A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Mate"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
17 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
Nice reflection. I found the first verse, "yesterday become tomorrow reflected in today" was a very creative way of presenting the influence of our past over our today and even tomorrow. It could be a consolation in challenging times if the past had smiled at us. Accept my regards.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Nice reflection. I found the first verse, "yesterday become tomorrow reflected in today" was a very creative way of presenting the influence of our past over our today and even tomorrow. It could be a consolation in challenging times if the past had smiled at us. Accept my regards.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Thanks a lot for the review. So appreciated.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
I'm so amazed at the quality and crafting of your poetry. It doesn't need a supporting photo, or background colors. The gracious treatment of the subject. The artful way that doves and mosquitoes are drawn into the atmosphere of comparison with the writer's situation. Who ever thought of mosquitoes wearing sunglasses to hide eyes swollen from crying! The dove's prophetic mourning cries. Woven throughout the activities of daily living in which the abnormal has become the new normal. Mourning the loss of intimacy.
So beautiful. So meaningful to readers who have walked this road, and also to those who have not walked this road.
Well done!
Lucy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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I'm so amazed at the quality and crafting of your poetry. It doesn't need a supporting photo, or background colors. The gracious treatment of the subject. The artful way that doves and mosquitoes are drawn into the atmosphere of comparison with the writer's situation. Who ever thought of mosquitoes wearing sunglasses to hide eyes swollen from crying! The dove's prophetic mourning cries. Woven throughout the activities of daily living in which the abnormal has become the new normal. Mourning the loss of intimacy.
So beautiful. So meaningful to readers who have walked this road, and also to those who have not walked this road.
Well done!
Lucy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Lucy, I feel overwhelmed by your praise of my poem. Of course, the six stars are wonderful, but your words are worth even more. Thank you very much for this beautiful review. I have nomiinated you before, and cannot do it again in the same month, but I would have loved it!
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon,
Wonderful symbolism of animals with lost mates from bird to mosquito. We can only guess what they think. Elephants mourn like people. This is very deep about your loss.
Have a good weekend.
Good luck,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Marjon,
Wonderful symbolism of animals with lost mates from bird to mosquito. We can only guess what they think. Elephants mourn like people. This is very deep about your loss.
Have a good weekend.
Good luck,
Cindy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Cindy, thank you for this review.
Comment from estory
The image of the dove was very poignant as a symbol of love, almost like a feeble sense of love. Like a memory of love. That line where you talk about becoming your husband's mother speaks volumes about the change in role you have to make to take care of someone who has Alzheimer's. They become babies who need to be fed, washed, watched. The last line was also great i think. The sigh of the sun. The tick tock of the clock as time goes by wearily. estory
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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The image of the dove was very poignant as a symbol of love, almost like a feeble sense of love. Like a memory of love. That line where you talk about becoming your husband's mother speaks volumes about the change in role you have to make to take care of someone who has Alzheimer's. They become babies who need to be fed, washed, watched. The last line was also great i think. The sigh of the sun. The tick tock of the clock as time goes by wearily. estory
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the review and the praise, Estory.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Mate
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Thank God for the little breaks in peace. I like the way you describe your world. It's sad that he panicked when he woke up alone.
Well done.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Mate
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Thank God for the little breaks in peace. I like the way you describe your world. It's sad that he panicked when he woke up alone.
Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Gypsy, thanks for the revview.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. There's nothing more to do but to keep caring and nurturing a once loved one now like a child who depends on you to take care if him every moment he is awake.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. There's nothing more to do but to keep caring and nurturing a once loved one now like a child who depends on you to take care if him every moment he is awake.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Sandra, for this kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The sound of the dove can be eerily desolate, copying the feelings that are spiralling out of control. Your change in relationship, from being wife and then mother, that's hard. Your journal is so well documented of those times, Marjon, it must hurt remembering each step, yet, freeing at the same time. Another sad but heartfelt part in your upside down life. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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The sound of the dove can be eerily desolate, copying the feelings that are spiralling out of control. Your change in relationship, from being wife and then mother, that's hard. Your journal is so well documented of those times, Marjon, it must hurt remembering each step, yet, freeing at the same time. Another sad but heartfelt part in your upside down life. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Sandra, once again I thank you for your kind reviews.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Marjon :)
I enjoyed reading your poem -
The themes of time and tears.
Time passing slowly and repetitively is barely punctuated by the ooh....ooh of the crying dove. I like how you did that. Also the ending line about allowing the clock to tick - an effective way to bring your poem to a close.
I also enjoyed your in-depth musing on the tears of the mosquito. Having time allows us to think deeper.
The likening of your husband to a child - such a clear and true comparison. I remember my grandad being very child-like towards the end of his illness.
Thank you for sharing another well written and moving poem.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello Marjon :)
I enjoyed reading your poem -
The themes of time and tears.
Time passing slowly and repetitively is barely punctuated by the ooh....ooh of the crying dove. I like how you did that. Also the ending line about allowing the clock to tick - an effective way to bring your poem to a close.
I also enjoyed your in-depth musing on the tears of the mosquito. Having time allows us to think deeper.
The likening of your husband to a child - such a clear and true comparison. I remember my grandad being very child-like towards the end of his illness.
Thank you for sharing another well written and moving poem.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Debra, I so appreciated and liked your detailed review and understanding voice. Thank you so much.
Comment from amada
Beautiful and tender musings about those days when someone is there, but not entirely there. It reflects so well your strong character and your love for this man, just a shell of who he was.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Beautiful and tender musings about those days when someone is there, but not entirely there. It reflects so well your strong character and your love for this man, just a shell of who he was.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Amada, thanks for your warm review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is so sad. You hear the dove crying for its mate and you remember you own mate, gone for all the reasons he was you mate. You kill a mosquito and it reminds you of death and you wonder if he will be missed. The sun feels good but you know it is so temporary. You'll have to go back to being there for him. Sometimes we grieve more while they are still alive. I went through that in 2017, It reminds me of my own pain.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is so sad. You hear the dove crying for its mate and you remember you own mate, gone for all the reasons he was you mate. You kill a mosquito and it reminds you of death and you wonder if he will be missed. The sun feels good but you know it is so temporary. You'll have to go back to being there for him. Sometimes we grieve more while they are still alive. I went through that in 2017, It reminds me of my own pain.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Beth, thanks for your beautiful review. I am sorry if I caused you suffering now.
