O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Margokatt
very cool haiku!
I challenge you my haiku writer friend to write a long poem
of just haiku. . .i know it can be done and you seem
to be the one to step up and perform!
I dare you!
Nice work here!
mk
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very cool haiku!
I challenge you my haiku writer friend to write a long poem
of just haiku. . .i know it can be done and you seem
to be the one to step up and perform!
I dare you!
Nice work here!
mk
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from edinerie
Good example of the form, it follows traditional structure and does it well. The final line is especially good and gives summation to the whole nicely.
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Good example of the form, it follows traditional structure and does it well. The final line is especially good and gives summation to the whole nicely.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from mswritealot
Perfect Haiku, and true to the correct content of what a haiku should have. This was a pleasure to read, the colors only enhance the words. Well done
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Perfect Haiku, and true to the correct content of what a haiku should have. This was a pleasure to read, the colors only enhance the words. Well done
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from sharon fallis
Thank you for this very good Haiku. Good word form and usage. Nice visuals and great imagery. The piece was easy to read, even with all the good translations. Thank you for sharing. Sharon
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Thank you for this very good Haiku. Good word form and usage. Nice visuals and great imagery. The piece was easy to read, even with all the good translations. Thank you for sharing. Sharon
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from GRSaine
Hi Alcreator Writer,
Excellent work with your haiku, "Oh Vale!". Many of the haikus appearing on the site, do not really follow the rules of the true haiku as yours does. It is a very strict form and you have followed it while telling its poetic story at the same time. Great work.
GRSaine
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
Excellent work with your haiku, "Oh Vale!". Many of the haikus appearing on the site, do not really follow the rules of the true haiku as yours does. It is a very strict form and you have followed it while telling its poetic story at the same time. Great work.
GRSaine
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from melpuppy
What a lovely haiku! It brought forth pleasant imagery in my mind. Nicely written and well done. Flowed well and melodic.
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What a lovely haiku! It brought forth pleasant imagery in my mind. Nicely written and well done. Flowed well and melodic.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from Jeannie James
I was glad of your notes to help me understand the depth of this poem. There is certainly a lot more to it than I thought on first reading. Great writing, so much meaning in so few words. Regards, Jeannie.
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I was glad of your notes to help me understand the depth of this poem. There is certainly a lot more to it than I thought on first reading. Great writing, so much meaning in so few words. Regards, Jeannie.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from 96744mom
Sweet, absolutely sweet! I find this haiku piece very interesting. Love the shade of neon green. No changes are needed. May you continue to excel in your works.
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Sweet, absolutely sweet! I find this haiku piece very interesting. Love the shade of neon green. No changes are needed. May you continue to excel in your works.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
