Flarewell
a tanka16 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Bill, your poem is bittersweet in that it's sad to see a person who was once healthy and active, shrivel to a helpless being. But the uplifting part is in your last phrase. Bill, your poem is very sad, yet hopeful .
Good luck with all your writing endeavors.
Have a wonderful week, Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Bill, your poem is bittersweet in that it's sad to see a person who was once healthy and active, shrivel to a helpless being. But the uplifting part is in your last phrase. Bill, your poem is very sad, yet hopeful .
Good luck with all your writing endeavors.
Have a wonderful week, Cindy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Cindy : )
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, my tongue got quite twisted on the word in the second line, but once past it the whole poem made sense. I liked it a lot and yes, we transgress into what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Hi Bill, my tongue got quite twisted on the word in the second line, but once past it the whole poem made sense. I liked it a lot and yes, we transgress into what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Ulla
Comment from judiverse
I can see you are under Bertodi's spell. Maybe she's creating new beings in her art. Great word transmogrification. It has a lot of syllables, too. The mystery is what that new being would be like. Interesting possibilities to contemplate in your poem. judi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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I can see you are under Bertodi's spell. Maybe she's creating new beings in her art. Great word transmogrification. It has a lot of syllables, too. The mystery is what that new being would be like. Interesting possibilities to contemplate in your poem. judi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Judi. The artwork is always compelling.
Comment from Tina Crute
Of course, I had to look this word up:) As I was reading, my brain ran ahead to guess you were going to use the word creation in the last line, but I like the alliteration and happy meaning of "becoming a new being."
The artwork is amazing, paired with your words and you are wise to choose it. It's like your words would be great but incomplete without the art, and the art would be great but incomplete without your words. I think they are soul-mates, if that makes sense.
I am writing the name down to look up Renate-Bernadi's work!
Thank you for elevating my vocabulary level and artistic taste today!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Of course, I had to look this word up:) As I was reading, my brain ran ahead to guess you were going to use the word creation in the last line, but I like the alliteration and happy meaning of "becoming a new being."
The artwork is amazing, paired with your words and you are wise to choose it. It's like your words would be great but incomplete without the art, and the art would be great but incomplete without your words. I think they are soul-mates, if that makes sense.
I am writing the name down to look up Renate-Bernadi's work!
Thank you for elevating my vocabulary level and artistic taste today!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Tina, for the encouraging review. Bill
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You are welcome. I am bookmarking this!
Tina
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, once I got past the word ( transmogrrification ) which I suspect you made up, your poem makes all sorts of sense. The Illustration. You chose to post with this poem is fascinating. I am transmogrified by it.(smile)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Dear Bill, once I got past the word ( transmogrrification ) which I suspect you made up, your poem makes all sorts of sense. The Illustration. You chose to post with this poem is fascinating. I am transmogrified by it.(smile)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Suzanna, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very interesting and well written poem. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Bill, This is a very interesting and well written poem. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from lyenochka
I'm wondering who died and was cremated? (I'm guessing "flare" has something to do with burning.) Is it a spiritual commentary of becoming new creatures? Or maybe it's only symbolic of someone's change in life?
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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I'm wondering who died and was cremated? (I'm guessing "flare" has something to do with burning.) Is it a spiritual commentary of becoming new creatures? Or maybe it's only symbolic of someone's change in life?
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Just a change at life?s end : )
Comment from trimple
Good evening, Bill
Your poem alludes to us being metamorphosised into a night star after death... Interesting thought, dear Bill. I suppose we are when you think about it...
Our body's putrify in the soil and turn to dust and give nutrients back to the earth, which; hopefully in billions and billions of years in the future, when this planet of ours explodes, we will all become a part of this dying star.
Good poem
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Good evening, Bill
Your poem alludes to us being metamorphosised into a night star after death... Interesting thought, dear Bill. I suppose we are when you think about it...
Our body's putrify in the soil and turn to dust and give nutrients back to the earth, which; hopefully in billions and billions of years in the future, when this planet of ours explodes, we will all become a part of this dying star.
Good poem
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Putrefy? Sounds yummy
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Putrify-as in rot away :)
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Right. I get it. I was being cute. Also, it's spelled putrefy. Thank you, Tracey
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I think you'll find the English way of spellering it is with n 'i'
Not being an American n all, like... :)
Comment from nomi338
After having done what he came here to do. After having said what he came here to say. After having gone where he came here to go. There was nothing left for him to do, but to return to the place from whence he came. Leaving a model for us to follow. Satan engineered it but his victory was hollow.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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After having done what he came here to do. After having said what he came here to say. After having gone where he came here to go. There was nothing left for him to do, but to return to the place from whence he came. Leaving a model for us to follow. Satan engineered it but his victory was hollow.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thanks for the review, nomi.
Comment from BethShelby
An interesting tanka and a most interesting picture you've chosen. I've watched as loved ones or acquaintances took their last breath and although I did seen them become a new being, I had faith that I had witnessed a something profound.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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An interesting tanka and a most interesting picture you've chosen. I've watched as loved ones or acquaintances took their last breath and although I did seen them become a new being, I had faith that I had witnessed a something profound.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Beth. I hoped that would come through.
