Mind and the sea.
6 word poem18 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks a thoughtful viewpoint comparing both heaving waves of the sea and brooding minds draw debris; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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This poem speaks a thoughtful viewpoint comparing both heaving waves of the sea and brooding minds draw debris; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from sammielwf
Sanku,
Love the image of brooding mind draws debris -for that is true.
The problem one is left with is...
How does the mind rid itself of the mind garbage/debris.
Would that it would go out on the next "tide" of thinking.
Great job with this.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Sanku,
Love the image of brooding mind draws debris -for that is true.
The problem one is left with is...
How does the mind rid itself of the mind garbage/debris.
Would that it would go out on the next "tide" of thinking.
Great job with this.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much for this honour .You have made my day. I was actually writing about myself.smile.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
This is a beautiful 6 word metaphor likening the psychology of brooding to a vacuum-cleaner effect of the ocean waves. Both bring in the debris. Debris, as used here, could be seen positively or negatively depending on the way one looks at it. Vacuuming and assembling debris is a good thing. Cleans things up. Must be done regularly to keep things tidy. But one can also dredge up harmful or unwanted things. Which could be helpful, or not, depending.
Inspires contemplation. Amazing matching photo and lovely shade of penetrating blue used to emphasize text.
Well done!
Lucy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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This is a beautiful 6 word metaphor likening the psychology of brooding to a vacuum-cleaner effect of the ocean waves. Both bring in the debris. Debris, as used here, could be seen positively or negatively depending on the way one looks at it. Vacuuming and assembling debris is a good thing. Cleans things up. Must be done regularly to keep things tidy. But one can also dredge up harmful or unwanted things. Which could be helpful, or not, depending.
Inspires contemplation. Amazing matching photo and lovely shade of penetrating blue used to emphasize text.
Well done!
Lucy
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you ,Lucy for your beautiful analysis and encouraging words.
Comment from Susan X Smith
The mood of this poem is thoughtful and somewhat dark. The picture is a fitting complement. You make a statement using only six words, as required for the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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The mood of this poem is thoughtful and somewhat dark. The picture is a fitting complement. You make a statement using only six words, as required for the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Yes thoughtful and dark it is. Thanks a lot.
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Love it! Wonderful message, wonderful graphic and such a massive punch in only six words. I really enjoy this. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Love it! Wonderful message, wonderful graphic and such a massive punch in only six words. I really enjoy this. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Excellent poem that draws a comparison between the action of waves and the consequences of a brooding mind - they both attract debris, things or thoughts that have little worth. I like the way you've put each "thing" on a separate line. It helps the reader see the comparison very quickly. The picture is perfect for it, as well.
Great poem!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Excellent poem that draws a comparison between the action of waves and the consequences of a brooding mind - they both attract debris, things or thoughts that have little worth. I like the way you've put each "thing" on a separate line. It helps the reader see the comparison very quickly. The picture is perfect for it, as well.
Great poem!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much for these encouraging words and total understanding of my words -actually my own state of mind.
Comment from rama devi
Good simile and potent theme (highly relevant in today's times)....and well voiced with strong word economy and fine alliteration for emphasis. Nice presentation too, dear friend. I also applaud the consonance of V and B.
Namaste,
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Good simile and potent theme (highly relevant in today's times)....and well voiced with strong word economy and fine alliteration for emphasis. Nice presentation too, dear friend. I also applaud the consonance of V and B.
Namaste,
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Namaste. Thank you very much.
Are you here or in US
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In USA...Florida. Taking care of my 86 year old mom. Can't travel back to India until things change!
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My mom is 87 and lives with me .She is frail and the corona has scared her ..
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So we're in the same scene! :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, now that's more said in six words than all these politicians and even educators say in a blathering paragraph or more -- Yes!! both not only draw debris, but they dump it on their surroundings (land and people... sigh). Thanx for sharing such a thought-provoking six words for today - good luck! ;)
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Well, now that's more said in six words than all these politicians and even educators say in a blathering paragraph or more -- Yes!! both not only draw debris, but they dump it on their surroundings (land and people... sigh). Thanx for sharing such a thought-provoking six words for today - good luck! ;)
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much.
