American Slums
2/4/6 poem15 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
Interesting. I would love to know where the picture is from?
You have met the requirements of this contest.
Best of luck in the 2-4-6 Poem writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Interesting. I would love to know where the picture is from?
You have met the requirements of this contest.
Best of luck in the 2-4-6 Poem writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello RShipp, I appreciate your time and the kind review, thank you; got the picture from Google images.
Comment from victor 66
I agree, we spend so much money on so many things and yet we do not take care of our homeless or even pretend to. I don't know how we can take care of others when as of yet we haven't taken care of ourselves. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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I agree, we spend so much money on so many things and yet we do not take care of our homeless or even pretend to. I don't know how we can take care of others when as of yet we haven't taken care of ourselves. Best wishes.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello friend, I appreciate your time and the insights, thank you.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the 2/4/6 Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Good job with the presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the 2/4/6 Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Good job with the presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello Gypsy, my friend, I appreciate your visit and am glad that you like the poem, I thank you.
Comment from jaded831
Many things are coming to light. We must help the forgotten. Although I hate all the violence, I am grateful people are now aware of many problems that must be addressed. Your poem is timely and expresses a problem we need to solve.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Many things are coming to light. We must help the forgotten. Although I hate all the violence, I am grateful people are now aware of many problems that must be addressed. Your poem is timely and expresses a problem we need to solve.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello friend, very kind of you to visit; I appreciate your time and the thoughtful review, thank you.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer you fulfilled the required lines and syllables for the contest and your title was explained well in your 3 line poem. I wish you do well in the contest. Its a pitty but slums will always be because unfortunately there are those in life that have mindsets that settle for where they are.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Writer you fulfilled the required lines and syllables for the contest and your title was explained well in your 3 line poem. I wish you do well in the contest. Its a pitty but slums will always be because unfortunately there are those in life that have mindsets that settle for where they are.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello Mary, I appreciate your visit and am glad that you like the poem, I thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are poor people in America just like the rest of the world, society is unequal and the divide will widen after this pandemic, the economy will be the worst it has ever been in our lifetime, food for thought here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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There are poor people in America just like the rest of the world, society is unequal and the divide will widen after this pandemic, the economy will be the worst it has ever been in our lifetime, food for thought here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Dolly my friend, I appreciate your thoughtful comments and thank you very much for stopping by.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the 2-4-6 poetry writing prompt. This truth is right on the mark. I sure hope it does well in the contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is a great entry for the 2-4-6 poetry writing prompt. This truth is right on the mark. I sure hope it does well in the contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello Rebecca, I thank you for stopping by; appreciate your time and the kind comments.
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You're quite welcome!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a good topic to address. It is as you know, a perpetual problem. I like your play on the word "oversight". What is the purpose of an oversight committee anyway? What a strange word for them, unless their role is to be neglectful. Well expressed.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is a good topic to address. It is as you know, a perpetual problem. I like your play on the word "oversight". What is the purpose of an oversight committee anyway? What a strange word for them, unless their role is to be neglectful. Well expressed.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hi Liz, I appreciate your time and the wonderful insights, thank you very much.
Comment from angel123
Your 2-4-6 poem is well written ad well received. It rhymes well and flows with meaning and truth. I enjoyed reading it and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Your 2-4-6 poem is well written ad well received. It rhymes well and flows with meaning and truth. I enjoyed reading it and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello friend and thank you for your time and wonderful review; I am pleased you like it.
Comment from LisaMay
Oooops! According to the contest rules, the 3 lines each have to rhyme.
Your topic is a strong one, pointing out the paradox of America regarding itself as a top nation of power and affluence. How can this be true when slums and abject poverty cast slurs on this reputation?
Your title runs on to the rest of the poem but that is not immediately apparent as it looks like you have not finished writing it. Because there is such a gap between the title and the body of the poem, and readers may have spent time looking at the photo before reading the rest of the poem, I do not think it is effective.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Oooops! According to the contest rules, the 3 lines each have to rhyme.
Your topic is a strong one, pointing out the paradox of America regarding itself as a top nation of power and affluence. How can this be true when slums and abject poverty cast slurs on this reputation?
Your title runs on to the rest of the poem but that is not immediately apparent as it looks like you have not finished writing it. Because there is such a gap between the title and the body of the poem, and readers may have spent time looking at the photo before reading the rest of the poem, I do not think it is effective.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Like I said my friend, just turned 70 and feeling it too; I am afraid, there'll be plenty of "Ooops" given my age, and health issues; but then, these are facts of life. I thank you for your kindness and excellent take on this write.
