A Shadow On The Street
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Beginning of the End"One man's blessing can be another's curse.
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Comment from JudyE
Your description of the stroke that is affecting Lew is well-handled. I wonder if he will be found before he passes away.
Just a couple of minor glitches:
my right-hand shakes - delete hyphen
I make it two steps to the desk dragging my left side - comma needed after 'desk'
Not only do my toes curl, but my left ankle and foot curves inward - should be 'curve inward'
I hope you and yours are able to stay safe from COVID. We are very lucky in Western Australia and are virtually back to normal.
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Your description of the stroke that is affecting Lew is well-handled. I wonder if he will be found before he passes away.
Just a couple of minor glitches:
my right-hand shakes - delete hyphen
I make it two steps to the desk dragging my left side - comma needed after 'desk'
Not only do my toes curl, but my left ankle and foot curves inward - should be 'curve inward'
I hope you and yours are able to stay safe from COVID. We are very lucky in Western Australia and are virtually back to normal.
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi, Judy. I never knew you were from Australia. Many thanks for your kind words and help with this chapter. A couple more to go.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from equestrik
I have not read the previous chapters but I sensed at the first that this was some kind of religious cult that was being dealt with, I was a victim of religious abuse so it drew me in. I am not sure what was happening at the end but the writing is good.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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I have not read the previous chapters but I sensed at the first that this was some kind of religious cult that was being dealt with, I was a victim of religious abuse so it drew me in. I am not sure what was happening at the end but the writing is good.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, I am sad to read the end will come for Lew and his efforts to make the world a better place. I have enjoyed the story very much, Mike. He did a wonderful job helping those in need. His journey is almost over. Tell us more. Well done. Nancy. :>)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Oh, I am sad to read the end will come for Lew and his efforts to make the world a better place. I have enjoyed the story very much, Mike. He did a wonderful job helping those in need. His journey is almost over. Tell us more. Well done. Nancy. :>)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Hi, Nancy. Thank you for the kind words and for those shiny stars. We have one more chapter and an epilogue to go. Your support is amazing and I can't thank you enough!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
I thought this was a super chapter, well worth the wait. Your descriptions of the stroke that claims Lew is so full of detail, we feel the pain he is in, we feel his fingers and arms curling up, we feel him rolling off the couch and falling to the floor and we see the hazy light around him forming heavenly and then earthly scenes. The feeling of physically present through his last hours is really strong. Through it all Lew hangs onto his faith, and the presence of the Lord in his last moments is a great testament to that faith and the committment of God to be with us no matter what, even to the end of our lives. I thought the end was superb where Kathy begins to realize from the evidence that Lew has had a stroke and we feel that emotional sense of loss in her. There's plenty of emotion, plenty of faith, plenty of hope and pain here. A great job with this final chapter. Good luck with it. Try Westbow press. estory
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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I thought this was a super chapter, well worth the wait. Your descriptions of the stroke that claims Lew is so full of detail, we feel the pain he is in, we feel his fingers and arms curling up, we feel him rolling off the couch and falling to the floor and we see the hazy light around him forming heavenly and then earthly scenes. The feeling of physically present through his last hours is really strong. Through it all Lew hangs onto his faith, and the presence of the Lord in his last moments is a great testament to that faith and the committment of God to be with us no matter what, even to the end of our lives. I thought the end was superb where Kathy begins to realize from the evidence that Lew has had a stroke and we feel that emotional sense of loss in her. There's plenty of emotion, plenty of faith, plenty of hope and pain here. A great job with this final chapter. Good luck with it. Try Westbow press. estory
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words and for those shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great story telling in detail how Lew is thinking, feeling and reacting to his present condition. It is very well written and is intriguing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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This is a great story telling in detail how Lew is thinking, feeling and reacting to his present condition. It is very well written and is intriguing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hi, Rebecca. Thank you for your kind words. That's why I like to write in first-person.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You're very welcome!
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very interesting story but I'd missed part of it. I see that Lew is doing work that God has for him to do in spite of the fact aht he has a horrible tumor or physical condition that is turing his body into something that well no longer work. I think because of the condition his brain as revealed thing that only he can know. There is an invisible presence that steps in and helps him when he is unable to help himself. I hope to read more and understand it better.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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This is a very interesting story but I'd missed part of it. I see that Lew is doing work that God has for him to do in spite of the fact aht he has a horrible tumor or physical condition that is turing his body into something that well no longer work. I think because of the condition his brain as revealed thing that only he can know. There is an invisible presence that steps in and helps him when he is unable to help himself. I hope to read more and understand it better.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great das and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
I can remember Lew. He had the power to hear from God, because he has a tumour in his head. I would normally have theological questions but, who knows? There is phenomena out there we cannot answer, one can never question God. He does what He does. I love being in the mind of Lew, dealing with pride, as he tries to make it on his own, well done Mike, blessings, Roy
Typo : tighten in my left arm (h)as before
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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I can remember Lew. He had the power to hear from God, because he has a tumour in his head. I would normally have theological questions but, who knows? There is phenomena out there we cannot answer, one can never question God. He does what He does. I love being in the mind of Lew, dealing with pride, as he tries to make it on his own, well done Mike, blessings, Roy
Typo : tighten in my left arm (h)as before
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this chapter. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a grerat day and God bless.
mike
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Well done
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Wish you good luck and safe living and your early finish of this book; I like this stressful chapter and have enjoyed the tough challenging; good standardized plot development; good beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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The Begining (Beginning) of the End
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Wish you good luck and safe living and your early finish of this book; I like this stressful chapter and have enjoyed the tough challenging; good standardized plot development; good beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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The Begining (Beginning) of the End
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from roof35
This is well written but certainly sad. I did note a typo you might want to fix. You typed, "HAS the tentacles grow." Maybe "AS the tentacles grow." You possible left out a word. "If this the end." Maybe "If this IS the end." Otherwise, nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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This is well written but certainly sad. I did note a typo you might want to fix. You typed, "HAS the tentacles grow." Maybe "AS the tentacles grow." You possible left out a word. "If this the end." Maybe "If this IS the end." Otherwise, nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for for your kind words and help with this story. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
A very touching chapter of this remarkable story of Lew and the process of dying, fully consciously having a stroke, but helped by the Lord tho hide like a wounded animal in a dark place, so Kathy won't be frightened.
Wonderful writing and a beautiful testimony of God's love.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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A very touching chapter of this remarkable story of Lew and the process of dying, fully consciously having a stroke, but helped by the Lord tho hide like a wounded animal in a dark place, so Kathy won't be frightened.
Wonderful writing and a beautiful testimony of God's love.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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Mike, you are welcome
