O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from terry drake
Strange little poem. Your senryu qualifies for the challenge. You have the 5-7-5 syllable count format well done and it has an interesting theme.
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Strange little poem. Your senryu qualifies for the challenge. You have the 5-7-5 syllable count format well done and it has an interesting theme.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Treischel
A well done 5-7-5 formatted poem about the status of man in God's eyes. I iteration with God and hills reinforces to dignity of all living things. Man is a disappointment. Sad but true.
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A well done 5-7-5 formatted poem about the status of man in God's eyes. I iteration with God and hills reinforces to dignity of all living things. Man is a disappointment. Sad but true.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Melspoems
I don't really understand who or what "hills" is but I do understand that the point you are making is that God is unhappy with man .. I am unsure what the meaning is of the third line.
I think it should be "asks" or "asked" rather than "ask"
You do have correct syllable count for your 5-7-5
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I don't really understand who or what "hills" is but I do understand that the point you are making is that God is unhappy with man .. I am unsure what the meaning is of the third line.
I think it should be "asks" or "asked" rather than "ask"
You do have correct syllable count for your 5-7-5
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from CR Delport
A lovely poem that's well written and well delivered. It flows nicely and reads easy. Lovely art work do go with the poem. I love the distinction you make.
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A lovely poem that's well written and well delivered. It flows nicely and reads easy. Lovely art work do go with the poem. I love the distinction you make.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from bhogg
Perhaps I should read some of your other posts to understand your style. I'm rating as a four primarily due to a pet peeve of mine concerning author notes. If you need extensive notes to explain your meaning, then the post itself just doesn't work. Bill
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Perhaps I should read some of your other posts to understand your style. I'm rating as a four primarily due to a pet peeve of mine concerning author notes. If you need extensive notes to explain your meaning, then the post itself just doesn't work. Bill
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from whispersofthesoul
Hiya,
This again is another piece that is disjointed. Where do women sit, women give birth to man and are the home makers so are you suggesting men are humans and women are not,
This seems more like preaching than a piece of poetry that is easy to understand.
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Hiya,
This again is another piece that is disjointed. Where do women sit, women give birth to man and are the home makers so are you suggesting men are humans and women are not,
This seems more like preaching than a piece of poetry that is easy to understand.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
This wonderful poem leaves me with the impression that mankind is far from being humane. We tout the scientific advancements of medicine, but we have, at the same time, taken the "care" out of healthcare. I am also left with the thought of how mankind itself is a moot point to God's vision of the universe. Since many men reject God and His plan for us, we stand a very good chance of being rejected as needed in His plan. Great write!
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This wonderful poem leaves me with the impression that mankind is far from being humane. We tout the scientific advancements of medicine, but we have, at the same time, taken the "care" out of healthcare. I am also left with the thought of how mankind itself is a moot point to God's vision of the universe. Since many men reject God and His plan for us, we stand a very good chance of being rejected as needed in His plan. Great write!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from dragonpoet
You are right. It does seem like most men don't act like what is supposed to be human. That is with love and understanding and aid for all. God should be angry at us.
There is a specific haiku the is for religious topics. I think this poem falls into that genre.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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You are right. It does seem like most men don't act like what is supposed to be human. That is with love and understanding and aid for all. God should be angry at us.
There is a specific haiku the is for religious topics. I think this poem falls into that genre.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from RJFunston
Good morning,
Very interesting verse. You managed some great insight in so few words. Your writing style is different from most of what I read. Good job.
Robert
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Good morning,
Very interesting verse. You managed some great insight in so few words. Your writing style is different from most of what I read. Good job.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Caressa_08
This concept hills asking God a question is a little strange for me to comprehend...though, our Creator, should really have no problem with answering ....though, believe this is an incredible poem, & believe the second & third line answers the question.
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This concept hills asking God a question is a little strange for me to comprehend...though, our Creator, should really have no problem with answering ....though, believe this is an incredible poem, & believe the second & third line answers the question.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
