Between Friends (Part-5 of 6)
Request for first date.27 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
My comments have been eaten twice. Aaron is Olivia's fiancee obviously. Why else set it up? As grownups do not like Leslie mentions , double date on a first date. And, although Aaron mjght forgive Brad for humping Olivia their relationship will never be quite the same. And, Leslie? Well she will have a hrad believing that all he was thinking about was her, while he had maratho sex with her all weekend. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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My comments have been eaten twice. Aaron is Olivia's fiancee obviously. Why else set it up? As grownups do not like Leslie mentions , double date on a first date. And, although Aaron mjght forgive Brad for humping Olivia their relationship will never be quite the same. And, Leslie? Well she will have a hrad believing that all he was thinking about was her, while he had maratho sex with her all weekend. Karen
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Well, people do the dumbest things, what can I say. And when it comes to sex with strangers, most of us have fell victim or conquistador at some point in life. But did a one-night stand ever mean anything? Not too many I'm sure. But one mistake can affect the rest of lives and those we care about. :-) Much appreciated!
Comment from lyenochka
But does Leslie know about Olivia and Brad's three-night love fest? I would think that would have put an end to the dinner date proposal. It's an odd thing to want a date to show off to his friend. I think Leslie is right to question the setup. Great descriptions here, especially about Olivia's driving. Brad should have known he was in for something!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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But does Leslie know about Olivia and Brad's three-night love fest? I would think that would have put an end to the dinner date proposal. It's an odd thing to want a date to show off to his friend. I think Leslie is right to question the setup. Great descriptions here, especially about Olivia's driving. Brad should have known he was in for something!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thanks so much, Helen, for taking time to read part-5 of my silly, overexaggerated, simile laden story. I should have written this as a short book, because every chapter is different, and no one chapter means anything unless they are all read in sequence. Chapter-6 explains chapter-5. No one chapter is worth a darn without the chapters before and after. And even then, it's all just fun and games. Of all the things you could have chosen to read, this might be the least likely bring you back for more. LOL. But it's a sweet gesture, like those you bestow upon us every day. I appreciate YOU!
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You are so gracious in reviewing my posts so I had to go look for something of yours. My choice in that post was because it had 25 reviews. You needed just one more for an ATB!
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That is very sweet of you and greatly appreciated! If you can believe it, I had not idea how many reviews it had. :-)
Comment from justafan
I purposely picked this to review in the hopes that making the ALL TIME mark will make up for not putting money on my last post that you reviewed.
It is the first of this series I have read and I thoroughly enjoyed Brad's misadventure with Olivia.
Thanks for sharing.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
(I will return tomorrow to upgrade) :)
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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I purposely picked this to review in the hopes that making the ALL TIME mark will make up for not putting money on my last post that you reviewed.
It is the first of this series I have read and I thoroughly enjoyed Brad's misadventure with Olivia.
Thanks for sharing.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
(I will return tomorrow to upgrade) :)
Comment Written 22-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Missy, for taking time to read part 5 of my six part story. Every chapter is quite different from the next and doesn't make much sense without each being read in succession. Although stolen from real life, as most fiction is, it's mainly an overly exaggerated, simile-laden farce just for fun. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging review!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Olivia new girl in town that fall on Brad's radar and restarts his love life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Olivia new girl in town that fall on Brad's radar and restarts his love life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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I'm happy to see you've kept reading and hope the chapter-six finale will bring everything together for you. I appreciate your kind words and generous review, and your smiling face! :-)
Comment from JennaG
Wow! Olivia is quite the wild woman, isn't she!? I like that Brad was still thinking about Leslie even after his time with Olivia. I'm rooting for Brad and Leslie! Moving on to the next part to find out what happens... :) Great job with this!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Wow! Olivia is quite the wild woman, isn't she!? I like that Brad was still thinking about Leslie even after his time with Olivia. I'm rooting for Brad and Leslie! Moving on to the next part to find out what happens... :) Great job with this!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Yes, Olivia is the one you've always been warned to avoid, but few can resist. I tried my best to keep all the real naughty and graphic details out of my story, but had to slip in enough to get the points across. Thank you so much for hanging in there with my questionable story. LOL. I always look forward to your thoughts and encouraging reviews. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Ayan3
This was amazing and it was the best thing I have ever read and it made me want to write even more. I hope you make more like this.
Sincerely, Ayan
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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This was amazing and it was the best thing I have ever read and it made me want to write even more. I hope you make more like this.
Sincerely, Ayan
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Hello, Ayan3, and thank you so much for reading parts five and six of my story. This is a six part story that I've posted over the last two weeks. It is really meant to be read one part after the other 1- 6, since it takes all six parts to really make all the pieces of the puzzle fit, and separate the jest from reality. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. And most of all, I'm glad it has motivated you to write even more. Encouragement like yours is the only thing that has kept me plugging alone and trying to get better. Thanks, again!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
You may not like some of the interpretations made in my review.
-A past to present tense change from Previous Chapter to this portion occurs.
-Seems Olivia better pay closer attention to her carefree racing out of parking structures before she kills herself and or someone else. Her Valley Girl mentality is well displayed by her laughing at this near miss and displays her mental warpness.
-puke in floorboard should be puke on floorboard.
-tick off should be tick of 70.
-tongues switches should be tongue switches
-Bet Brad is in LaLaland when Olivia pulls into her spread. Probably much finer duds than Brad's ever seen before, but which also appears overly described.
