O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This is nice to appreciate moral knowledge that hills ask God at the instance of man's falling from moral knowledge while Hills still follow the same roles given, man has been failing.
Truthful knowledge in a few words rightly captured.
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This is nice to appreciate moral knowledge that hills ask God at the instance of man's falling from moral knowledge while Hills still follow the same roles given, man has been failing.
Truthful knowledge in a few words rightly captured.
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from fhree
Hi
As an expressionist, I prefer that words written should make sense.
I feel that computers could be programmed to write syllable counts.
A few commas would help.
Second line ?????????????
Last line................. Goto second sentence
Not into machined poetry.
Seeya
Fhree
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Hi
As an expressionist, I prefer that words written should make sense.
I feel that computers could be programmed to write syllable counts.
A few commas would help.
Second line ?????????????
Last line................. Goto second sentence
Not into machined poetry.
Seeya
Fhree
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
Rightly, this is a Haiku on Nature, I can follow, it is terrific and so clear with exact visuals and imageries with clear meanings, obviously, man has been falling from his destined rank, status of being man, one can see around and feel the truth, so hills are asking the destined role of man and God is speaking the moral roles of man for moral, morality, moral sentiments and moral state of living are the orders by God a man has to follow but only a few do so and so dark knowledge is spreading and white (pure, moral knowledge and lessons) is lessening, so it is a matter of shock to hills which is merely symbolic, very true imagination, nice innovative and rightly balanced all over, I enjoyed it much and I find no errors in it. Good wishes.
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Rightly, this is a Haiku on Nature, I can follow, it is terrific and so clear with exact visuals and imageries with clear meanings, obviously, man has been falling from his destined rank, status of being man, one can see around and feel the truth, so hills are asking the destined role of man and God is speaking the moral roles of man for moral, morality, moral sentiments and moral state of living are the orders by God a man has to follow but only a few do so and so dark knowledge is spreading and white (pure, moral knowledge and lessons) is lessening, so it is a matter of shock to hills which is merely symbolic, very true imagination, nice innovative and rightly balanced all over, I enjoyed it much and I find no errors in it. Good wishes.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
Such a short little ditty to be so full of beauty and life. It reminds me of Tennessee and better still, it reminds me of Connecticut where I defected to fifteen years ago. I love to get out and just drive through those pristine areas and watch the ravens, the eagles, chipmunks, hills, rock formations. Thanks for a pretty poem.
adora
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Such a short little ditty to be so full of beauty and life. It reminds me of Tennessee and better still, it reminds me of Connecticut where I defected to fifteen years ago. I love to get out and just drive through those pristine areas and watch the ravens, the eagles, chipmunks, hills, rock formations. Thanks for a pretty poem.
adora
Comment Written 18-Apr-2006
Comment from edinerie
The first line really speaks to me. The overall movement is good and the poem follows the form well. The last line still has me thinking.
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The first line really speaks to me. The overall movement is good and the poem follows the form well. The last line still has me thinking.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2006
Comment from trailblazer101
Well one thing about a haiku, not a lot to read. Not much to rate.
But sometimes a one liner says it all.
This one does. Man's fall from grace persists
Few muses white, dark
hat one says a lot.
Could be taken many ways--we have refusedso many life lessons.
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Well one thing about a haiku, not a lot to read. Not much to rate.
But sometimes a one liner says it all.
This one does. Man's fall from grace persists
Few muses white, dark
hat one says a lot.
Could be taken many ways--we have refusedso many life lessons.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from H. Rebecca
Sorry, I just don't get it. I do like the first line as stand-alone though. Maybe it's just the type of poetry. Though you did say was haiku poetry, so maybe work on the last line. Specifically "black, white". What?
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Sorry, I just don't get it. I do like the first line as stand-alone though. Maybe it's just the type of poetry. Though you did say was haiku poetry, so maybe work on the last line. Specifically "black, white". What?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from dribble
I envisioned "dark" as the end of all things as we know it.
It is not easy reviewing obscure poetry. Perspective is in the idividuals eye.
So... I rewarded a five on behalf of the total presentation, which included the authors notes. The piece was elevated and my perception more directed. I enjoyed it because I didn't have much to do in deciphering as you enlighted my understanding.
A thought provoking 5-7-5
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I envisioned "dark" as the end of all things as we know it.
It is not easy reviewing obscure poetry. Perspective is in the idividuals eye.
So... I rewarded a five on behalf of the total presentation, which included the authors notes. The piece was elevated and my perception more directed. I enjoyed it because I didn't have much to do in deciphering as you enlighted my understanding.
A thought provoking 5-7-5
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from Brantley88
This is what happens when you take the weekend off...over 40 reviews awaiting me in my box, so I'll be brief.
I like your use of "white" to describe moral knowledge (wisdom), and it is very true that we seem to have lost our will to obtain truth. I suppose, for this sin, God will do us in. But, we are not wise, so how can we even come close to seeing His warnings? Good one.
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This is what happens when you take the weekend off...over 40 reviews awaiting me in my box, so I'll be brief.
I like your use of "white" to describe moral knowledge (wisdom), and it is very true that we seem to have lost our will to obtain truth. I suppose, for this sin, God will do us in. But, we are not wise, so how can we even come close to seeing His warnings? Good one.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from mswritealot
Hey AC took a couple of re-reads to see the message. The haiku is a hard structure when trying to convey the message in 17 syllables but you managed it well. The last line contains 6 syllables. Lose one and it's perfect.
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Hey AC took a couple of re-reads to see the message. The haiku is a hard structure when trying to convey the message in 17 syllables but you managed it well. The last line contains 6 syllables. Lose one and it's perfect.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
