Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Very entertaining. Well penned with great musicality, flow and rhyming. Fun write. Made me chuckle. Engaging plot! LOL

NOTES


Favorite line:
Half were shemozzled, the others were sozzled.

Favorite rhyme pair:

maids/charades


Spag Suggestions:

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Eldred(,) the eldest son, counted his legacy,

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Sidney(,) the sniveller(,) sat in a corner,(;) he
claimed he had been there 'a couple of hours.'
Esme and Emma were found in the garden where(,)
clearly(,) they'd wandered 'in search of some flowers.'



*Larry(,) the youngest, the pride of the family,

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So many suspects(,) and all with an alibi,



Naked and dangerous...LOL~!

This made me chuckle, as I knew four of them (but missed Sherlock and Watson!:

What a commotion! Oh, who was the murderer?
Poirot and Marple were sent for, of course.
Cloiseau, Colombo, they came for the hell of it,
ably assisted by Maigret and Morse.


Good work...very unique!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020

Thanks, Rama. Posted in a bit of a hurry as usual. I'll go back and check that punctuation. I had fun with this, especially thinking up names and alibis for twenty-two progeny! Did you notice I was very fair - eleven boys and eleven girls!?

Glad it made you laugh.

Stay safe.

Steve

reply by rama devi on 24-Aug-2020

Yes, that's so fair! I had four brothers and NO sisters. Not fair!

💖 Stay safe, sane and sage

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am NOT a poet so all the explanation is Greek to me, but I did enjoy reading and I wish I could figure out who did it, but not sure. I don't trust Sweet Lady Caroline though. I choose her. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020

Thanks, Barbara. The good thing is, there's no wrong answer! Lady Caroline was definitely suspicious, though!

Steve

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Exceptional

This is a brilliant write Steve! You excelled here, I found this so entertaining, great matching rhymes and the sentiments grabbed me from he first word, a magical tour of mystery and suspense, much enjoyed and a well deserved six, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020

Dolly, many thanks for the great review and the six shiny stars. Glad you enjoyed this - it was fun to write!

Steve

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Whatever the style or method of investigation followed, the murder mystery remains; mostly people had no grievance about the murder; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020

Thanks for the kind review.

Steve

Comment from Eternal Muse

Exceptional

This was amazing. I am glad it's Sunday and I have a fresh supply of sixes. Finally I see the Sherlock Holmes poem, this was a breath of fresh air. Your humor and wit are extraorinary and made smile thoughout. Poor old Lord Athenree, looks like no one grieved his demise. Great creative imagery, I just loved all these characters.

These stood out:

What a commotion! Oh, who was the murderer?
Poirot and Marple were sent for, of course.
Cloiseau, Colombo, they came for the hell of it,
ably assisted by Maigret and Morse.

I enjoyed your Dactylic meter, sounded like anapestic meter to me at first. I liked learning about this new meter, thank you for your informative author notes.

I had a lot of fun with this poem. This was refreshingly original and very well written and should do well in that contest. Good luck in the booths.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020

Thank you - I had a lot of fun with this, as you can probably tell. One of those weird occasions where you wake up with parts of a poem running through your head with no idea where they came from - on this occasion it was what ended up as the second verse...

I appreciate the extra star.

Steve

reply by Eternal Muse on 23-Aug-2020

That should be in the prime running for this contest. You've got my vote.