Don't wake the night...
A villanelle63 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
I have a daughter who her and husband are law enforcement. The old joke deals with the first stanza. Crime does not pay, and neither does it pay much to the officers either.
Thanks for sharing Bro.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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I have a daughter who her and husband are law enforcement. The old joke deals with the first stanza. Crime does not pay, and neither does it pay much to the officers either.
Thanks for sharing Bro.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Ben. for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gypsymooncat
It's a nice, lilting sort of form, given additional depth by the repetition of lines throughout. I think you nailed the form with your poem about how crime doesn't pay, even when it's committed at night. I also enjoyed your use of an Aussie slang word "crim" - it made me think of that brand of security awnings called "crimsafe" lol! As always, Roy, you've turned out another wonderful poem xoxoxox
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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It's a nice, lilting sort of form, given additional depth by the repetition of lines throughout. I think you nailed the form with your poem about how crime doesn't pay, even when it's committed at night. I also enjoyed your use of an Aussie slang word "crim" - it made me think of that brand of security awnings called "crimsafe" lol! As always, Roy, you've turned out another wonderful poem xoxoxox
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Nice format, rhyme and ever-all content. The picture really got my attention, also and helped to set a cool tone before even reading this. Catchy title, also. I absolutely love learning new Aussie words, too. After all, we are two People separated only by a common language! Great work, as always. Bruce.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Nice format, rhyme and ever-all content. The picture really got my attention, also and helped to set a cool tone before even reading this. Catchy title, also. I absolutely love learning new Aussie words, too. After all, we are two People separated only by a common language! Great work, as always. Bruce.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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That?s true, two people separated by a common language, thank you most profusely Bruce, blessings Roy
Comment from rjuselius
Wow. This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear Roy! I love the format and how you have stretched It to convey your meaning. I thoroughly enjoyed the poem.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Wow. This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear Roy! I love the format and how you have stretched It to convey your meaning. I thoroughly enjoyed the poem.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much dear Rebekka, for these wonderful comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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My pleasure entirely dear Roy <3
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Thank you Dear Rebekka
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Nicely done portrait in words of what goes on when the rest of the world is asleep.
I enjoyed the repetition of the last lines in every other verse very much and your phrasing made this work very nicely.
Thank you for sharing this poem and for the education imparted about a "villanelle."
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Nicely done portrait in words of what goes on when the rest of the world is asleep.
I enjoyed the repetition of the last lines in every other verse very much and your phrasing made this work very nicely.
Thank you for sharing this poem and for the education imparted about a "villanelle."
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Louise. for these wonderful comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from TPAC
An interesting arrangement of items, finding the looping of its theme captivating and delighting in its appeal, disclosing a wonder statement for reader to consider its views. All stated in my given opinion.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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An interesting arrangement of items, finding the looping of its theme captivating and delighting in its appeal, disclosing a wonder statement for reader to consider its views. All stated in my given opinion.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for these wonderful comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from To Write Is To Live
Thank you for your lesson in the villanelle poem form, and for your life lesson reminding us that what is done in the dark will be brought to light, and what is said in whispers, will be shouted from the rooftops. I will bookcase, "Don't wake the night... ." Thank you for writing and sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your lesson in the villanelle poem form, and for your life lesson reminding us that what is done in the dark will be brought to light, and what is said in whispers, will be shouted from the rooftops. I will bookcase, "Don't wake the night... ." Thank you for writing and sharing!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much, for these wonderful comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Doing the wrong thing will never pay off and your actions will always come back to you for you to pay when you do the wrong thing. Sadly, some never learn.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Doing the wrong thing will never pay off and your actions will always come back to you for you to pay when you do the wrong thing. Sadly, some never learn.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear author,
Chilling and spellbinding.... Awesome job!!! A great read!! Thank you for sharing this with Fanstory!! An honor to be able to read this... May God bless you and your family!!!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Dear author,
Chilling and spellbinding.... Awesome job!!! A great read!! Thank you for sharing this with Fanstory!! An honor to be able to read this... May God bless you and your family!!!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Anne-Marie, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Don't wake the night...
by royowen
Hello, Roy,
Beautiful villanelle...I really like this form. It's very melodic and sounds wonderful when read out loud. I think 'crime does not pay', means that thieves can't hide from God and eventually you have to pay for the crime. Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Don't wake the night...
by royowen
Hello, Roy,
Beautiful villanelle...I really like this form. It's very melodic and sounds wonderful when read out loud. I think 'crime does not pay', means that thieves can't hide from God and eventually you have to pay for the crime. Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thanks Gypsy, for your gracious comments and empathetic review, blessings Roy
