Obsessive Tendencies
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25 total reviews
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, ""But they were, Tee. And there are no female Alphas becau -"
Tee interrupted her again.
"Because the freaking law says so." She emphatically pulled her athletic bra over her full breasts. She'd definitely been blessed with a figure that could stop a train - the distraction of such had made opponents in the past lose fights or even their life underestimating her because of that body's allure. But nature was nature and female wolves could not physically take a male, especially a male in the upper ranks of a clan. They were in the upper ranks for a reason and that 'reason' included size and lethality.", because I liked how you added female equality to this story to give it more depth!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Psalm 37:8
New International Version
8 Refrain from anger and turn from wrath;
do not fret--it leads only to evil.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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My favorite part was, ""But they were, Tee. And there are no female Alphas becau -"
Tee interrupted her again.
"Because the freaking law says so." She emphatically pulled her athletic bra over her full breasts. She'd definitely been blessed with a figure that could stop a train - the distraction of such had made opponents in the past lose fights or even their life underestimating her because of that body's allure. But nature was nature and female wolves could not physically take a male, especially a male in the upper ranks of a clan. They were in the upper ranks for a reason and that 'reason' included size and lethality.", because I liked how you added female equality to this story to give it more depth!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Psalm 37:8
New International Version
8 Refrain from anger and turn from wrath;
do not fret--it leads only to evil.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Oh, I am glad to see you hoping on board for the story, Fonda! ;) Thanx for the review! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
It appears that all created creatures have a tendency to lean toward sex, Yvette. :) Shalindra, is a good example. ;) Poor Rhoden, we are the weaker sex. This is the first time introduction of Gregors' promised bride and she is a doll. I don't know how Celeste and Gregor are going to handle the situation but I'm sure you will let us know. This is a good chapter for your book "Obsessive Tendencies." You keep writing and I'll keep reading. Thank you for sharing. Take care.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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It appears that all created creatures have a tendency to lean toward sex, Yvette. :) Shalindra, is a good example. ;) Poor Rhoden, we are the weaker sex. This is the first time introduction of Gregors' promised bride and she is a doll. I don't know how Celeste and Gregor are going to handle the situation but I'm sure you will let us know. This is a good chapter for your book "Obsessive Tendencies." You keep writing and I'll keep reading. Thank you for sharing. Take care.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Hey, Jose -- good to hear from you!! Thanx so much for your review on this one, sir -- gonna try to keep more into a groove these next few months: my life could certainly use some sort of normalcy!! Take care over there and enjoy the week! Yvette :) ;)
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Y. M. Roger,
Nice piece of Fantasy Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The most striking parts of this story are the phraseology and lovely flow which have the strength to keep the reader glued to it..
The last some paragraphs are particularly noteworthy.
Interesting Indeed!
[ This last SIXER was, luckily, left for you. ]
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Hello Y. M. Roger,
Nice piece of Fantasy Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The most striking parts of this story are the phraseology and lovely flow which have the strength to keep the reader glued to it..
The last some paragraphs are particularly noteworthy.
Interesting Indeed!
[ This last SIXER was, luckily, left for you. ]
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Well, RP, you just made my entire weekend!! Thank you for taking the time to read through this chapter and for such an awesome review, sir -- wonderful shining stars to brighten these ridiculously cloudy days over here - THANK YOU!! ;) My prose pen took most of the summer off with a number of upheavals in life, but I hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Take care of you and enjoy the upcoming week out there! ;) Yvette
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Hi Yvette, Most Welcome!
Glad to read your lovely reply.
You are a meticulous writer with an uplifting spirit.
Keep it up!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Angela VA
Your use of dialogue is effective in showing the personalities of the characters. This is especially effective combined with character movements and reactions. Consider removing "stared" from the beginning. I've read that words that refer to looking are not well received in manuscripts.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Your use of dialogue is effective in showing the personalities of the characters. This is especially effective combined with character movements and reactions. Consider removing "stared" from the beginning. I've read that words that refer to looking are not well received in manuscripts.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Comment from Angela VA
Your use of dialogue is effective in showing the personalities of the characters. This is especially effective combined with character movements and reactions. Consider removing "stared" from the beginning. I've read that words that refer to looking are not well received in manuscripts.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Your use of dialogue is effective in showing the personalities of the characters. This is especially effective combined with character movements and reactions. Consider removing "stared" from the beginning. I've read that words that refer to looking are not well received in manuscripts.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thanx so much, Angela, for stopping in on this one mid-story and thanx for the heads up on 'stared' -- both are much appreciated! ;) Would love to have you on-board for the complete ride!! ;) Take care and have a great week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Well, this is way out of my league. I've never read anything like it before. Guess I need to widen my horizons...
Of course, the writing is stellar. The characters interesting. Relating emotionally with each other from a foundation of life-long familiarity, but wrapped up in the events of the now moment. Political arrangements vs love.
Must be hybrid creatures. Reading viewpoints of humans mixed with animal.
Lots of angst over an upcoming wedding. Maybe the opening of opportunities and solutions will be sought by characters. Someone needs to break the cycle of: things as they have always been. We've got some modern females here !
Well done!
Lucy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Well, this is way out of my league. I've never read anything like it before. Guess I need to widen my horizons...
Of course, the writing is stellar. The characters interesting. Relating emotionally with each other from a foundation of life-long familiarity, but wrapped up in the events of the now moment. Political arrangements vs love.
Must be hybrid creatures. Reading viewpoints of humans mixed with animal.
Lots of angst over an upcoming wedding. Maybe the opening of opportunities and solutions will be sought by characters. Someone needs to break the cycle of: things as they have always been. We've got some modern females here !
Well done!
Lucy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Out of your league? Naaahh... just fantasy for the crazy the blonde!! ;) But I'm so glad to have you on board!! ;) :) My prose pen took most of the summer off with a number of upheavals in life, but I hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx for the wonderful review, my lady, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Heavens, Yvette!
From where does your imagination and creativity come?
I smiled throughout this exceptionally well-crafted and fast-paced offering. I adored the banter and the premise. And I am a newcomer to appreciating fantasy - adult or otherwise.
So much fun!
Will be following along; I promise!
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Good Heavens, Yvette!
From where does your imagination and creativity come?
I smiled throughout this exceptionally well-crafted and fast-paced offering. I adored the banter and the premise. And I am a newcomer to appreciating fantasy - adult or otherwise.
So much fun!
Will be following along; I promise!
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Wow - oh you really know how to make a girl feel good, my beautiful Michigan friend!! ;) Thanx so much for stopping by for the read on this one (know it was longer than most, so a special thanx!!) and such lovely shining stars to brighten these ridiculously cloudy days down here - THANK YOU!! ;)! :) Hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters... it's my THERAPY!! ;) You take care of you up there, my lady, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from aryr
Wow what a great continuation chapter, Yvette. It seemed to bring the whole situation to a peak. One that was of annoyance to Talietha, she really didn't want this arranged marriage and more than Gregor and Celeste. Great descriptions and details.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Wow what a great continuation chapter, Yvette. It seemed to bring the whole situation to a peak. One that was of annoyance to Talietha, she really didn't want this arranged marriage and more than Gregor and Celeste. Great descriptions and details.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thanx so much for jumping back in with this one, Alie!! ;) :) My prose pen took most of the summer off with a number of upheavals in life, but I hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, my lady, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
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You are so welcome, Yvette, It was great reading.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Sounds like arranged marriages rub Talietha the wrong way. This has the feel of a fantasy novel in progress, all right. Sounds like Shalindra and Talietha have a sort of uneasy friendship. Thanks for posting an interesting chapter. Could just visualize a wolf trying to get a wedding dress on and off.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Sounds like arranged marriages rub Talietha the wrong way. This has the feel of a fantasy novel in progress, all right. Sounds like Shalindra and Talietha have a sort of uneasy friendship. Thanks for posting an interesting chapter. Could just visualize a wolf trying to get a wedding dress on and off.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read on this one, Crystie - know it's longer than most and I do so appreciate your time and your support! :) Hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, my lady, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
P.S. Don't forget, a werewolf is in human form the majority of the time unless they 'choose to turn' their animal 'loose'... ;) :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Out of sixes, my friend, but it was worth the wait. I forgive your tardiness!!!!! LOL. I think this is your best story yet, I love the fantasy, the werewolves, fairies, and everything about this book. Once a month is not nearly enough, my dear lady, how about once a fortnight if you can't do once a week???? Pretty please!!
I feel so sorry for Tee having to marry for political reasons, but I could see a fiery, exciting marriage materialising from this marriage. It was nice to read about them again, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Out of sixes, my friend, but it was worth the wait. I forgive your tardiness!!!!! LOL. I think this is your best story yet, I love the fantasy, the werewolves, fairies, and everything about this book. Once a month is not nearly enough, my dear lady, how about once a fortnight if you can't do once a week???? Pretty please!!
I feel so sorry for Tee having to marry for political reasons, but I could see a fiery, exciting marriage materialising from this marriage. It was nice to read about them again, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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I'm certainly aiming for some drama in the near future... :) :) Thanx so much for jumping back in with this one, Sandra!! ;) :) My prose pen took most of the summer off with a number of upheavals in life, but I hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, my lady 'cross the pond, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
P.S. Think I should be able to do better on the releases now with things on track... fingers crossed!!! ;)
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You know you shouldn't say things like that to me, LOL, I do have a tendency to remind you some times.:)) I'm starting a new novel tomorrow. It will be interesting to see how it's received. Unlike anything I've written before. A bit boring compared to yours. But, the brain needed some light time. :)) I'll be keeping a watch out for the next part of yours now.
