It Wasn't Amore
(598 words) A disastrous dinner date.31 total reviews
Comment from emmaysavage
I loved the humor in this description of a debacle. You have a real gift. It was easy to visualize the whole flight of fancy. Thank you for this one
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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I loved the humor in this description of a debacle. You have a real gift. It was easy to visualize the whole flight of fancy. Thank you for this one
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your complimentary review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written humorous story about a first date that went horribly wrong with a destroyed restaurant and a gentleman running for the hills from the lady he once thought can be a great catch.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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A very well-written humorous story about a first date that went horribly wrong with a destroyed restaurant and a gentleman running for the hills from the lady he once thought can be a great catch.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Lisa: I laughed till I cried! You don't just laugh out loud when you're alone, but this hit the old funny bone. I just knew half of this had to be fiction, nothing could be that bad! There was probably enough truth to embellish just a little to make it a knee slapper. Good job. You are great at this. Good going. I was going to enter something in this category, but no one can top this. I may try, but you have outdone yourself.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Lisa: I laughed till I cried! You don't just laugh out loud when you're alone, but this hit the old funny bone. I just knew half of this had to be fiction, nothing could be that bad! There was probably enough truth to embellish just a little to make it a knee slapper. Good job. You are great at this. Good going. I was going to enter something in this category, but no one can top this. I may try, but you have outdone yourself.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I like the image of you laughing out loud, having a private moment of hilarity. Thanks for the terrific review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, It Wasn't Amore, is hilarious and takes the meeting from what would be simply an uncomfortable situation, to one that might be told again and again around cocktail tables for generations by the witnesses of such a debacle.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This story, It Wasn't Amore, is hilarious and takes the meeting from what would be simply an uncomfortable situation, to one that might be told again and again around cocktail tables for generations by the witnesses of such a debacle.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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It's lucky those witnesses weren't involved in the mayhem. With a longer word count for my story I could have inflicted even more disasters on bystanders.
Comment from lyenochka
Here I was worried it was really going to be terribly awkward and embarrassing but you pulled out all the stops and here I'm chortling in the clinic with all these people around me. I think you'll win!0
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Here I was worried it was really going to be terribly awkward and embarrassing but you pulled out all the stops and here I'm chortling in the clinic with all these people around me. I think you'll win!0
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Chortling is a great word - I'll steal that. I think I'll change my snorts of laughter to chortling snorts - it goes with choking well.
Thanks very much for your review and especially for your pumps. xx
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You're most welcome! Glad you can use the word! ❤️
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I am pleased i could provide a chortle for you in sombre surroundings. The other people must think it strange. xx
Comment from amada
What a delightful true fun story. I could tell the embarrassment, and the gentleman caller flying away...The rest,of course, is a little far-fetched, but it reads very well.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What a delightful true fun story. I could tell the embarrassment, and the gentleman caller flying away...The rest,of course, is a little far-fetched, but it reads very well.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I was going to include that I laughed so hard my arse fell off, but that really would be far fetched as it is screwed on very well.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is truly comical. I can see how you developed the story from a basic non-fiction event. I laughed out loud. It couldn't get any worse. A very well-written humourous story. Good contest entry. Good luck.
Ralf
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This is truly comical. I can see how you developed the story from a basic non-fiction event. I laughed out loud. It couldn't get any worse. A very well-written humourous story. Good contest entry. Good luck.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I hope you didn't pee when you laughed out loud! If i had a longer word count i'm sure i could have made it a whole lot worse by including the rest of the diners in a chain of unfortunate events.
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Oh, no. No more!
Comment from Cindy Decker
Lisa, this is an excellent, humorous piece of fiction. I guess you can say, when it rains, it pours. Or a heavy dose of Murphy's Law.
Funny poem, Lisa.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Lisa, this is an excellent, humorous piece of fiction. I guess you can say, when it rains, it pours. Or a heavy dose of Murphy's Law.
Funny poem, Lisa.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Murphy has a lot to answer for. Glad you enjoyed this comic train of events.
Comment from Mark Valentine
The story seemed to build up momentum, like a runaway truck going downhill. I was thinking it was true for a while, then it got more and more ridiculous - finally, when the guy's eyeball fell out, I knew it was an intentional (and not unintentional) comedy. The fact that it felt real for a while is probably testament to the fact that I've been in those situations a time or two before.
A wonderfully funny story - thanks!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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The story seemed to build up momentum, like a runaway truck going downhill. I was thinking it was true for a while, then it got more and more ridiculous - finally, when the guy's eyeball fell out, I knew it was an intentional (and not unintentional) comedy. The fact that it felt real for a while is probably testament to the fact that I've been in those situations a time or two before.
A wonderfully funny story - thanks!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Yep, the brakes were well and truly missing on this runaway truck.
Some of it was true, but invention forms most of it.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This... would... be... so... funny.... in a movie aimed at say, the senior population. It is pretty timeless humor. I think it must have been mortifying to have something like this happen (the true part of it) and to have it just escalate, that is priceless. "Olive" your humor very much.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This... would... be... so... funny.... in a movie aimed at say, the senior population. It is pretty timeless humor. I think it must have been mortifying to have something like this happen (the true part of it) and to have it just escalate, that is priceless. "Olive" your humor very much.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your fun review and top rating. As I was writing it i could imagine it as a slapstick farce.
