O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Oh Vale!"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from lovebear641
short and sweet...wish i could write these short ones ..but i seem to drag everything out ....i can see cupid overseeing a beautiful love and the house in the valley ..oh so sweet to dream about shuch things
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short and sweet...wish i could write these short ones ..but i seem to drag everything out ....i can see cupid overseeing a beautiful love and the house in the valley ..oh so sweet to dream about shuch things
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from drivenbackward
Another interesting piece of work. How so few words can conjure up so many thoughts boggles my mind. I needed to read this one a few times to get it, but each time it became clearer to me. This seems to be a pattern for me with your work. Then again, I just scrolled up to your notes. It turns out I was correct this time (which I wasn't sure of). Well done once again.
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Another interesting piece of work. How so few words can conjure up so many thoughts boggles my mind. I needed to read this one a few times to get it, but each time it became clearer to me. This seems to be a pattern for me with your work. Then again, I just scrolled up to your notes. It turns out I was correct this time (which I wasn't sure of). Well done once again.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from mayflowerbg
Reading this haiku, I see the valley of love, with lovely little houses, rising up like mushrooms after rain, happy loving people live there, their lives like songs of love. You see how many words and repetition I used to describe the picture, you have managed to do it only in 17 syllables. Congratulations!
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Reading this haiku, I see the valley of love, with lovely little houses, rising up like mushrooms after rain, happy loving people live there, their lives like songs of love. You see how many words and repetition I used to describe the picture, you have managed to do it only in 17 syllables. Congratulations!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from G.B. Smith
Vale Cupid you see!
How highland huts grow love homes!
Hearts flow notes, they sing!
I am still learning to appreciate this style of writing. It feels good to read.
Bear
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Vale Cupid you see!
How highland huts grow love homes!
Hearts flow notes, they sing!
I am still learning to appreciate this style of writing. It feels good to read.
Bear
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from Mrs Jones
Well that is certainly a different and more romantic way of making a suggestion. The count is correct -----------------------
Cheers
Rose
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Well that is certainly a different and more romantic way of making a suggestion. The count is correct -----------------------
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from mama_drama595
This was a really short poem but very good thank you for writing it so i could have a chance to read it thanks again. wow.
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This was a really short poem but very good thank you for writing it so i could have a chance to read it thanks again. wow.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from OceanicEyes
I'm impressed with the imagery you created with such a short piece...your format, the haiku, brings out a feeling of tranquility and also discovery. At least that's what I took away from it. I really enjoyed it ALCREATOR, fantastic work!
Warmest of regards and enouragement,
Shane.
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I'm impressed with the imagery you created with such a short piece...your format, the haiku, brings out a feeling of tranquility and also discovery. At least that's what I took away from it. I really enjoyed it ALCREATOR, fantastic work!
Warmest of regards and enouragement,
Shane.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from marion
I love these three liners along with rictameters...
This is beautifully completed and what I see a great example of a Haiku.
Thanks marion
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I love these three liners along with rictameters...
This is beautifully completed and what I see a great example of a Haiku.
Thanks marion
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from RaymondJohn
Movement, strong images and the Haiku framework all used effectively makes this an easy five-star offering. I generally don't like Haiku, but you have done a masterful job. All the best. Ray.
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Movement, strong images and the Haiku framework all used effectively makes this an easy five-star offering. I generally don't like Haiku, but you have done a masterful job. All the best. Ray.
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from LateBloomer
The poem may be three lines but they are three difficult lines to achieve and the author did a terrific job. I love the last line ... Hearts flow notes, they sing! Just reading this made me feel happy.
This is another classic example of less being more!
For those who are not getting it, this is poetry not an essay. It's very difficult to say a lot in a very few words. However, our author accomplished it beautifully.
Good Writing!
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The poem may be three lines but they are three difficult lines to achieve and the author did a terrific job. I love the last line ... Hearts flow notes, they sing! Just reading this made me feel happy.
This is another classic example of less being more!
For those who are not getting it, this is poetry not an essay. It's very difficult to say a lot in a very few words. However, our author accomplished it beautifully.
Good Writing!
Comment Written 31-May-2006
