I never met a metaphor I liked
A satirical look at romance writing9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has several messages for the reader if they are writers. One is the warning about plagiarism. In some ways our plagiarism may be fed by the archetypals from our bicameral minds. Writers are haunted and gifted by these. The other striking element is how well you depicted our struggle in composing. I am voting for this one.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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This has several messages for the reader if they are writers. One is the warning about plagiarism. In some ways our plagiarism may be fed by the archetypals from our bicameral minds. Writers are haunted and gifted by these. The other striking element is how well you depicted our struggle in composing. I am voting for this one.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Liz. Yes, we've all been there. I've started many a story, and then dumped it two para's in. Then when you do find a direction, the old, 'that's been done,' ghost come in.
Comment from robyn corum
Brad,
So this guy tossed several possibilites until he ended up with one he KNEW in his heart was a winner. Yep. Headed for disaster, that one.
This contest is a fun one and I'm enjoying reading the entries.
Some notes, if I may:
1.) "Oui. What part of the states are you from?" (s)he answered.
2.) "Oh, please do, Harry(,)" (s)he offered.
3.) "Well(, h)ello," she said, her voice teasingly soft
4.) this hard(-)to(-)get beauty had acceped. "Marjo's it is(,)" (h)e came back.
Still worth a five. Thanks!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Brad,
So this guy tossed several possibilites until he ended up with one he KNEW in his heart was a winner. Yep. Headed for disaster, that one.
This contest is a fun one and I'm enjoying reading the entries.
Some notes, if I may:
1.) "Oui. What part of the states are you from?" (s)he answered.
2.) "Oh, please do, Harry(,)" (s)he offered.
3.) "Well(, h)ello," she said, her voice teasingly soft
4.) this hard(-)to(-)get beauty had acceped. "Marjo's it is(,)" (h)e came back.
Still worth a five. Thanks!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Robyn, Great Review, and thanks for the 5 stars, and, for rooting out those 'blinkin' typos.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
I'm laughing so hard right now!
Satirical story of a writer clearly tapping into ego, instead of into Source, for the inspiration to compose a romance novel.
A treatise on frustration, progressing to anger, then to the using of other people's ideas.
Well done character sketch. Leaves this reader wondering whether or not the writer will pursue the key to writing about romance. Maybe wine and valium would be easier :)
Strong contest entry here.
Lucy
Corrects:
...teak deck above, announced to (Daymond) (sp)
..."I would like to specialize in it for western tastes" -- (awkward. don't really know what it means)
teakettle = tea kettle (2 words)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I'm laughing so hard right now!
Satirical story of a writer clearly tapping into ego, instead of into Source, for the inspiration to compose a romance novel.
A treatise on frustration, progressing to anger, then to the using of other people's ideas.
Well done character sketch. Leaves this reader wondering whether or not the writer will pursue the key to writing about romance. Maybe wine and valium would be easier :)
Strong contest entry here.
Lucy
Corrects:
...teak deck above, announced to (Daymond) (sp)
..."I would like to specialize in it for western tastes" -- (awkward. don't really know what it means)
teakettle = tea kettle (2 words)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks Lucy. I think your review is even funnier than the reviewed. What a hoot. When I put that hat on to write it, I went through all those emotions. Pass the Valium :>)
Oh, the western tastes refers, to bringing the old countryside recipes from rural France, etc to the mainstream. I don't know what I'm talking about, but it's sounds so continental!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I love your creative approach to the difficulty of good/bad writing and making it enjoyable as your "writer" searches with changes of stories and character in search for the perfect story and then heads to plagiarism using words from "have and have not".
Good work.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I love your creative approach to the difficulty of good/bad writing and making it enjoyable as your "writer" searches with changes of stories and character in search for the perfect story and then heads to plagiarism using words from "have and have not".
Good work.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thats six times Mary, you made my day. It was a fun piece to write.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSSuperb! A wickedly witty tour de force. Should be classified as humor or even satire as a tip off to the over-the-top delights that await. CheerSSSSSS. LIZ (I am metaphorically challenged myself)
(The wet hues WASHING downward, BLENDING into s/b washing/blended or washed/blending--unless you intend this as a fragment, in which case STET!)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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SSSSSSuperb! A wickedly witty tour de force. Should be classified as humor or even satire as a tip off to the over-the-top delights that await. CheerSSSSSS. LIZ (I am metaphorically challenged myself)
(The wet hues WASHING downward, BLENDING into s/b washing/blended or washed/blending--unless you intend this as a fragment, in which case STET!)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much! Elizabeth. So glad you got it. Yes, its a satire, I should change it. Yes the colors drip down the canvas, then blend into other colors. Will have to work on that. Thank you for those stars, that will help to get it going.
Comment from equestrik
This writing is well done and I think it definitely speaks to the frustration a writer often feels when searching for the best words to use in a particular piece of work. I also enjoyed the humor. :)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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This writing is well done and I think it definitely speaks to the frustration a writer often feels when searching for the best words to use in a particular piece of work. I also enjoyed the humor. :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Ouch! equestrik. That piece was a difficult satire. Anyway, thanks for the review.
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Not sure why the ouch-I liked it
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Oh, I'm being sensitive I guess, the standard is usually 5 stars. Maybe it shouldn't be. Your review is probably more honest.
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That is something i don't understand here, It seems that everyone expects to be told every write is excellent. I am sorry to offend. :(
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I was just surprised, not offended. You continue with your honest reviews. I think the bar is too low, and you are where all reviews should be. You stay your true course. We can't learn from critique if it's not honest. I look forward to your feedback. :>)
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Thank you again!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, Ha, Ha we are a little bit on the Sandra Brown side today, but you are right is not easy to write about a "sensual" subject:)In the end is all about writing.Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Ha, Ha, Ha we are a little bit on the Sandra Brown side today, but you are right is not easy to write about a "sensual" subject:)In the end is all about writing.Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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You got it. I must have rewritten that a dozen times, I can't imagine doing that for a lifetime, You have to set your brain on one gear only. But it was a fun challenge. Thanks for the review Iza.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
This is superb! I enjoyed it so much, because who is the writer who still can write something original in a seductive sexy scenery? Not many I think.
Wonderful use of the Casablanca scene: "You know how to whistle, don't you, Steve..."
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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This is superb! I enjoyed it so much, because who is the writer who still can write something original in a seductive sexy scenery? Not many I think.
Wonderful use of the Casablanca scene: "You know how to whistle, don't you, Steve..."
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Good going Marjon, you got the line. Glad you liked it.
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Welcome to the review, Brad. I enjoyed your looking for the best metaphor
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry with a surprising method of storytelling for the All about writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry with a surprising method of storytelling for the All about writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks Rebecca. Glad you liked it.
