What to Believe
It did matter, and now it doesn't. Maybe.13 total reviews
Comment from AnnieDawn
What a sad post but it has happened that way in so many lives. I hope this post is not a factor from your past experience. It falls into the ruling for this contest very well. You have done an excellent job and it should place well.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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What a sad post but it has happened that way in so many lives. I hope this post is not a factor from your past experience. It falls into the ruling for this contest very well. You have done an excellent job and it should place well.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your encouraging review. Unfortunately, some aspects of the poem are indeed autobiographical... but all good now the pieces are back together.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I hope this is not a biographic poem. That would be so sad! When love starts, we believe all the sweet words of love. But when the lies creep in, we SAY we believe the denials, but that is not true. And a man, when hitting his woman, can't at the same time, love her. so the pitiful "sorry" doesn't count. He must go out of her life, fast and forever. The end of this poem is dangerous: "I learned not to care, I don't know what to believe". It means he succeeded to destruct your self esteem. Don't let it come so far!.
As a repetition poem, it is very good.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I hope this is not a biographic poem. That would be so sad! When love starts, we believe all the sweet words of love. But when the lies creep in, we SAY we believe the denials, but that is not true. And a man, when hitting his woman, can't at the same time, love her. so the pitiful "sorry" doesn't count. He must go out of her life, fast and forever. The end of this poem is dangerous: "I learned not to care, I don't know what to believe". It means he succeeded to destruct your self esteem. Don't let it come so far!.
As a repetition poem, it is very good.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your comments. I was aiming at trying to portray the repetitious cycle of abuse that happens in some 'partnerships'. Unfortunately, it is based on my own experiences and I have melded them all together - one partner was unfaithful to me (only the once, because I left immediately), one hit me (only the once, because I left immediately), and one was a master at psychologically confusing me - that lasted a bit longer because it was subtle and he made me feel our problems were all my fault. Anyway, water under the bridge now. I won't be falling for those tricks again.
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Thanks for your answer. And you succeded with your poem, to bring the problem into the open. Well done.
Comment from Chelle_GH
I love the way the write-up has progressed... It started by trusting, regardless of what the reasons are. It is unconditional love. It transformed to self-worth and self-respect at the end. Great Piece of Work! Good luck.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I love the way the write-up has progressed... It started by trusting, regardless of what the reasons are. It is unconditional love. It transformed to self-worth and self-respect at the end. Great Piece of Work! Good luck.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comments. I think I've ended up with a strong poem - it was difficult to write because it is based on personal experience.
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My pleasure... I do write based from my experience and direct observation or encounters. I guess, it much more effective for me.
