O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from fhree
Hi.
Lots of meaning and messages in such a short poem.
Good choice of words - cupid matching with love.
I like the imagery especially of huts growing into love homes.
Thanks a stack. This poem is expressive.
Seeya
Fhree
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Hi.
Lots of meaning and messages in such a short poem.
Good choice of words - cupid matching with love.
I like the imagery especially of huts growing into love homes.
Thanks a stack. This poem is expressive.
Seeya
Fhree
Comment Written 18-Apr-2006
Comment from Aleksandramarie
Since when do we have to put a dictionary for
fourth grade words.
argh, this is the second one, IT'S A WRITING SITE< PEOPLE!
lol, oy,
very nice terse quick read, on point, and should not need any clarification
what so ever....oh-oh, a 6th grade word...?
clarification: a detailed explanation because something is unclear....
groan, mspotter
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Since when do we have to put a dictionary for
fourth grade words.
argh, this is the second one, IT'S A WRITING SITE< PEOPLE!
lol, oy,
very nice terse quick read, on point, and should not need any clarification
what so ever....oh-oh, a 6th grade word...?
clarification: a detailed explanation because something is unclear....
groan, mspotter
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from TrueBeliever
Love avails us many gifts
like words that come from the heart
better said poetically
word rhythms made into art.
You know how long winded I am, I could never write one of these...smile So hats off as you did a great job. Ondra
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Love avails us many gifts
like words that come from the heart
better said poetically
word rhythms made into art.
You know how long winded I am, I could never write one of these...smile So hats off as you did a great job. Ondra
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from sandramarie
This short little Haiku is packed with imagery. You have done a wonderful job with your word choices here. I'm not a Haiku fan, but this one was enjoyable.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
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This short little Haiku is packed with imagery. You have done a wonderful job with your word choices here. I'm not a Haiku fan, but this one was enjoyable.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from brownowl
Vale Cupid you see!
How upland huts grow love homes
Hearts flow notes, they sing
This is great you got every bit of love you can in such few words.You have Cuoid love songs. You have a very heart warming poem. Excellent read. What more can i say. I just love this.
Brown Owl.
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Vale Cupid you see!
How upland huts grow love homes
Hearts flow notes, they sing
This is great you got every bit of love you can in such few words.You have Cuoid love songs. You have a very heart warming poem. Excellent read. What more can i say. I just love this.
Brown Owl.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from ShaiLyn
I really like to find a good haiku, because you seldom do. I know I can't do them very well, which adds to the joy of finding one. But this one was wonderful! I really really liked it. Especailly the explanation at the end, that was really neat. This is the first piece I've given a six star rating, so you know you did pretty good.
Shailee.
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I really like to find a good haiku, because you seldom do. I know I can't do them very well, which adds to the joy of finding one. But this one was wonderful! I really really liked it. Especailly the explanation at the end, that was really neat. This is the first piece I've given a six star rating, so you know you did pretty good.
Shailee.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from goldiekiko
Alcreator Writer, enjoyed this piece and appreciated your notes. Short and full of rich images. I get the idea of the power of love, how it can help our own internal huts grow into homes. Then one can find inner peace and be content.Look forward to reading more. Take care, dave
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Alcreator Writer, enjoyed this piece and appreciated your notes. Short and full of rich images. I get the idea of the power of love, how it can help our own internal huts grow into homes. Then one can find inner peace and be content.Look forward to reading more. Take care, dave
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from L.A.Tripp
Well, it's short and to the point. I give you credit for that. Otherwise, though, I wouldn't have understood it without your explanation. I don't know, maybe that's the purpose of it, but I figure you should be able to understand it without an additional explanation, but then I'm no professor of poetry or anything like that either.
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Well, it's short and to the point. I give you credit for that. Otherwise, though, I wouldn't have understood it without your explanation. I don't know, maybe that's the purpose of it, but I figure you should be able to understand it without an additional explanation, but then I'm no professor of poetry or anything like that either.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from H. Rebecca
This is the first haiku poetry that I actually get. (Without the welcome explanation at the end). There is flow from one line to the next.
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This is the first haiku poetry that I actually get. (Without the welcome explanation at the end). There is flow from one line to the next.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
Comment from One Tooth Smile
Okay, you have a good form here. You've met all of the syllabic requirements.
Unfortunately, you failed to capture any emotion for me.
Thanks for sharing.
But, I had the feeling you were going for something grand here and I just didn't get it.
One Tooth :)"
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Okay, you have a good form here. You've met all of the syllabic requirements.
Unfortunately, you failed to capture any emotion for me.
Thanks for sharing.
But, I had the feeling you were going for something grand here and I just didn't get it.
One Tooth :)"
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