-Seems like the obvious highfaluting witch she is, Olivia has played the sex kitten game many times before. Smacks of Hollywood.
-Parts of this section seem out of character for the orange juice-drinking ways Brad had in earlier chapters.
-The suction cup simile should be much more tightly written. Tends to ramble and lose effectiveness.
-For being mad at Brad, Leslie tends to cave in rather easily.
-Now on to Part Six and see how this all ties in together at the conclusion. I think I have a good idea, but...
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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You may not like some of the interpretations made in my review.
-A past to present tense change from Previous Chapter to this portion occurs.
-Seems Olivia better pay closer attention to her carefree racing out of parking structures before she kills herself and or someone else. Her Valley Girl mentality is well displayed by her laughing at this near miss and displays her mental warpness.
-puke in floorboard should be puke on floorboard.
-tick off should be tick of 70.
-tongues switches should be tongue switches
-Bet Brad is in LaLaland when Olivia pulls into her spread. Probably much finer duds than Brad's ever seen before, but which also appears overly described.
-Seems like the obvious highfaluting witch she is, Olivia has played the sex kitten game many times before. Smacks of Hollywood.
-Parts of this section seem out of character for the orange juice-drinking ways Brad had in earlier chapters.
-The suction cup simile should be much more tightly written. Tends to ramble and lose effectiveness.
-For being mad at Brad, Leslie tends to cave in rather easily.
-Now on to Part Six and see how this all ties in together at the conclusion. I think I have a good idea, but...
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Hello, Brett Mathew, and thank for hanging in there with my wild and crazy story. Most all of this chapter is first person like all the other; however, there is one section that is intentionally changed to past tense to reference the three-nights before. Olivia is obviously out-of-control. Don't think for a minute that I don't appreciate every comment and suggestion you make, and more times than not, I make the changes immediately. However, there are quite a few this time that I don't necessarily agree with. I like puke in the floorboard, just as I would prefer puke on the floor mat. I also, prefer a tick off (which means a tick before or after), rather than tick of 70. You aren't the first person who thinks Olivia's house is over described, but the description isn't just about the house, it's intended to show more of why she is the way she is, and her other half. The out-of-character ways Brad is acting for the week is because of Leslie, so yes, he isn't drinking orange juice and is taking a step on the wild side. I am changing the tongues to tongue mistake and the suction cup sentence now. Yes, Leslie gives in easily, but she likes him enough she's willing to give it a try.
Thank you so much for all the time you spend helping to point out my goof ups.
Comment from equestrik
Even though I read in the wrong order this was still interesting and descriptive. Good writing. This filled in some of what I was missing and gave a look at the whole Olivia thing:).
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Even though I read in the wrong order this was still interesting and descriptive. Good writing. This filled in some of what I was missing and gave a look at the whole Olivia thing:).
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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I'm so happy to see you came back and finished up the story and I hope you enjoyed it. I'm a sucker for happily-ever-after, but I decided to let readers choose how they wanted the story to end. Thank you so much for hanging in there. I appreciate your kind words and generous review!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Ric, I somehow missed out on this chapter. I thought I'd read it but I was mistaken. Anyway, the man is exhausted. Hmm!, but now he's got a second chance with Lesley. A bit spoiled for choice isn't he? For some reason, I'm not impressed. LOL. Great writing, though. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Hi Ric, I somehow missed out on this chapter. I thought I'd read it but I was mistaken. Anyway, the man is exhausted. Hmm!, but now he's got a second chance with Lesley. A bit spoiled for choice isn't he? For some reason, I'm not impressed. LOL. Great writing, though. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Ulla, I hadn't realized you didn't read this part. Darn! LOL. That takes away a little of part sixes punch. He was definitely in over his head with Olivia in this chapter, creating a lot more to hide in chapter six. Oh, well, it's always nice to have you around any time. Thanks a million. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
Well, that was a wild ride! I missed the first 4 chapters, so I just read them to catch up. I'm trying to figure out what's Olivia's deal. Does she really live alone in that huge house with a 60' bar? Is there "another" reason for her to have a room with robes and slippers in all sizes? I'm figuring she's married to a professional athlete who's on the road a lot or to someone who owns his own VERY successful business (you know, like Amazon) and travels a lot. For someone who drinks orange juice in bars, Brad knows his liquor... Can't wait to read the next part!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Well, that was a wild ride! I missed the first 4 chapters, so I just read them to catch up. I'm trying to figure out what's Olivia's deal. Does she really live alone in that huge house with a 60' bar? Is there "another" reason for her to have a room with robes and slippers in all sizes? I'm figuring she's married to a professional athlete who's on the road a lot or to someone who owns his own VERY successful business (you know, like Amazon) and travels a lot. For someone who drinks orange juice in bars, Brad knows his liquor... Can't wait to read the next part!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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This is one of those stories that takes each chapter to make all the puzzle pieces fit. To separate the jest from reality. Everything will all come together in chapter six. Even where all the money for the $400,000 car and the house come from. If you've gone back to read all those chapters, I could give you a great big hug and a peck on the forehead. But then, you would probably never come back again. LOL. I do hope if you read all those you wouldn't mind dropping me a one line review to let me know what you think. And of course, it adds toward twenty five. I've been away so long from the site, there are few who remember me, and quite a few have sadly passed. LOL. Thank you so much, Melissa, for taking so much time to catch up on my wild and crazy farce. Your comments and generous review are greatly appreciated! Sorry for the novella. LOL.
