Unexpected Disclosure
an 80-word story about children17 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork, Rod.
-You can't go wrong
with Rockwell.
-A clever story about
Miss Adams and her
4th grade students.
-Mary Lynn certainly had
a big announcement.
-That is some dentist,
keeping all of those teeth!
-The announcement is priceless,
as well as the teachers.
-It would be fun to see a
follow up of what the teacher
did after that!
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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-Great artwork, Rod.
-You can't go wrong
with Rockwell.
-A clever story about
Miss Adams and her
4th grade students.
-Mary Lynn certainly had
a big announcement.
-That is some dentist,
keeping all of those teeth!
-The announcement is priceless,
as well as the teachers.
-It would be fun to see a
follow up of what the teacher
did after that!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Hi, Pam, thank you so much for your praise of my shortie. Yes, it would be interesting to see how Miss Adams follows up that announcement. Rod
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You are very welcome, Rod. I think it would be very fascinating, too!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written eighty word surprise flash fiction. To everyone's surprise the tooth fairy's identity is revealed when a bright observant girl notices the dentist with all children's teeth in a jar.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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A very well-written eighty word surprise flash fiction. To everyone's surprise the tooth fairy's identity is revealed when a bright observant girl notices the dentist with all children's teeth in a jar.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much, Sandra, for your kind praise of my story.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
How does a teacher ever present such a good planned lesson to follow that drama. I've always felt teahers are frustrated actors. Iknow I still am one. I've pried my trade in all of my follow-up careers. So, I'm putting my money on the teacher to have modified whatever she had planned to match or surpass the competition.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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How does a teacher ever present such a good planned lesson to follow that drama. I've always felt teahers are frustrated actors. Iknow I still am one. I've pried my trade in all of my follow-up careers. So, I'm putting my money on the teacher to have modified whatever she had planned to match or surpass the competition.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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I really like your response to my story. I agree that Miss Adams will have her work cut out for her to follow up Mary-Lynn?s news. Many thanks for sharing my story.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
you captured (and gave your reader) the little girls excitement in so few words. I enjoyed and thank you; you also found the perfect picture to bring your story along.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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you captured (and gave your reader) the little girls excitement in so few words. I enjoyed and thank you; you also found the perfect picture to bring your story along.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Mary, for your kind review of my story. Rockwell?s paintings all tell stories, and I merely followed his lead.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt.
This short piece does have a surprise in the story.
I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt.
This short piece does have a surprise in the story.
I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for sharing my shortie, Sharon.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry with a surprise ending for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry with a surprise ending for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for sharing my shortie, Rebecca. I appreciate the kind praise.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest.
Your flash fiction tells the story of a school girl who believes the tooth fairy is her dentist.....lol...good twist at the end.
You followed the rules well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest.
Your flash fiction tells the story of a school girl who believes the tooth fairy is her dentist.....lol...good twist at the end.
You followed the rules well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for sharing my shortie, Gypsy. So glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun post and girls will be girls and let out all the secrets they have learned to the surprise of their friends, I only hope this girl never needs a real dentist, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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A fun post and girls will be girls and let out all the secrets they have learned to the surprise of their friends, I only hope this girl never needs a real dentist, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Hi, Dolly. I do think girls would have a different response to Mary-Lynn?s ?news? than boys would. Many thanks for sharing my shortie.
Comment from krprice
Cute story though the girl was a bit of a smart aleck. Since the teacher winked, I guess she didn't mind having the girl again.
What dentist keeps teeth in jars?
Karlene
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Cute story though the girl was a bit of a smart aleck. Since the teacher winked, I guess she didn't mind having the girl again.
What dentist keeps teeth in jars?
Karlene
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Hi, Karline. Thank you for sharing my shortie. I knew a dentist who made his own moldings for new teeth and kept the ones he pulled out in jars. This was back in the day when Rockwellpainted.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming! Reminds me of a child who said knowingly--it's my parents who put the money under my pillow--the fairy just takes the tooth! Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Charming! Reminds me of a child who said knowingly--it's my parents who put the money under my pillow--the fairy just takes the tooth! Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Hi, Liz. Thank you very much for sharing my shortie.
