A Frantic Search
Free Verse23 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Haven't we all been there? With me its keys.
I like the frantic search wording as if you are looking for keys, glasses anything your reader thinks or has experienced in searching for a loss item.
Then you surprise with the lost item - a perfect thread.
While I will never be searching for a perfect thread, but I found a perfect search poem.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Haven't we all been there? With me its keys.
I like the frantic search wording as if you are looking for keys, glasses anything your reader thinks or has experienced in searching for a loss item.
Then you surprise with the lost item - a perfect thread.
While I will never be searching for a perfect thread, but I found a perfect search poem.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your great comments.
Comment from Bichon
A very sweet poem! I thought it was going to be about missing glasses at first, but a thread is much more wholesome and sweet. Great work and I'm glad you found the thread.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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A very sweet poem! I thought it was going to be about missing glasses at first, but a thread is much more wholesome and sweet. Great work and I'm glad you found the thread.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Fooled ya, didn't it? haha. Thanks so much.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, that is just how it is! You can search everywhere for the exact match, and never find it again. But you did! I love all the running and scurrying, hither and yon, and all those fun descriptions until, at last, you found it! Your are so good at these Fabulous Free Verses, I really enjoyed reading it. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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LOL, that is just how it is! You can search everywhere for the exact match, and never find it again. But you did! I love all the running and scurrying, hither and yon, and all those fun descriptions until, at last, you found it! Your are so good at these Fabulous Free Verses, I really enjoyed reading it. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. I appreciate that.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, you made me smile with the urgency of the search here as we are so intent on making something perfect, great alliteration and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Ha ha ha, you made me smile with the urgency of the search here as we are so intent on making something perfect, great alliteration and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun free verse, Yvonne. I laughed particularly at the end. The image is perfect. You give readers a great feel for this frantic search with your well chosen words like seeking, searching, running, peering, squinting . . .
I really like how you used the word 'match' near the end. Of course one wants everything to match if one takes the time to do intricate embroidery.
I like the great use of s & m alliteration, avail/fail cross rhymes. looked/took near rhymes (assonance)
Thank you for always giving your best for the club!
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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What a fun free verse, Yvonne. I laughed particularly at the end. The image is perfect. You give readers a great feel for this frantic search with your well chosen words like seeking, searching, running, peering, squinting . . .
I really like how you used the word 'match' near the end. Of course one wants everything to match if one takes the time to do intricate embroidery.
I like the great use of s & m alliteration, avail/fail cross rhymes. looked/took near rhymes (assonance)
Thank you for always giving your best for the club!
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you for a most wonderful review. It has really made my day!!!!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
You did a good job with the construction of this free verse an used some different sentence and phrase techniques to narrate the story.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hello Yvonne.
You did a good job with the construction of this free verse an used some different sentence and phrase techniques to narrate the story.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you. Just being silly today. Thanks for taking the time to look it over.
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You're welcome.
Comment from judiverse
Lovely wording. At first I thought you were writing about lost car keys. You do an excellent job of describing the search--frantic, searching, seeking. Then you tell us it's the perfect thread you need for your embroidery. I enjoyed that twist. Determination always pays off. Great subject for the "match" event. Another great idea. judi
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Lovely wording. At first I thought you were writing about lost car keys. You do an excellent job of describing the search--frantic, searching, seeking. Then you tell us it's the perfect thread you need for your embroidery. I enjoyed that twist. Determination always pays off. Great subject for the "match" event. Another great idea. judi
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you. Feeling silly today, but I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
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You're welcome. I enjoyed. judi
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You're welcome. I know that feeling. Haven't got started on my "match" poem yet, but I have an idea where I want to go with it. judi
Comment from Mimi Linny
Such an adorable free-verse with cute clip-art to add to your poem! Great rhythm and love the following, flowing sequence:
"searching,
seeking.
Peering and squinting"
Fun surprise that you were looking for embroidery thread...I honestly thought the poem was leading up to looking for and finding your "glasses" ... right there on top of your head!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Such an adorable free-verse with cute clip-art to add to your poem! Great rhythm and love the following, flowing sequence:
"searching,
seeking.
Peering and squinting"
Fun surprise that you were looking for embroidery thread...I honestly thought the poem was leading up to looking for and finding your "glasses" ... right there on top of your head!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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It could have been. I've been known to do that, too. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my bit of silliness.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Cute artwork and
nice presentation.
-You capture the feeling
of being frantic very well
from the first word.
-Then, there's all the searching.
-Gotta love the ending, too.
-The things we do for the
little things we have misplaced:)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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-Cute artwork and
nice presentation.
-You capture the feeling
of being frantic very well
from the first word.
-Then, there's all the searching.
-Gotta love the ending, too.
-The things we do for the
little things we have misplaced:)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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So right. Just a bit of silliness here, but I appreciate you taking the time to look at it. Thank you.
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You are very welcome. I had to read the poem really fast, to keep up, ha, ha.
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Good one. hahahaha
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😊
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Well, it shows your expertise in sewing and embroidery! I can't remember when was the last time I tried to match the color of a thread - maybe to replace a button or fix a sock. Enjoyed your free verse, Yvonne!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Lol! Well, it shows your expertise in sewing and embroidery! I can't remember when was the last time I tried to match the color of a thread - maybe to replace a button or fix a sock. Enjoyed your free verse, Yvonne!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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I was being silly, but thanks for reviewing it anyway. 8-)
