Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from RShipp
What a personal philosophical musing at watching a falling star.
The commoner- 'me' - just goes "Wow!" and then calls a friend to talk about it.
Enjoyed.
Best of luck in the Etheree writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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What a personal philosophical musing at watching a falling star.
The commoner- 'me' - just goes "Wow!" and then calls a friend to talk about it.
Enjoyed.
Best of luck in the Etheree writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Robert, thanks for the good wishes.
Comment from rspoet
Hello JLR,
This is an excellent etheree poem for the contest
personifying the stars as passing souls.
There is magic and mystery in the night skies.
One note: I believe line nine has ten syllables.
"whose soul passes above from east to west!"
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Hello JLR,
This is an excellent etheree poem for the contest
personifying the stars as passing souls.
There is magic and mystery in the night skies.
One note: I believe line nine has ten syllables.
"whose soul passes above from east to west!"
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Robert yes you are correct in a making a tense change I screwed it up, fixed now thanks however I was too late for the contest, ugh!
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent etheree, J. I haven't seen a falling star for some time, so I'd say I must look harder. I guess when you look at things by yourself you never really know if another person on the entire planet sees it but you.
One correction needed to be contest compliant:
whose soul passes from east to west! This needs to be nine syllables.
Easy repair I'm sure and I wish you much luck in the contest. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Excellent etheree, J. I haven't seen a falling star for some time, so I'd say I must look harder. I guess when you look at things by yourself you never really know if another person on the entire planet sees it but you.
One correction needed to be contest compliant:
whose soul passes from east to west! This needs to be nine syllables.
Easy repair I'm sure and I wish you much luck in the contest. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Gloria, ugh I missed that thanks. Jim
Comment from equestrik
I love falling stars and even though they are dying, they hold special beauty for me. I really love this write and enjoyed your thought process here in penning it.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I love falling stars and even though they are dying, they hold special beauty for me. I really love this write and enjoyed your thought process here in penning it.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Yes a marvelous gift.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery and a great picture paired with them.
I believe you have two lines of 8 syllables an none with 7. Perhaps you revised after the contest was completed.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery and a great picture paired with them.
I believe you have two lines of 8 syllables an none with 7. Perhaps you revised after the contest was completed.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Jan, I did. Silly, silly silly!
Comment from harmony13
These words are deep, interesting, thought provoking and creative.
I pondered on the words and theme of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Hope you are having a great day!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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These words are deep, interesting, thought provoking and creative.
I pondered on the words and theme of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Hope you are having a great day!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Harmony, thanks!
Comment from A. Fortier
Dear Anonymous Poster,
This is a lovely story and very aesthetically dynamic. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. The only critique I have is the idea of the shooting star being a soul is not elaborated on more. Congrats on a great piece.
Cheers,
A.Fortier
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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Dear Anonymous Poster,
This is a lovely story and very aesthetically dynamic. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. The only critique I have is the idea of the shooting star being a soul is not elaborated on more. Congrats on a great piece.
Cheers,
A.Fortier
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Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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A. Fortier, thank you so very much!
Comment from Eternal Muse
A great and a very imaginative entry in the Etheree contest. I liked your descriptive imagery and visuals; the energy of it; the artistic presentation and artwork. Good luck in the contest, this should do well.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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A great and a very imaginative entry in the Etheree contest. I liked your descriptive imagery and visuals; the energy of it; the artistic presentation and artwork. Good luck in the contest, this should do well.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Eternal Muse, I delight in receiving your good wishes, thank you!
Comment from Patty Palmer
A falling star, somewhat a mystery, falls from the sky and we wonder why. Amazing how many people see the same star I see at exactly the same time. I wonder if there is life on other planets seeing the same star too. Great job!
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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A falling star, somewhat a mystery, falls from the sky and we wonder why. Amazing how many people see the same star I see at exactly the same time. I wonder if there is life on other planets seeing the same star too. Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Patty, thank you and smiling back with appreciation!
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You're welcome!!
Patty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet thought as we look to the skies and witness another death on earth and hope their journey to heaven is a peaceful one, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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This is a sweet thought as we look to the skies and witness another death on earth and hope their journey to heaven is a peaceful one, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thanks much Dolly!
