Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 75 "Basking in the Light"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
12 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a beautiful 'follow - on' here, June.... I like the little bit of rhyme from then to this you've made so seamlessly flow! :) ;) Bring on the blossoms (not a fan of the snow - lol!) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Such a beautiful 'follow - on' here, June.... I like the little bit of rhyme from then to this you've made so seamlessly flow! :) ;) Bring on the blossoms (not a fan of the snow - lol!) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your sentiments- glad you like this addition to the book.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Basking in the Light
by June Sargent
Hello, June,
Thank you very much for your chapter. It's beautiful and fits in well. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I love the presentation.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Basking in the Light
by June Sargent
Hello, June,
Thank you very much for your chapter. It's beautiful and fits in well. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I love the presentation.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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I?m glad you liked this addition to the book.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding your 5-7-5 to Gypsy Blue Rose's renga book. The picture you selected matches perfectly. I liked your focus on "apple blossom time". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you for adding your 5-7-5 to Gypsy Blue Rose's renga book. The picture you selected matches perfectly. I liked your focus on "apple blossom time". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this addition to the book of Renga.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the scene to my eyes June and I much prefer the blossom to now, but we have to accept all the seasons, a magical write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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You brought the scene to my eyes June and I much prefer the blossom to now, but we have to accept all the seasons, a magical write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this touch of spring - in view of the coming snow!
Comment from Cindy Decker
June,
Our neighborhood had one beautiful apple tree with awesome blossoms.
The photo is a very good facsimile of an apple orchard in spring. Your haiku is excellent and the second, line, especially paints a beautiful image of these trees.
Good work, June.
Have a nice day.
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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June,
Our neighborhood had one beautiful apple tree with awesome blossoms.
The photo is a very good facsimile of an apple orchard in spring. Your haiku is excellent and the second, line, especially paints a beautiful image of these trees.
Good work, June.
Have a nice day.
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your encouraging feedback!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
This might be just a 5-7-5 verse for this renga, but it feels like a well penned Haiku. Do like how your snowy imagery contrasts with the apple blossoms. Your selected artwork is perfectly matched with your poem.
Mark
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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June,
This might be just a 5-7-5 verse for this renga, but it feels like a well penned Haiku. Do like how your snowy imagery contrasts with the apple blossoms. Your selected artwork is perfectly matched with your poem.
Mark
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much - always appreciate your insightful comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Pink and White Petals, a part of the ever-growing renga, has the right set up and brings our thoughts to the white, cushioned, orchard floor after apple blossoms fall. Nice.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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This 5-7-5, Pink and White Petals, a part of the ever-growing renga, has the right set up and brings our thoughts to the white, cushioned, orchard floor after apple blossoms fall. Nice.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your insights!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Beautiful writing a great contest entry. Visual is very pretty . Pink and white petals cover trees instead of snow. Apple blossom time. I like the background colour you used for your poem as well.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Beautiful writing a great contest entry. Visual is very pretty . Pink and white petals cover trees instead of snow. Apple blossom time. I like the background colour you used for your poem as well.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your insights!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 addition the multi-author Renga book. The white and pink blossoms that cover the trees instead of snow flakes mean it is time for apple trees to blossom.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 addition the multi-author Renga book. The white and pink blossoms that cover the trees instead of snow flakes mean it is time for apple trees to blossom.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your insights!
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent 5/7/5, as an addition this fabulous renga contest June, you have done a fabulous a good satori, giving that Ambiguous touch to it, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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This is an excellent 5/7/5, as an addition this fabulous renga contest June, you have done a fabulous a good satori, giving that Ambiguous touch to it, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your insights!
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Welcome June
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Well done
