Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante

Excellent

Beautiful story in a rhyming and metered poetic form, about how your search for righteousness in your own strength led nowhere, but when you yielded to Christ and recognized your need for Him, He lifted you high with faithfulness and glory! Amen, Hallelujah!

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I searched in cavern's deep and dark
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I searched in caverns deep and dark

God became my saviour King
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God became my Saviour King

It is a gift from God and a blessing to others, to honor Our Savior as you do, with your poetry.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks so much Mary Kay, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 25-Sep-2020

You're very welcome, my friend and brother. - Mary Kay

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2020

Bless you sis

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 26-Sep-2020

God bless you too, my brother!

reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020

Thanks sis

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is beautifully written with perfect meter and lovely rhyme choices. The beat and rhythm of the lines flow well and, of course, I love the theme!! So well done, Roy!

Melissa

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks so much Melissa, for these super comments and review, blessings Roy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Beautiful poem, Roy! You took us back before Time when the Lord created and planned all of us and then you shared you wonderful testimony of life, seeking and being found by Jesus! Thanks so much for sharing in these well rhymed and perfectly metered verses!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks so much Helen, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Wow, another one of your special poems that shows us God and the glorious road to heaven. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with your writings.

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 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks so much Iza, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from oNray

Exceptional

Roy I do so enjoy your work. you have a depth in everything you do. This is wonderful, flows well, and holds meaning along with meter and rhyme
"you got game sir" it's a joy to read.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks dear friend, for these lovely comments and a super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Jeffrey Mitchell

Excellent

I enjoyed this very much, you speak from the heart. And allow your feelings to translate the words of God. In the dark place of our lives, God Speak to us. We are created in the image of God.

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 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020

Thanks so much Jeffrey, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy