Suspended
a hundred word horror poem12 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like the perspective of the narrator of this poem. We see them at the beginning and at the end, possibly their end. Though this has some humor in it, it still has some hidden current issues. They reader will be stirred by some of the events recorded here.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
  |
I like the perspective of the narrator of this poem. We see them at the beginning and at the end, possibly their end. Though this has some humor in it, it still has some hidden current issues. They reader will be stirred by some of the events recorded here.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Liz
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a horror deluxe entry for the 100 Word Horror writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
|
This is a horror deluxe entry for the 100 Word Horror writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, TT
-
You're very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is awful and many used to take the law into their own hands and hang people without a trial and dish out justice to those who they thought were guilty of a crime. I am so glad this does not happen in civilised society, a terrifying write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
|
Oh my goodness this is awful and many used to take the law into their own hands and hang people without a trial and dish out justice to those who they thought were guilty of a crime. I am so glad this does not happen in civilised society, a terrifying write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Dolly, for getting the horror aspect here.
Comment from Gloria ....
Whoa this definitely qualifies as a horror. I can imagine this has played out just like your wrote for some folk.
Your metre and rhyme is fantastic and here : cash that someone'd took. I think you could just write someone took, rather than someone had took.
Wishing you much luck in the booth with this true horror.
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
|
Whoa this definitely qualifies as a horror. I can imagine this has played out just like your wrote for some folk.
Your metre and rhyme is fantastic and here : cash that someone'd took. I think you could just write someone took, rather than someone had took.
Wishing you much luck in the booth with this true horror.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Gloria. I thought to insert some memorable wording to catch the reader?s eye. I noted the use of took as poetic license, since the perfect tense was indicated in the sentence. Happy day.
-
I did notice that in your author notes, and it's a terrific poem as you have written it. :))
Comment from Mia Twysted
What a way to have it all come to an end. This piece was catchy. The words bounced me around like I was jumping around with them as they were getting strung up.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
|
What a way to have it all come to an end. This piece was catchy. The words bounced me around like I was jumping around with them as they were getting strung up.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Mia
Comment from Ben B.
Yikes! What decade was this poem taking place. Stringing someone up like that is something someone would have done in the old west. Sounds like a dirty cop to me.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
|
Yikes! What decade was this poem taking place. Stringing someone up like that is something someone would have done in the old west. Sounds like a dirty cop to me.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Dirty cop goes along with rich cop.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, damn! This is a n excellent horror poem:) I think you have a winner here. I really like this stanza: "He used a night stick, hit me good,
then drove me out into the woods;
hoisted up now, like a deer;
I guess I'll end up dying here." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
 |
Wow, damn! This is a n excellent horror poem:) I think you have a winner here. I really like this stanza: "He used a night stick, hit me good,
then drove me out into the woods;
hoisted up now, like a deer;
I guess I'll end up dying here." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Thanks, Iza
Comment from Tina Crute
What a good entry for the contest! I would vote for this because it had a twist to it that surprised me, and I love the 'suspended sentence" double entendre. The picture is perfect. It's a sunny day, but not for everyone!
Tina
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
|
What a good entry for the contest! I would vote for this because it had a twist to it that surprised me, and I love the 'suspended sentence" double entendre. The picture is perfect. It's a sunny day, but not for everyone!
Tina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Tina
-
You are welcome:)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
Sounds to me like some vigilante justice - that is never warranted. BUT within the lines of your poem it also sounds like they have, at least, got the right guy. *smile*
Wonder how that money got into your truck, eh??? I mean, no self-respecting thief would rob a place, get money or valuables, and then hand it off to someone else, right?
I don't think yu belong on that tree - bless your heart - but maybe in jail. Certainly, before a jury! haha
Sorry to laugh - but you've put this in an unusual light. It was intriguing and fun. (Scary, too, of course - thinking if that person had been me!)
I found this really clever and well done!
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
|
Dear Mystery Poet,
Sounds to me like some vigilante justice - that is never warranted. BUT within the lines of your poem it also sounds like they have, at least, got the right guy. *smile*
Wonder how that money got into your truck, eh??? I mean, no self-respecting thief would rob a place, get money or valuables, and then hand it off to someone else, right?
I don't think yu belong on that tree - bless your heart - but maybe in jail. Certainly, before a jury! haha
Sorry to laugh - but you've put this in an unusual light. It was intriguing and fun. (Scary, too, of course - thinking if that person had been me!)
I found this really clever and well done!
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Robyn. I tried to make such a horrible situation just bit lighter.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word hortor poem about the mistaken identity that suspended an innocent life and the cop get lucky to get away with the stolen money someone else stole.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
|
A very well-written hundred word hortor poem about the mistaken identity that suspended an innocent life and the cop get lucky to get away with the stolen money someone else stole.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
-
Thank you, Sandra
