O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Frank Furter
After just reviewing your last writing, IM amazed how powerful this is. Excellent work here and for me this form of writing works well with these words . Thank you for sharing your work. I believe you have done on what you set out to do with such few words
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After just reviewing your last writing, IM amazed how powerful this is. Excellent work here and for me this form of writing works well with these words . Thank you for sharing your work. I believe you have done on what you set out to do with such few words
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Poet397
This a clever little poem. Well written with great imagery. I like your use of alliteration. Thank you for the Author's Notes, also. Well done!
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This a clever little poem. Well written with great imagery. I like your use of alliteration. Thank you for the Author's Notes, also. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from memawdear
Another beautiful poem. Since I don't write but truly love to read poetry, I find not everyone can write in this form. This has said so much with so few words, which is what I really appreciate about this form of poem. Thanks for sharing
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Another beautiful poem. Since I don't write but truly love to read poetry, I find not everyone can write in this form. This has said so much with so few words, which is what I really appreciate about this form of poem. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Cat Morris
Alcreator,
I enjoy this one. It has a whole renaissance within it's words.
Whether for family life or tourism, the homes are a wonderful place to want to be.
I know the song of the singing heart, and this poem exudes happiness.
Excellent work, Cat
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Alcreator,
I enjoy this one. It has a whole renaissance within it's words.
Whether for family life or tourism, the homes are a wonderful place to want to be.
I know the song of the singing heart, and this poem exudes happiness.
Excellent work, Cat
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from sengwriter
Vale Cupid you see!
How highland huts grow love homes!
Hearts flow notes, they sing!
A valley is personified and given the status of the God of love
and there you've made it so powerful with its beauty to transform
those upland people to be merry and gay with the flow of love,
with the song of sweetness.
Good imaginative power you do really have and that sometimes makes your poem appear very attractive with novel ideas.
I like it and enjoyed it really.
Gautam
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Vale Cupid you see!
How highland huts grow love homes!
Hearts flow notes, they sing!
A valley is personified and given the status of the God of love
and there you've made it so powerful with its beauty to transform
those upland people to be merry and gay with the flow of love,
with the song of sweetness.
Good imaginative power you do really have and that sometimes makes your poem appear very attractive with novel ideas.
I like it and enjoyed it really.
Gautam
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Tallguy
This is a great Haiku with perfect form. Excellent word choices and a beautiful theme. The author's nots help with understanding the concept but after reading them the whole poem becomes clear. Well done
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This is a great Haiku with perfect form. Excellent word choices and a beautiful theme. The author's nots help with understanding the concept but after reading them the whole poem becomes clear. Well done
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Econ Teacher
I will follow the masses with this one and give five stars, though I don't really understand this poem. I don't have any suggestions for improvement and it does follow the format of a haiku. I just can't pass up on the $1.07
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I will follow the masses with this one and give five stars, though I don't really understand this poem. I don't have any suggestions for improvement and it does follow the format of a haiku. I just can't pass up on the $1.07
Comment Written 04-Jun-2006
Comment from EMB
Hmm. I know I wouldn't have figured this one out without the Author's Note. Thanks for the help. :-) And also, another good Haiku.
Good job.
Ed
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Hmm. I know I wouldn't have figured this one out without the Author's Note. Thanks for the help. :-) And also, another good Haiku.
Good job.
Ed
Comment Written 04-Jun-2006
Comment from Gert sherwood
Dear ALCREATOR WRITER, Good write, so glad you explained your unique words in you footnotes, it helped make it clear, how beauty changes huts into love homes!
Gert
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Dear ALCREATOR WRITER, Good write, so glad you explained your unique words in you footnotes, it helped make it clear, how beauty changes huts into love homes!
Gert
Comment Written 04-Jun-2006
Comment from Rewa Malhotra
A perfect picture of simple life and simple people. They in their simplicity are the closest to God and Nature.
God+nature= Love. Their hearts are so full of songs,that the notes can be heard as unheard songs in the silence of the highland.
Very nice.
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A perfect picture of simple life and simple people. They in their simplicity are the closest to God and Nature.
God+nature= Love. Their hearts are so full of songs,that the notes can be heard as unheard songs in the silence of the highland.
Very nice.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2006
