If Calories Could Only Talk
Best Diet Plan of All!15 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
i enjoyed this poem immensely,
.the rhymes are SO skillful and flawless its like you pulled them out of thin air, they are so gracefully well done. you did good, madame.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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i enjoyed this poem immensely,
.the rhymes are SO skillful and flawless its like you pulled them out of thin air, they are so gracefully well done. you did good, madame.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you so very much for the lovely review! It was definitely a fun one to write and I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful weekend!
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it was a fun poem AND a stroke of genius
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Thank you again! :)
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. That's a humorous ending. You describe that difficult thing most women experience after their fourth decade. And each decade our metabolism decreases so it takes so much more will power to avoid foods that pack on pounds. Great rhymes and storytelling. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Lol. That's a humorous ending. You describe that difficult thing most women experience after their fourth decade. And each decade our metabolism decreases so it takes so much more will power to avoid foods that pack on pounds. Great rhymes and storytelling. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you so very much for the great review! It was such a fun one to write... Since I've gotten older, I've always joked I was on the 50-50 diet... so it was a great opportunity when I had the chance to write about it! I'm so happy you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Temptation Poetry writing prompt.
This cute story is well told in the well rhymed verse.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Temptation Poetry writing prompt.
This cute story is well told in the well rhymed verse.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you so very much for the great review. It was a fun one to write and am so glad that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, If Calories Could Only Talk, says a lot about that preventable habit of overeating. The assault on oneself can be dealt with, but requires the courage to battle back against constant temptation.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This poem, If Calories Could Only Talk, says a lot about that preventable habit of overeating. The assault on oneself can be dealt with, but requires the courage to battle back against constant temptation.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the great feedback! It was fun to write and I'm so glad that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Isn't that the truth! Food temptation has hold of too many people and they cannot find the will power to resist. This temptation is a killer.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Isn't that the truth! Food temptation has hold of too many people and they cannot find the will power to resist. This temptation is a killer.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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You are so right... and thank you so much for the lovely 5-star review! I'm so happy you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
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You're very welcome. I voted for this entry!
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Thank you so much! This was quite a fun piece to write... venting (with humor) all the frustrations of dieting! Again, thank you, and have a beautiful day!
Comment from equestrik
I think this is creative and speaks so much of the truth about how the whole calorie and weight game haunts so many of us. It is a constant in my own life and I hate it. Food is the enemy and yet, I eat. I love the humorous edge.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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I think this is creative and speaks so much of the truth about how the whole calorie and weight game haunts so many of us. It is a constant in my own life and I hate it. Food is the enemy and yet, I eat. I love the humorous edge.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Yes... why does food have to be our enemy... especially when it tastes so good! LOL! I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem and greatly appreciate the wonderful review! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
Temptation Poetry writing prompt contest. Nice presentation.
Your poem is about dieting and counting calories but also compromise.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
Temptation Poetry writing prompt contest. Nice presentation.
Your poem is about dieting and counting calories but also compromise.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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I'm so happy you enjoyed my interpretation of "Temptation!" It was fun to write and I thank you so much for the 5-star review! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Dieter,
This poem was just so stinking FUN! Unfortunately, I can't relate at all because the calories and all food loves me. I'm slim and trim and svelte. And then I wake up. --sigh--
Favorite lines:
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Then maybe I could conquer such
The femme-fatale-la-foe
That's every woman's 'adversare'
Yes, every female's woe
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I put myself in utter shock
When after just a day
My calorie withdrawal signs
Led straight to the buffet
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So fun! And so clever.
Some notes, too, if I may:
1.) How did this monster (Calorie)
Sneak up, so craft and cunning
--> 'craft' seems a bit awkward there - maybe 'sly'?
2.) Also, when you have a quote that stretches over several paragraphs (or stanzas) you put an opening quote at the very beginning --- and then only quote marks at the OPENING of successive stanzas. NO quote marks at the ends of stanzas/paragraphs until the end of the whole quote.
Make sense?
--> So here, you would open your quote marks just before:
"It's time to start anew..
--> ADD quote marks to the beginning of the next TWO stanzas and leave them OFF of the last line of each stanza in the middle.
--> 'No-No' - should have SINGLE quote marks (') and then it that one should be followed with one set of double quote marks to close the whole thing (") If you have questions holler back.
I really enjoyed this a lot and wish you much luck in the voting. Thanks for the smile!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Dear Mystery Dieter,
This poem was just so stinking FUN! Unfortunately, I can't relate at all because the calories and all food loves me. I'm slim and trim and svelte. And then I wake up. --sigh--
Favorite lines:
*
Then maybe I could conquer such
The femme-fatale-la-foe
That's every woman's 'adversare'
Yes, every female's woe
*
I put myself in utter shock
When after just a day
My calorie withdrawal signs
Led straight to the buffet
*
So fun! And so clever.
Some notes, too, if I may:
1.) How did this monster (Calorie)
Sneak up, so craft and cunning
--> 'craft' seems a bit awkward there - maybe 'sly'?
2.) Also, when you have a quote that stretches over several paragraphs (or stanzas) you put an opening quote at the very beginning --- and then only quote marks at the OPENING of successive stanzas. NO quote marks at the ends of stanzas/paragraphs until the end of the whole quote.
Make sense?
--> So here, you would open your quote marks just before:
"It's time to start anew..
--> ADD quote marks to the beginning of the next TWO stanzas and leave them OFF of the last line of each stanza in the middle.
--> 'No-No' - should have SINGLE quote marks (') and then it that one should be followed with one set of double quote marks to close the whole thing (") If you have questions holler back.
I really enjoyed this a lot and wish you much luck in the voting. Thanks for the smile!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for the great review and I very much appreciate your comments on the quoting... I realized about the single quotes, but failed to go back and correct. Thank you again for your lovely review and suggested comments! Have a beautiful day!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! This is a nightmare in and of itself... great solution!! ;) :) A delightful collection of quatrains for the contest here -- thanx so much for sharing that smile and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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LOL!! This is a nightmare in and of itself... great solution!! ;) :) A delightful collection of quatrains for the contest here -- thanx so much for sharing that smile and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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You are so right... Dieting is such a "nightmare," but food tastes so good... it's just too "tempting" to resist! Thank you so much for the lovely review and am so happy it brought a smile! Have a grand day!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the calories fight every woman frequently fight to get rid of the extra weight we gathered from all the tempting foods we ate the last six months.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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A very well-written poem about the calories fight every woman frequently fight to get rid of the extra weight we gathered from all the tempting foods we ate the last six months.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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You are so right! And thank you so very much for the great review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful weekend!
