Between Friends (Part-5 of 6)
Request for first date.27 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
What a wild ride! Witty imagery abounds--damaged goods--bionic libido. If Leslie only knew! This is hugely entertaining. Cheers. LIZ (You should flag this for sexual content--prissy StoryLanders may purport to find it offensive--as they devour every salacious morsel.)
Typos: clinch s/b clench; lays on the horn s/b leans on; allover his body s/b all over; in route s/b en route; last-weeks fiasco s/b last week's
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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What a wild ride! Witty imagery abounds--damaged goods--bionic libido. If Leslie only knew! This is hugely entertaining. Cheers. LIZ (You should flag this for sexual content--prissy StoryLanders may purport to find it offensive--as they devour every salacious morsel.)
Typos: clinch s/b clench; lays on the horn s/b leans on; allover his body s/b all over; in route s/b en route; last-weeks fiasco s/b last week's
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello, Liz,
They need a flag for mature content. I intentionally left out any real sexual content and erotica, and only hinted around enough to what was coming and what had happened, but no graphic details. I thought about a sexual/erotic label, but I also didn't want to scare readers away for nothing even as graphic as a local newspaper. That said, I'll probably get in trouble or complained against. Although, the reason I skipped all the juicy stuff is to not be offensive to anyone. Thanks for another outstanding review, comments, and corrections. Your advice, suggestions, and continued support are greatly appreciated!
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On the contrary--if you flag it you'll get MANY more readers!
I can attest to that: Since there is no flag for sacrilegious material--i.e. most of mine--I flag for offensive language, in a naïve attempt to screen out the pious (HAH!) Then, WRIT LARGE in bold red on yellow background--I preface the piece urging Christians to pass on account of the blasphemy. Guess who most of my readers were.
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I'm not caring about how many readers I get. I just tried so hard to not give too many details and keep it from being sexually graphic or erotic, yet still let readers know there was more than a handshake.
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A handshake was the last thing that came to my dirty mind.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ric Myworld,
Nice piece in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the triangle 'Brad, Olivia, and Leslie' making use of imagery such as "Olivia laughs hysterically, like a thrill-seeking teenager on an amusement park ride" at several places.
Of course, Impressive and Interesting!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello Ric Myworld,
Nice piece in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the triangle 'Brad, Olivia, and Leslie' making use of imagery such as "Olivia laughs hysterically, like a thrill-seeking teenager on an amusement park ride" at several places.
Of course, Impressive and Interesting!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello, RPSaxena,
I can't thank you enough for hanging in with my wild and crazy goofball story that I'm sure isn't on your preferred reading itinerary. I wanted to do the over-exaggerated, simile-laden character spoof with twisted context to get outside my comfort zone. And I must say, as I tried to get the sex points across without drifting into the erotic, it was a struggle. LOL. I hope you like where the story goes from here. As always, your wonderful reviews and kind words are greatly appreciated!
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Hi Ric Myworld, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Good read! You brought the reader along until the end, wanting to know how Brad would make it right with Leslie after the debauched last few days. Enjoyed the description of the car ride and the house. Fun read. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Good read! You brought the reader along until the end, wanting to know how Brad would make it right with Leslie after the debauched last few days. Enjoyed the description of the car ride and the house. Fun read. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello, my friend, H Darwin Reeves, thanks for joining in for chapter five. This is an over-exaggerated, simile-laden character spoof. Every chapter is different and it takes all six to separate the jest from reality. I appreciate you kind words and generous review!
Comment from Robert Reischl
True very true, love is idea we hope comes true and never ends --the voice of experience. Is this something that mirrors actual events, but with some fictional flourishes thrown in?
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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True very true, love is idea we hope comes true and never ends --the voice of experience. Is this something that mirrors actual events, but with some fictional flourishes thrown in?
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello, Robert Reischi, and thank you so much for joining in for part five of my six-part story. Every chapter is different and it takes all six-parts to separate the jest from reality. I can't believe I'm going to admit this but, there is more truth in this than I care to admit. Primarily why I turned it into more of an over-exaggerated, simile-laden character spoof for fun. LOL. I appreciate you joining in. Thanks again.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
So, Brad is trying to make up with Lesley, fixing a date to have dinner with friends, after what happened three days in a row with Olivia???? Hmmm
Olivia is a downright nymphomaniac, but Brad fell for it and he should have known better,
Olivia spells trouble, dear boy. It is not over yet, and he'll find out.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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So, Brad is trying to make up with Lesley, fixing a date to have dinner with friends, after what happened three days in a row with Olivia???? Hmmm
Olivia is a downright nymphomaniac, but Brad fell for it and he should have known better,
Olivia spells trouble, dear boy. It is not over yet, and he'll find out.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Marjon vanBruggen, for hanging in there with my wild and crazy story. Brad is definitely in way over his head with Olivia. He has made a foolish mistake that, I hope he learns from and it doesn't mess up his whole life. I appreciate your comments and generous review! I hope you like where the story goes from here. Thanks again.
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Welcome to the review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Wow, those driving scenes were exciting and dangerous. I thought any minute now they would crash. You did a good job with this chapter. Olivia must be one who made a lot of money somewhere, somehow, but she really is a 'player.' Hopefully, Brad will see that. Leslie acted hurt but she really wasn't. I'm glad they will go together to the dinner as Brad had agreed to earlier. Hopefully, Olivia won't show. But that place is probably below her.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Wow, those driving scenes were exciting and dangerous. I thought any minute now they would crash. You did a good job with this chapter. Olivia must be one who made a lot of money somewhere, somehow, but she really is a 'player.' Hopefully, Brad will see that. Leslie acted hurt but she really wasn't. I'm glad they will go together to the dinner as Brad had agreed to earlier. Hopefully, Olivia won't show. But that place is probably below her.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Jan, for hanging in with my wild and crazy story. Brad sure did get in over his head with Olivia, you just have to hope he learns from his mistake for the future. LOL. I appreciate your kind words and generous review. I hope you enjoy where the story goes from here.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I just hope Olivia doesn't show up at the restaurant and put the kybosh on his relationship with Leslie. I don't think Olivia is the right girl for him, she'd kill him after a week!! Lol. Well, that was a hell of a date for Brad. I'm wondering, did he enjoy it? Not sure about that! Well done, Ric, one more to go. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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I just hope Olivia doesn't show up at the restaurant and put the kybosh on his relationship with Leslie. I don't think Olivia is the right girl for him, she'd kill him after a week!! Lol. Well, that was a hell of a date for Brad. I'm wondering, did he enjoy it? Not sure about that! Well done, Ric, one more to go. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello, Sandra, my dear, this one was really hard to get the points across without writing something farther outside my comfort zone than I was willing to go. Which it did to a degree. I tried my best to just hit around the edges without any real details. I hope it isn't offensive to anyone, especially, you. Thanks for hanging in with a story that I'm sure isn't your preferred reading. LOL. I'll post the ending on Sunday and be done with it. I appreciate YOU!
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You have no worries about this part, Ric. It was left to the readers imagination, which is the way it should be, and is so much better than a step by step tell all rendition. I'm looking forward to the last episode. :)) xx
