O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
This type of poetry is very complicated, however, this is a nicely done haiku. The first line really speaks to me. The overall movement is good and the poem follows the form well. The last line is kind of confused to me.
GOOD JOB!
:)
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This type of poetry is very complicated, however, this is a nicely done haiku. The first line really speaks to me. The overall movement is good and the poem follows the form well. The last line is kind of confused to me.
GOOD JOB!
:)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from misscookie
You had my attention from the first word to the last
I found your words sad but true.
There is a strong message within this poem.
This is what I call a food for thought poem, meaning after you read it you go hmmm.
Thank you for sharing.
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You had my attention from the first word to the last
I found your words sad but true.
There is a strong message within this poem.
This is what I call a food for thought poem, meaning after you read it you go hmmm.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from TKField
This poem is a bit fuzzy. The meaning is obscure and the construction is atrocious. The author's notes actually confuse things even further. I think you really need to curl up with "The Elements of Style" and make it your Bible. On the upside, there's nowhere for your writing to go but up.
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This poem is a bit fuzzy. The meaning is obscure and the construction is atrocious. The author's notes actually confuse things even further. I think you really need to curl up with "The Elements of Style" and make it your Bible. On the upside, there's nowhere for your writing to go but up.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from isurp
Your 5-7-5 format is spot on. I find that your message is rather cryptic. I read your notes and agree that God is probably unhappy with man although the stand, state, and status thing alludes me. Kudos for brevity.
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Your 5-7-5 format is spot on. I find that your message is rather cryptic. I read your notes and agree that God is probably unhappy with man although the stand, state, and status thing alludes me. Kudos for brevity.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Sincerely, i think you have not yet been able to bring out what you have in mind in this poem. I like the conversational structure but the meaning is elusive. Please take a second look at this work. cheers
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Sincerely, i think you have not yet been able to bring out what you have in mind in this poem. I like the conversational structure but the meaning is elusive. Please take a second look at this work. cheers
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
I agree that most men behave not so humanlike. Meaning that most of mankind do not behave in the image of love that humanity comes from. Warfare throughout history attest to that.
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I agree that most men behave not so humanlike. Meaning that most of mankind do not behave in the image of love that humanity comes from. Warfare throughout history attest to that.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from garrymc5
' man who practices humanity per God will achieves the state and status of Human.' This is a circular statement. We all have the state of being human. It is our physical state and our being that defines it. When it comes to 'status', this is defined in a million ways by millions of people. It cannot be defined outside of people. Please study the meaning of words before you use them.
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' man who practices humanity per God will achieves the state and status of Human.' This is a circular statement. We all have the state of being human. It is our physical state and our being that defines it. When it comes to 'status', this is defined in a million ways by millions of people. It cannot be defined outside of people. Please study the meaning of words before you use them.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Peter Mansson
This is so cryptic and such a challenge to even glimpse of any meaning. Here's my best guess---instead of Mohammed going to the mountain, the mountain goes to God. Lord answers by saying--- humanity(humaneness) is such a big disappointment, you are mostly just men(animalistic beings)
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This is so cryptic and such a challenge to even glimpse of any meaning. Here's my best guess---instead of Mohammed going to the mountain, the mountain goes to God. Lord answers by saying--- humanity(humaneness) is such a big disappointment, you are mostly just men(animalistic beings)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from vkmack
Excellent morality play in just 15 words. This is certainly experimental use of the 5-7-5 format/style, and it words very well. This is a fable done beautifully. Great job.
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Excellent morality play in just 15 words. This is certainly experimental use of the 5-7-5 format/style, and it words very well. This is a fable done beautifully. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Chaise Norfleet
I like your perception on mankind, especially how you used inanimate objects as metaphors for a larger purpose. I believe if God were to answer that question about what's man, he would say someone who has a lot to learn. Because man really thinks that he knows everything there is to know about life. Great piece.
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I like your perception on mankind, especially how you used inanimate objects as metaphors for a larger purpose. I believe if God were to answer that question about what's man, he would say someone who has a lot to learn. Because man really thinks that he knows everything there is to know about life. Great piece.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
