O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from wanderlost
I can't keep giving five stars for these pieces. I get them, but the message is so muddled by overuse of devices. its like you had to change a tire, and you used a hacksaw, a chainsaw, an alen wrench, a monkey wrench, and a screwdriver. its too mixed up and confusing. I try to see as much quality as I can, and your vocation is superior!! but your diction in these poetic verses are needing improvement. I'm sorry.
Wanderlost
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I can't keep giving five stars for these pieces. I get them, but the message is so muddled by overuse of devices. its like you had to change a tire, and you used a hacksaw, a chainsaw, an alen wrench, a monkey wrench, and a screwdriver. its too mixed up and confusing. I try to see as much quality as I can, and your vocation is superior!! but your diction in these poetic verses are needing improvement. I'm sorry.
Wanderlost
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from donaldww
I think you got one thing perfect, the poem does have the correct syllable count, as far as your author notes are concerned. The problem is that the poem doesn't make any sense.
Thanks for your contribution.
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I think you got one thing perfect, the poem does have the correct syllable count, as far as your author notes are concerned. The problem is that the poem doesn't make any sense.
Thanks for your contribution.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem I am not really sure what you are trying to say though unless you are saying with equality mans role no longer exist thank you for sharing
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This is a good poem I am not really sure what you are trying to say though unless you are saying with equality mans role no longer exist thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
ALCREATOR LIT DR RAY
your few words to me tell the truth
there are humans who know they exisit and there are some humans tht don't even know how to exist .
Gert
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ALCREATOR LIT DR RAY
your few words to me tell the truth
there are humans who know they exisit and there are some humans tht don't even know how to exist .
Gert
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
I've read over and over again, but can't seem to understand what the writer is trying to convey in this piece.
Maybe it's me.
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I've read over and over again, but can't seem to understand what the writer is trying to convey in this piece.
Maybe it's me.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Ed_Anderson
This was a short read but one that was kind of fun. You made me laugh out loud and that is not an easy feat. Great job, and good luck with your book of poetry!
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This was a short read but one that was kind of fun. You made me laugh out loud and that is not an easy feat. Great job, and good luck with your book of poetry!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from steevie
So what you are saying is that there are many men amongst us, but few act like human beings? And if so, I do concur with this analogy. I think we are driven more by our baser instincts, than anything else and yet we claim to have advanced through thousands of years down through history.
steve
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So what you are saying is that there are many men amongst us, but few act like human beings? And if so, I do concur with this analogy. I think we are driven more by our baser instincts, than anything else and yet we claim to have advanced through thousands of years down through history.
steve
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from write hand blue
Again I've awarded four stars. I cannot make any sense or find any sense in this random selection of words. Hills asking questions to what? Perhaps there is something you are trying to say. You need to edit it a few times...
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Again I've awarded four stars. I cannot make any sense or find any sense in this random selection of words. Hills asking questions to what? Perhaps there is something you are trying to say. You need to edit it a few times...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from jmdg1954
I sat here and looked at your poem, read it a few times and am totally lost. I even went to look at other reviews to help me understand this, even that was not helpful. I have difficulty with poetry at times, but am not stupid. What are you trying to say here???
John
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I sat here and looked at your poem, read it a few times and am totally lost. I even went to look at other reviews to help me understand this, even that was not helpful. I have difficulty with poetry at times, but am not stupid. What are you trying to say here???
John
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
i think you've need to take this back to
the drawing board, dr ray. it says very
little, if anything. mind, i've heard
hills talk in the past but what's one
to expect on acid.
regards, eph.
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i think you've need to take this back to
the drawing board, dr ray. it says very
little, if anything. mind, i've heard
hills talk in the past but what's one
to expect on acid.
regards, eph.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
