Raging Water
Hatred leaves you empty17 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
This is a creepy story and I like the atmosphere you create. The brotherly relationship is the well developed and even if we don't know what happened, it was obviously something terrible though which makes the story even more interesting. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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This is a creepy story and I like the atmosphere you create. The brotherly relationship is the well developed and even if we don't know what happened, it was obviously something terrible though which makes the story even more interesting. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Carlos' girl
wow Mia, your words " hatred leaves you empty" are so true imo. this is a most compelling poem with a very unique theme. how terrible that the universe has to give him what he deserves.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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wow Mia, your words " hatred leaves you empty" are so true imo. this is a most compelling poem with a very unique theme. how terrible that the universe has to give him what he deserves.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Yes, indeed. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Stunningly savage! Startling and fresh imagery--as if the gods were crying ... wind shoved him away as if ... cyclone swept in ... denying. Great closer. Good luck! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Stunningly savage! Startling and fresh imagery--as if the gods were crying ... wind shoved him away as if ... cyclone swept in ... denying. Great closer. Good luck! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Raging Water, has the required word count and seems to end a bizarre tale that we can only imagine.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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This one-hundred-word story, Raging Water, has the required word count and seems to end a bizarre tale that we can only imagine.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from poetwatch
Well, Mia, I see you do like the dark side of the coin. This is a good story. A story that can be developed to fill the papes with about 1000 to 5000 words. I like the twist of the cyclone. :) Thank you for sharing your writing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Well, Mia, I see you do like the dark side of the coin. This is a good story. A story that can be developed to fill the papes with about 1000 to 5000 words. I like the twist of the cyclone. :) Thank you for sharing your writing.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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I indeed do. It helps take out my frustrations so I don't become a serial killer.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Excellent entry for the
100 Word Story writing prompt contest. You did a good job telling a flash fiction story in 100 words. I wonder what the brother was trying to do to Mike.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hello anonymous
Excellent entry for the
100 Word Story writing prompt contest. You did a good job telling a flash fiction story in 100 words. I wonder what the brother was trying to do to Mike.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you. I don't know but it was not going to be good.
Comment from RShipp
What on earth is the back story of these two brothers- so much hatred!!
Best of luck in the100 Word Story writing contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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What on earth is the back story of these two brothers- so much hatred!!
Best of luck in the100 Word Story writing contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this and the message conveyed in it. Hatred does leave one empty yet perhaps full at the same time. This reminds me of the biblical account of Cain killing his brother Abel. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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I like this and the message conveyed in it. Hatred does leave one empty yet perhaps full at the same time. This reminds me of the biblical account of Cain killing his brother Abel. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is treachery and damnation in these words as murder can tear apart and kill all the love that ever existed and change the future forever, a chilling write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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There is treachery and damnation in these words as murder can tear apart and kill all the love that ever existed and change the future forever, a chilling write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred-word story. To not accept another's popularity is a sign of hatred against someone who you envy because they have something you cannot have, it never satisfies the soul to get rid of the object that's causing the rage.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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A very well-written hundred-word story. To not accept another's popularity is a sign of hatred against someone who you envy because they have something you cannot have, it never satisfies the soul to get rid of the object that's causing the rage.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
