The Plumbers Helper
a 100-word contest entry19 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my shortie, Rebecca. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from humpwhistle
As they say, all's fair in love and war. An exhorbitent plumber's fee, and a free lunch with a pretty girl. That plumber is one shrewd cookie.
Nicely told little story within the confines of 100 words.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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As they say, all's fair in love and war. An exhorbitent plumber's fee, and a free lunch with a pretty girl. That plumber is one shrewd cookie.
Nicely told little story within the confines of 100 words.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Lee, for sharing my shortie. Hopefully, the plumber will forget his bill and enjoy the young lady's company on a regular basis.
Comment from LisaMay
This is a clever story about the plumber setting up young Davey to jam the trap with lemon peel to wangle an invitation with the pretty young woman. The dialogue is integrated into the story well.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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This is a clever story about the plumber setting up young Davey to jam the trap with lemon peel to wangle an invitation with the pretty young woman. The dialogue is integrated into the story well.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Lisa, for sharing my shortie and your kind praise.
Comment from lancellot
A very nice tale. Little Davey is a pimp, and Mr. Jones better not be charging his sister and trying to get with her at the same time. Well, all is fair in love and war.
A really good entry.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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A very nice tale. Little Davey is a pimp, and Mr. Jones better not be charging his sister and trying to get with her at the same time. Well, all is fair in love and war.
A really good entry.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my tale, lancellot. Let's hope Davey is merely a young entrepreneur learning the art of plumbing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, what a setup. Love it. You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines read well with a great little story to tell. I like the 'twists.' The ending was great. The image is perfect.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Haha, what a setup. Love it. You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines read well with a great little story to tell. I like the 'twists.' The ending was great. The image is perfect.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi, Jan. I am so pleased you enjoyed my shortie. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from royowen
What a clever plumber, getting rich while his young accomplice likewise gets rich, and not only that, but a delectable young woman is part of the bargain too, beautifully written and imaginatively written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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What a clever plumber, getting rich while his young accomplice likewise gets rich, and not only that, but a delectable young woman is part of the bargain too, beautifully written and imaginatively written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi, Roy. I am delighted you enjoyed my story and truly appreciate your kind praise.
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Welcome
Comment from Beverly A McBride
What a nice Story! There's a lot in those 100 words. This is why I like flash fiction. I enjoy making up the rest of the story. You've given us character, setting, plot, all the necessary things. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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What a nice Story! There's a lot in those 100 words. This is why I like flash fiction. I enjoy making up the rest of the story. You've given us character, setting, plot, all the necessary things. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi, Beverly. Thank you so much for sharing my story. Yes, a 100-word story is fun to write.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Well, that is one way to get in with the lady you like. I hope he is a good guy and not just using that child to do harm. This is what crosses my mind for I write horror and thriller.
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Well, that is one way to get in with the lady you like. I hope he is a good guy and not just using that child to do harm. This is what crosses my mind for I write horror and thriller.
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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I'd like to think the plumber is a good guy, Mia, and will not bill Davey's sister for the house call. Many thanks for sharing my story.
Comment from poetwatch
Davey is playing cupid though he doesn't know it, author. :) I like the lemon twist in the story. Wish I had used that, but I'm not a plumber. :) the thing one does for love. This is a good offering for the 100 Word Story. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Davey is playing cupid though he doesn't know it, author. :) I like the lemon twist in the story. Wish I had used that, but I'm not a plumber. :) the thing one does for love. This is a good offering for the 100 Word Story. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing my shortie. One wonders if Davey knows he's playing Cupid or if he's only interested in earning quarters.
