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Wedding Chronicles #2

Burt and Ali

27 total reviews 
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Oh, you do like to write the tear-jerkers these days, don't you, Lady Sal? Wasn't enough that I wrote that damn 3-liner a few days ago... now this! You know, you gotta know that I REALLY like you because normally? I would skip any and all stories that I know are really mushy (happy or sad) cuz I just end up sad. Just sayin... ;) A beautiful story of 'finally'... ;) :) Thanx for sharing (I guess... wink, wink).. ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    I'm glad you made it through this, dear Yvette. For the wonderful review, I am thankful. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs....
Comment from estory
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The opening scene was really poignant, this picture of a chance meeting on a train that sparks intense feeling, all kinds of possibilities of romance that go unfulfilled as the man doesn't express his feelings. We have all been there before, wondering about the might have beens. But your story has a chance happy ending too. Cancer treatment somehow brings back Ali, in leaving a book that the man recognizes. And low and behold, she is still single. It all ends in a wedding. hope springs eternal. estory

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for the lovely review and kind comments. This appreciate it. I?m so glad you enjoyed it. Sending along my best today as always, Sally XOs
Comment from poetwatch
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A lifetime of sorrow and loney hearts caused by a conficit that should not have been because of our leaders wordly gains. A sad story, Sally. You captured a moment in time. There are many people affected by war, for destiny changed as soldiers die. We may have gone right but we turned left and we changed the future of many. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    I was just saying to myself today, where is Jose? That's right he's been in Brownsville, Texas working on something. I'm glad to see you! I was getting a little worried there for a moment. I'm so glad you could read this and I really appreciate the kind review. Sending my best today as always and praying for your wounds to heal from the war. Sal XOs....
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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Oh what a sad and lovely story. You are never too old to fall in love or feel love. It's the same at every age, of course at this stage in life all my men are make believe, which I don't mind. =] Very well done as always. Rox

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the marvelous review and generous stars, dear Rox. I'm so honored. I agree, I've still retained my capacity to love deeply and write it into these stories. I'm hopeful for everyone. Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for the day,
    Sal XOs...xo...
Comment from Shirley McLain
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What a lovely story to read. I loved the great ending. It is a great storyline and I didn't find any errors. I'm looking forward to reading more. Have a great evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the lovely review and kind compliments. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the day,
    Sal XOs.....
Comment from Father Flaps
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Wow! That's quite a story, Sally. Did Burt survive? Did they get to spend their senior years together? Isn't that something, that they would meet again? Did Alice actually write "Strangers on a Train"? It would be the perfect clue for their reunion and eventual wedding.
I am a huge fan of the early Beatles. Not so much after "Rubber Soul". When I was an early teen, 1963-64, my friends and I used to pantomime the Beatles for all the neighborhood kids who'd come to watch. We used lamp stands for microphones, and turn up the record player as loud as it would go. We cut out heavy cardboard in the shape of their guitars, and color them appropriately. One of the songs we did was "Till There Was You", a beautiful love song. Years ago, there was a contest about Beatle songs, to re-write one into a story poem. It's back in my portfolio somewhere. Mine started out,
"There were bills on the fridge,
But I never saw their due date... " etc. etc.
"Till There Was You" was actually written in 1957 by Meredith Willson, for the Broadway musical, "The Music Man". Paul McCartney wanted to do a cover for it. It's one of the few that Paul and John didn't write. Meredith Willson also write "76 Trombones" for the same musical. He also wrote "It's Beginning to Look a Lot Like Christmas".
You tell a wonderful story, Sally. It could be a movie. Easily. A classic, in fact, with the correct actors. I'd say Helen Hunt for Alice, and Harrison Ford for Burt. What do you think?
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful review and glorious stars! I?m honored and blessed, dear Kimbob. Patricia Highsmith wrote ?Strangers on a Train.? I think it was written in the 1950s. Since I am a Disc Jockey of sorts, I knew about this song?s origins in ?The Music Man.? I still love it, and it remains my all time Fab Four favorite. Your choice for them is outstanding. I especially love Harrison Ford. He?s the right age. Helen Hunt is a bit young, but makeup could age her.
    Sending you my best today as always,
    Sally XOs......
reply by Father Flaps on 28-Sep-2020
    I didn't realize Ford was that old... he's 78. Twenty years ago, he would have worked for Burt. He would have been 58. And the perfect match for Alice would have been Shelley Fabares. She would have been 56. Ah, time is a bandit. He ambushes us. No mercy.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
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Such a touching and beautiful love story, Sal! "September Grass" has a double meaning for this story; both a time of year, and a season of life -- and additionally, it harkens back to the Vietnam Era when this lovestruck couple met. (I was a JT fan, but for some reason, this lovely song escaped me.)
I also always loved "Til There Was You;" even though the Beatles didn't write it, they performed it so well!
I just love happy endings, and you have certainly given us one, with this amazing, romantic story.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the lovely review and generous six stars! I'm so honored you enjoyed this and my music selections. Blessings to you always,
    Sal XOs...xo...
reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 01-Oct-2020
    You're very welcome, Sally. A real "feel-good" piece. So romantic. 💞
Comment from lyenochka
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Dear Sally, the six is for the way you told it and how you show me that he world needs this kind of story where a regret about love can be redeemed later in life. Personally, as we're dealing with chemo, I can't imagine anyone in that end stage going through chemo even wanting a romance. But I'm not a romantic type. Lol. Good job with the storytelling!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the beautiful review and gracious stars! I'm so honored. I'm delighted you enjoyed this. I've had several family members who survived and died of cancer. I write from a wealth of experience in this one. It's never too late for love or to make amends in my opinion. Your husband has you, and he is blessed and loved. I know this is true because you are a loving person.
    Sending you my best today and blessings always,
    Sally XOs...xo...
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Great story, Sally. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines a filled with great imagery of the time and conclude decades later the same way. I really like the image. The reference to the "British Invasion" sets the time right from the start. I'm thrilled Burt and Ali reconnected after many years. They seemed right for each other from the beginning although life got in the way. Great videos add more depth to your well-thought out chapter.

Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Jan dear. I appreciate the thoughtful review and generous kindness. It means so much to me. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs......
Comment from Ric Myworld
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You had me hooked with the names Burt and Ali, the names I used in one of the first stories I ever posted on FanStory. You have a special way of drawing me in. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful review and kind comments, dear Ric. Burt and Alice were referred to in my ?Love Letter on a Clipboard? and ?To My Secret Admirer? series. I thought I?d expound on them a little bit and give them their own story. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sally XOs