Hum A Happy Tune
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jay,
I enjoyed your poem, "Hum A Happy Tune". It reminded me of that song by Bobby McFerrin, "Don't Worry, Be Happy". Lots of whistling in it, too.
https://youtu.be/d-diB65scQU
I can't whistle now either. I have a partial plate, and it just doesn't work for whistling. But you solved that problem... you hum instead. Where there's a will, there's a way. I play guitar... that's my way.
I have just one suggestion.
"But then, with age my teeth were lost
and broken spirits were the cost." I suggest,
(But then, with age my teeth were lost,
For bubble gum and candy cost.)
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Hi Jay,
I enjoyed your poem, "Hum A Happy Tune". It reminded me of that song by Bobby McFerrin, "Don't Worry, Be Happy". Lots of whistling in it, too.
https://youtu.be/d-diB65scQU
I can't whistle now either. I have a partial plate, and it just doesn't work for whistling. But you solved that problem... you hum instead. Where there's a will, there's a way. I play guitar... that's my way.
I have just one suggestion.
"But then, with age my teeth were lost
and broken spirits were the cost." I suggest,
(But then, with age my teeth were lost,
For bubble gum and candy cost.)
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from ameen786
My friend, you poetry resonates, because you reflect upon the reality of life; as always uplifting in simple down to earth vocabulary, framed into lovely, meaningful verses; thank you for the delightful treat.
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My friend, you poetry resonates, because you reflect upon the reality of life; as always uplifting in simple down to earth vocabulary, framed into lovely, meaningful verses; thank you for the delightful treat.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Interesting poem. I too have problems with dentures. I like your idea of changing singing to whistling instead. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
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Interesting poem. I too have problems with dentures. I like your idea of changing singing to whistling instead. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Bravo! Very nice cadence, very nice flow, and an even better message. This certainly did life my spirits. The positivity and determination to stay happy prevails here. Thank you for sharing!
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Bravo! Very nice cadence, very nice flow, and an even better message. This certainly did life my spirits. The positivity and determination to stay happy prevails here. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from A. Fortier
I've read another on of your posts and was equally as thrilled by it. Your a great writer and this is a beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing!
A.Fortier
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I've read another on of your posts and was equally as thrilled by it. Your a great writer and this is a beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing!
A.Fortier
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from donette1914
This was beautiful my grandfather hum all the time and i truly enjoyed this piece.
very well done
it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
with your well penned poem truly outstanding!!!
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This was beautiful my grandfather hum all the time and i truly enjoyed this piece.
very well done
it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
with your well penned poem truly outstanding!!!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from equestrik
I enjoy your poems so much and that is mostly because they are happy and positive and really just make me feel good when I read them. It is definitely hard to feel bad when whistling or humming. :)
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I enjoy your poems so much and that is mostly because they are happy and positive and really just make me feel good when I read them. It is definitely hard to feel bad when whistling or humming. :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from kleck140
You poetry makes me hum a tune. I like the way
you make it rhyme and that seems more like when
I went to school poetry. You are a natural at telling
a story in poetry.
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You poetry makes me hum a tune. I like the way
you make it rhyme and that seems more like when
I went to school poetry. You are a natural at telling
a story in poetry.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from robyn corum
Jay,
What fun! I've tried all my life to learn how to whistle. But to no avail. I love the optimistic style of this poem - even if bad things happen we can make them into positives with the right attitude. Thanks so much!
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Jay,
What fun! I've tried all my life to learn how to whistle. But to no avail. I love the optimistic style of this poem - even if bad things happen we can make them into positives with the right attitude. Thanks so much!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Great poem. I love the up-beat tone and the language is good. There is good rhyme here, with a somehow fitting, very direct presentation and large font. I like that so I can read it easier. My new glasses aren't her yet! Great work.
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Great poem. I love the up-beat tone and the language is good. There is good rhyme here, with a somehow fitting, very direct presentation and large font. I like that so I can read it easier. My new glasses aren't her yet! Great work.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
