His Promises He'll Keep
My heart is filled with hope43 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, my, I am glad I got sixes today. What a fabulous poem.
Yes, we all get tired and worn out and need to weep. But we forget that He is there, watching over us, knowing our every thought. We have to give ourselves into His hands, and it'll bring relief. I've been there.
A well sustained syllable count of 8/6/8/6 with occasional rhyming. It works very well.
In my opinion, there is no need to apostrophize "memories" in the first stanza. You will have the right count without it, and it'll sound better.
So often as I lay me down
upon my bed to sleep --
I'm haunted by old memories
and I begin to weep.
A beautiful spiritual poem. I need to hear this today, thank you for the uplift.
Good luck in that contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Oh, my, I am glad I got sixes today. What a fabulous poem.
Yes, we all get tired and worn out and need to weep. But we forget that He is there, watching over us, knowing our every thought. We have to give ourselves into His hands, and it'll bring relief. I've been there.
A well sustained syllable count of 8/6/8/6 with occasional rhyming. It works very well.
In my opinion, there is no need to apostrophize "memories" in the first stanza. You will have the right count without it, and it'll sound better.
So often as I lay me down
upon my bed to sleep --
I'm haunted by old memories
and I begin to weep.
A beautiful spiritual poem. I need to hear this today, thank you for the uplift.
Good luck in that contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review and for special six star rating.
No need for an apostrophe in memories in line 3. Good catch.
I'm so pleased that this spoke to you today.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Absolutely beautiful writing I love your descriptive wording. So beautifully said. The one who hung the stars at night and ladled out the seas. Grateful for each mountain top and for the strength to climb. For he who breathes life into man lives now and for all time. Wonderful piece of writing. I Love everything about it.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Absolutely beautiful writing I love your descriptive wording. So beautifully said. The one who hung the stars at night and ladled out the seas. Grateful for each mountain top and for the strength to climb. For he who breathes life into man lives now and for all time. Wonderful piece of writing. I Love everything about it.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you Joanne for your wonderful and encouraging review and for special six star rating. I'm so pleased that this one resonated with you.
Blessings
Janet
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Your welcome
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Great entry for this contest. I do not subscribe much to faith-based ideas, but I will always read poetry. No matter the subject matter. Thank you for sharing and good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Great entry for this contest. I do not subscribe much to faith-based ideas, but I will always read poetry. No matter the subject matter. Thank you for sharing and good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from A. Fortier
JMF4119,
Thank you for sharing this faith based poem. You praised God beautifully through this. I really enjoyed the read. Congrats on great work!
-A.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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JMF4119,
Thank you for sharing this faith based poem. You praised God beautifully through this. I really enjoyed the read. Congrats on great work!
-A.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you A for this wonderful review and the special rating. I am honored
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
That's the most comforting thing of all, that God will keep His promises, whereas some humans, me included, may have good intentions, but some will go by the wayside. Beautifully written dear Janet, these are great words dear girl. If we fail or not, Jesus will be faithful, well done, great ballad, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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That's the most comforting thing of all, that God will keep His promises, whereas some humans, me included, may have good intentions, but some will go by the wayside. Beautifully written dear Janet, these are great words dear girl. If we fail or not, Jesus will be faithful, well done, great ballad, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Roy for this wonderful review. I am always pleased to hear from you.
Blessings
Janet
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Bless you Janet
Comment from Supe
My goodness I enjoyed this poem so much. I love rhyming and this flowed smoothly from start to finish and leaves such a nice message in its wake. The presentation is comforting as well. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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My goodness I enjoyed this poem so much. I love rhyming and this flowed smoothly from start to finish and leaves such a nice message in its wake. The presentation is comforting as well. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Supe for this wonderful review and the special rating. I am honored,
Blessings
Janet
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you are so welcome.
Comment from mrsmajor
Beautifully written, and filled with God's never ending creations, using rhymed quatrain verses. and I loved every word...it was a joy to read, Good luck in the contest, and Stay Safe and Well...Thanks for sharing...Blessings!
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Beautifully written, and filled with God's never ending creations, using rhymed quatrain verses. and I loved every word...it was a joy to read, Good luck in the contest, and Stay Safe and Well...Thanks for sharing...Blessings!
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Victoria for this wonderful review. I appreciate your encouragement.
Blessings
Janet
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You're quite welcome, it was my pleasure...Blessings!
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
very beautiful faith-poem. And yes, He will keep His promises, I never doubted that. I don't need to be afraid, because He has my life in His hands, He watches over me, and when He thinks its time for me to go, He is there to let me into Heaven's doors to let me in. I have faith and do believe with all my heart.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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very beautiful faith-poem. And yes, He will keep His promises, I never doubted that. I don't need to be afraid, because He has my life in His hands, He watches over me, and when He thinks its time for me to go, He is there to let me into Heaven's doors to let me in. I have faith and do believe with all my heart.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Marjon for this wonderful review. I appreciate your encouragement.
Blessings
Janet
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Welcome to the review, Janet.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
'ladled out the seas'.... what an almost magical phrase, my lady!! ;) Beautifully rhymed in flowing ballad rhythm - you paint for us a wonderful testimony of faith! ;) Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
I lay be down --> [did you mean...?] I lay me down
[suggestion for rhythm, feel free to ignore...]
memories fair --> mem'ries fair
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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'ladled out the seas'.... what an almost magical phrase, my lady!! ;) Beautifully rhymed in flowing ballad rhythm - you paint for us a wonderful testimony of faith! ;) Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
I lay be down --> [did you mean...?] I lay me down
[suggestion for rhythm, feel free to ignore...]
memories fair --> mem'ries fair
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Yvette for this wonderful review. I appreciate your encouragement and the kind corrections. I have made the changes and the poem reads much better.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. A night when we come to rest in our bed our thoughts and mind wandering in the past and bring up worries that keep us from sleep, but we can trust Him to take care of everything for us.
Typo
So often as I lay be(me) down
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. A night when we come to rest in our bed our thoughts and mind wandering in the past and bring up worries that keep us from sleep, but we can trust Him to take care of everything for us.
Typo
So often as I lay be(me) down
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you Sandra for this wonderful review. I always appreciate your encouragement. Thank you too for catching my typo.
Blessings
Janet
