Wisdom
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about how things we lost that make us feel defeated often are replaced by something else that bring back the joy in our lives and it us not always how we expect it to happen
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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A very well-written story about how things we lost that make us feel defeated often are replaced by something else that bring back the joy in our lives and it us not always how we expect it to happen
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your encouragements:)
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is a nice story with a wonderful moral about having faith and trust in Jesus. I especially like the ending: "... adventure ahead, my kitties."
I fell that the story could flow better. At first it sounded like your father and Pisa died in 2016 - but it turns out that is when your Dad got sick and Pisa did not pass until years later. The timing is unimportant to the point you are trying to make, that, miraculously, good things happened in your time of need. I would remove the references to dates.
Also, the word "virtually" threw me for a loop in the first reference. At first I thought you meant the literal meaning, which is almost but not quite. Much later it became clear you met the kitten on-line. It was confusing to me the way you switched back and forth.
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This is a nice story with a wonderful moral about having faith and trust in Jesus. I especially like the ending: "... adventure ahead, my kitties."
I fell that the story could flow better. At first it sounded like your father and Pisa died in 2016 - but it turns out that is when your Dad got sick and Pisa did not pass until years later. The timing is unimportant to the point you are trying to make, that, miraculously, good things happened in your time of need. I would remove the references to dates.
Also, the word "virtually" threw me for a loop in the first reference. At first I thought you meant the literal meaning, which is almost but not quite. Much later it became clear you met the kitten on-line. It was confusing to me the way you switched back and forth.
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the story. The author shows her feelings and emotions of her love for her father and her cat. She accepts reality and moves on to give her love to two new kitties. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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I like the story. The author shows her feelings and emotions of her love for her father and her cat. She accepts reality and moves on to give her love to two new kitties. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much:) it's hard but there is no other way, they will not us to stay in this state forever.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This biographical non-fiction speaks of your wisdom and how you think and experience living all these days and your attitude and welfare as well human attitude and services and prayed to God for humane living around the world; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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This biographical non-fiction speaks of your wisdom and how you think and experience living all these days and your attitude and welfare as well human attitude and services and prayed to God for humane living around the world; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much Mr. Toni:)
Comment from Mastery
Well written and heartfelt for sure, Iza. Obviously, this proved to be a very important day in your life and you expressed it very well. You are a cat lover for sure and the pain of your loss is felt in this writing. Bless you. Bob
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Well written and heartfelt for sure, Iza. Obviously, this proved to be a very important day in your life and you expressed it very well. You are a cat lover for sure and the pain of your loss is felt in this writing. Bless you. Bob
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
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You are so welcome, Iza
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the Share Your Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This is a great entry for the Share Your Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
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You're welcome.
Comment from Brad Bennett
Quite a story, Iza, you certainly had a difficult year. The loss of a father, even though you knew it was coming, and then the loss of a cherished pet is still heart bending. I lost my mother only a few months ago, I had a love-mostly hate relationship with her, but death's final verdict, brings the love forward. The miracle of the kitties is something to grab onto, I understand that. It's a life boat on a troubled sea.
On your page I would set your type, a size down, when it's that big, the kerning is tight and hard to read. I would go 14. Bye for now. Brad
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Quite a story, Iza, you certainly had a difficult year. The loss of a father, even though you knew it was coming, and then the loss of a cherished pet is still heart bending. I lost my mother only a few months ago, I had a love-mostly hate relationship with her, but death's final verdict, brings the love forward. The miracle of the kitties is something to grab onto, I understand that. It's a life boat on a troubled sea.
On your page I would set your type, a size down, when it's that big, the kerning is tight and hard to read. I would go 14. Bye for now. Brad
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much Mr. Brad and I am so sorry for your loss. No matter our relationship with our parents, once they are gone we can't make amendments and certainly we can bring them back.
Comment from estory
It's always great to hear the personal stories of those who illustrate this theme that when God closes one door, he opens another. What's great about this is that you tell these stories of visiting your dad and finding new kittens with so much detail that the moments come alive for us and we can share them with you. estory
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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It's always great to hear the personal stories of those who illustrate this theme that when God closes one door, he opens another. What's great about this is that you tell these stories of visiting your dad and finding new kittens with so much detail that the moments come alive for us and we can share them with you. estory
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review:) You are the best
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
First of all, Iza, I'm sorry for the loss of your beloved Dad and the kitty Pisa. Yes, they are with Go. You told your story well. I'm thrilled you were able to adopt the 2 kitties. I know how much they mean to you. God sent them to you. Your story is great although so poignant.
new adventures that awaits [ await ]
the cat run away [ran ]
a miracle will {would ] happen
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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First of all, Iza, I'm sorry for the loss of your beloved Dad and the kitty Pisa. Yes, they are with Go. You told your story well. I'm thrilled you were able to adopt the 2 kitties. I know how much they mean to you. God sent them to you. Your story is great although so poignant.
new adventures that awaits [ await ]
the cat run away [ran ]
a miracle will {would ] happen
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and please forgive me for my delay.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Touching story, lovely uplift at the end! Good luck. Cheers. LIZ (lost so much and gain....s/b GAINED; I know is not nothing new s/b I know there's nothing new; don't get me wrong (insert: PERIOD) I loved my Pisa; there where the signs s/b there WERE (omit: THE) signs; hoped that a miracle will happen s/b WOULD happen)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Touching story, lovely uplift at the end! Good luck. Cheers. LIZ (lost so much and gain....s/b GAINED; I know is not nothing new s/b I know there's nothing new; don't get me wrong (insert: PERIOD) I loved my Pisa; there where the signs s/b there WERE (omit: THE) signs; hoped that a miracle will happen s/b WOULD happen)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you Liz, and so sorry for my delay.
