong statement. Well done and warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Hello Nomi, a very well written poem with a story. This is fiction that reeks of truths. There will be, and have been, many who can identify with the words in this poem. Good rhyme and rhythm maintained in these ten stanzas. The stanza mentioning the back of the bus makes a strong statement. Well done and warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your generous assessment of my poem. The statement about the back of the bus was personal, That is how my mom, my sister and I left the South. I did not want to come off angry. bitter or preachy, I pray that I did not. Much of this story is based on my life, but only some. I have been happily married for 47 years, and I have no desire to die. I thank you for reading and reviewing.
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It was my pleasure Nomi. You were not alone - some great names in the music world were treated badly, eg my favourite of all time - Nat King Cole. regards Dx
Comment from Mastery
Hello Nolan. Seems like it has been a very long time since I last read one of your writings. This poem holds much about life and living, doesn't it?
I particularly liked these lines:
"The day came when I graduated
This was a time I anticipated
It came when we were well situated
The reward for hard work, was created."
Brilliant, Nolan. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Hello Nolan. Seems like it has been a very long time since I last read one of your writings. This poem holds much about life and living, doesn't it?
I particularly liked these lines:
"The day came when I graduated
This was a time I anticipated
It came when we were well situated
The reward for hard work, was created."
Brilliant, Nolan. Bob
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thank you Bob, your honest review comments are always welcome and appreciated.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a superb work, "Exceptional" - definitive and as "real" as life is for some - I felt emotional as I read - a piece certainly for not only our present, but the days and years ahead, as a constant reminder of what can be and unfortunately is, for far too many, especially those who protect and ensure our freedoms...
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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In my opinion, a superb work, "Exceptional" - definitive and as "real" as life is for some - I felt emotional as I read - a piece certainly for not only our present, but the days and years ahead, as a constant reminder of what can be and unfortunately is, for far too many, especially those who protect and ensure our freedoms...
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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War, though it has proved to be necessary at times, it has never been a pleasant thing, and has never brought lasting good results. For example WW1, WW2, Korea, Vietnam, etc.
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I know and agree. I have family members who served...Eve
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Such as outstanding poem! I wish I still had six stars to give because this definitely deserves it. You are an excellent observer of "real life incidents and conversations" because you put together a poem that rings of realism. The words flow well.
Exceptional job!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Such as outstanding poem! I wish I still had six stars to give because this definitely deserves it. You are an excellent observer of "real life incidents and conversations" because you put together a poem that rings of realism. The words flow well.
Exceptional job!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your excellent review comments. Your words offer much encouragement.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I can well imagine this life was played out many times over, nomi. You tell the story of a wasted life and the person understanding too late what it has cost him/her. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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I can well imagine this life was played out many times over, nomi. You tell the story of a wasted life and the person understanding too late what it has cost him/her. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you. I like to think that this sad example gives deep meaning to the phrase "War is hell."
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Waiting To Die", is an exceptionally well-written, and heart-breaking piece. This talented poet has with craft and skill, told it as he saw it. To me, this is definitely a six, but sadly I've run out of them. Life seems to have a way of kicking us hardest, just when we're trying to get up again. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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"Waiting To Die", is an exceptionally well-written, and heart-breaking piece. This talented poet has with craft and skill, told it as he saw it. To me, this is definitely a six, but sadly I've run out of them. Life seems to have a way of kicking us hardest, just when we're trying to get up again. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you Duchess, a one from you is like a six from anyone else.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
War can indeed bend the mind and thwart the future and soldiers often suffer with PTSD and need much loving care and some never properly recover. This can happen after a traumatic childhood too. A sensitive write with excellent rhyming, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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War can indeed bend the mind and thwart the future and soldiers often suffer with PTSD and need much loving care and some never properly recover. This can happen after a traumatic childhood too. A sensitive write with excellent rhyming, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you Dolly. May I just say that I treasure positive feedback from certain writers here on this site, that I admire and respect. You are one of them without doubt.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Nomi,
The narrator of this poem has done so much with his life for good or bad. I feel a little dismayed that he says he's now waiting to die. People sometimes don't forgive our indiscretions, but God does. At any age people can ask God for forgiveness. And their heart and mind begin to change.
I understand why you ended the poem this way, though. It does have an effect on the reader. This is a stellar poem; good luck in all your writing ventures.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Nomi,
The narrator of this poem has done so much with his life for good or bad. I feel a little dismayed that he says he's now waiting to die. People sometimes don't forgive our indiscretions, but God does. At any age people can ask God for forgiveness. And their heart and mind begin to change.
I understand why you ended the poem this way, though. It does have an effect on the reader. This is a stellar poem; good luck in all your writing ventures.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much. Yes I never intended to imply that this was the only course open to the person, this was simply his giving up on life. Which to me is the saddest consequence of a ruined life.
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I agree. The last part of your poem came off well!
Nicely done. Have a ☀️ Nice weekend
