Another Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Father and Son"American Isekai
7 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The image you describe is fascinating. Because the reader knows what's happening here, it makes it more amusing. The ending leads the reader to read on.
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The image you describe is fascinating. Because the reader knows what's happening here, it makes it more amusing. The ending leads the reader to read on.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are doing a wonderful job keeping Paul remarkable and his parents interesting. I would not handle these things so well. I really like this story and thank you for sharing it.
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You are doing a wonderful job keeping Paul remarkable and his parents interesting. I would not handle these things so well. I really like this story and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
Comment from judiverse
Paul may be overplaying his hand here. Who knows what will break loose if others find out about Paul being able to talk, etc. I'm wondering what Dominic's reaction will be when he sees Paul standing there. This is certainly an unusual story. I'm curious to see where it goes from here. Paul seems destined to have some kind of leadership role. Excellent details to show how unusual Paul is. judi
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Paul may be overplaying his hand here. Who knows what will break loose if others find out about Paul being able to talk, etc. I'm wondering what Dominic's reaction will be when he sees Paul standing there. This is certainly an unusual story. I'm curious to see where it goes from here. Paul seems destined to have some kind of leadership role. Excellent details to show how unusual Paul is. judi
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(typo: stars and strips s/b stripes) I've been following this since Paul was in utero checking out his dick--what a wild ride--so amusing how Paul reacts as his former self and puzzles his parents--just dad now that mom's clued in--great wrap up where she spills the beans and dad thinks she's joking then comes Paul's priceless punchline! Cheers. LIZ
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(typo: stars and strips s/b stripes) I've been following this since Paul was in utero checking out his dick--what a wild ride--so amusing how Paul reacts as his former self and puzzles his parents--just dad now that mom's clued in--great wrap up where she spills the beans and dad thinks she's joking then comes Paul's priceless punchline! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
Comment from w.j.debi
This baby is really unusual and you foreshadow that things are going to get stranger still as this small tot fills his parents in on who and what he actually is.
An excellent chapter that keeps the reader engaged and waiting for more.
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This baby is really unusual and you foreshadow that things are going to get stranger still as this small tot fills his parents in on who and what he actually is.
An excellent chapter that keeps the reader engaged and waiting for more.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This fantasy fiction is very interesting, light, soft, filial with humour, I like and enjoyed the read, the taletelling, skimmed plot development, good beginning if not catchy, smiling ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This fantasy fiction is very interesting, light, soft, filial with humour, I like and enjoyed the read, the taletelling, skimmed plot development, good beginning if not catchy, smiling ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
Comment from michele will
Fascinating. This kept my interest all the way through; very weird story. I am scared to know what happens next!
I found only one spot that needs editing. In the paragraph starting - Two months later .... at first he did no much of it...
Great job ð???
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Fascinating. This kept my interest all the way through; very weird story. I am scared to know what happens next!
I found only one spot that needs editing. In the paragraph starting - Two months later .... at first he did no much of it...
Great job ð???
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
