Can You Pass the Ketchup, Please
My Life As A Gluttojn40 total reviews
Comment from Markie Doczi
I think this is a clever entry for the deadly sins contest. I wouldn't even have thought to write humor!
I love the title. And the last two lines are funny and sum up your point!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I think this is a clever entry for the deadly sins contest. I wouldn't even have thought to write humor!
I love the title. And the last two lines are funny and sum up your point!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think the first rule in any diet is to believe that you can do it and then you can move forward. There is so much obesity in the western world and it is choking everyone, but it is never too late to make a change, a fun poem about Gluttony, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I think the first rule in any diet is to believe that you can do it and then you can move forward. There is so much obesity in the western world and it is choking everyone, but it is never too late to make a change, a fun poem about Gluttony, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Dolly. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your rhyming couplets depict one just as you say. I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Writer. It was fun but still a bit serious. I do like all of the example you gave. Your picture is a good choice, too. Why does everything that tastes so great have to be so bad for you?
Check the spelling of 'gluttojn'-->glutton
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Your rhyming couplets depict one just as you say. I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Writer. It was fun but still a bit serious. I do like all of the example you gave. Your picture is a good choice, too. Why does everything that tastes so great have to be so bad for you?
Check the spelling of 'gluttojn'-->glutton
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Jan. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the deadly sin Gluttony that means we eat everything we can lay our hands on not because we are hungry but because we enjoy to eat no matter how fat we are getting.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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A very well-written poem about the deadly sin Gluttony that means we eat everything we can lay our hands on not because we are hungry but because we enjoy to eat no matter how fat we are getting.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Debra White
LOL - your last two lines got me spluttering my tea!
This is funny - I do enjoy light hearted reads.
Fun and well presented rhymed couplets.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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LOL - your last two lines got me spluttering my tea!
This is funny - I do enjoy light hearted reads.
Fun and well presented rhymed couplets.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Debra. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from Carlos' girl
Sorry, but you should win this contest. If not, I've still given you six stars.
Love this poem and like all great humorous poems, it ends with a bang! Good luck and keep bon writing
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Sorry, but you should win this contest. If not, I've still given you six stars.
Love this poem and like all great humorous poems, it ends with a bang! Good luck and keep bon writing
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the six star review. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from equestrik
This is a good write for the deadly sins contest. I can relate and often berate myself for the way I eat. I like that you could put humor to this. I don't think I could.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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This is a good write for the deadly sins contest. I can relate and often berate myself for the way I eat. I like that you could put humor to this. I don't think I could.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
So, besides being a glutton, you're also rude. *smile*
Welllll... I mean, everybody's gotta be something, right? At least you admit your faults. That's a step in the right direction.
Good luck! (In everything.) ha
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
So, besides being a glutton, you're also rude. *smile*
Welllll... I mean, everybody's gotta be something, right? At least you admit your faults. That's a step in the right direction.
Good luck! (In everything.) ha
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Robyn. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my story.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL (or yuck)!! :) ;) A fun collection of rhyming couplets for this contest! :) You definitely have some strong rhymes here, however, it is difficult to truly read through without starts/stops as the flow is quite 'bumpy'... You have the perfect pic there! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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LOL (or yuck)!! :) ;) A fun collection of rhyming couplets for this contest! :) You definitely have some strong rhymes here, however, it is difficult to truly read through without starts/stops as the flow is quite 'bumpy'... You have the perfect pic there! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
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Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a cute, humorous poem. I think it could be improved if each line was a little longer. The end rhymes are good, especially the last one, but the lines seem too abrupt somehow. That said I enjoyed reading it. The picture looks like me since lockdown.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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This is a cute, humorous poem. I think it could be improved if each line was a little longer. The end rhymes are good, especially the last one, but the lines seem too abrupt somehow. That said I enjoyed reading it. The picture looks like me since lockdown.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
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